Hey, Kayla! I had some time, so I figured I'd start transfering some of my CTF reviews :)
So I've been watching your progress on this on Twitter and I think the old forums too, so I'm beyond exciting to see that's it's as wonderful as I expected! I don't think I've read anything of yours before (which is a crime tbh), but I love the ideas you have about Sirius and I love how you've written him here! It's a shorter chapter, but we still get a real sense of who he is. He's obviously smart and talented enough to get through a more rigorous form of Auror training, but you do a really awesome job of setting up how young he is as well. It'd make sense for someone who is two years out of Hogwarts to be ancy doing straight desk work and filing report after report. Trust me, dude, I get it, I really do.
Oh, man, that twist (is it a twist? Imma call it a twist) hit me like a ton of bricks. I feel like I should have known that something like that was coming, but jesus, that was so awful. I love how we get the information the same way Sirius does. It really adds to the impact that it has on the reader, which is like a punch to the gut. I also love James' reactions to everything too, it felt really true to what we know about him from canon and otherwise.
Fantastic job, I look forward to coming back!
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With a last name like Weasley, Molly know that she’ll have to work hard to be taken seriously in the Quidditch world. Known for their top training program, Oakshaft Quidditch Academy will give her the push she needs to make the Montrose Magpies’ reserve team. But when another Quidditch Legacy just looks so good shirtless, Molly’s attention and desire to be the best wars with something new. Soon she’ll discover that leaving her last name at the door and her heart on the pitch might be more difficult than she anticipated.
Lesson #1: All’s fair in love and Quidditch
Hey, Lo! I had some free time so I figured I'd transfer some of my CTF reviews :)
Man oh man, has it been forever since I read this story and I'm just as in love as ever. First off, that Quidditch match? A work of goshdarn magnificence. I will admit to having written my fair share of Quidditch stories, but man, I've never written one that is as good as that. Honestly, it was probably better than the ones in canon because it was from the point of view of a Chaser not a Seeker. I know sometimes I find myself skimming Quidditch scenes because they get a bit repetitive, but in a story like this, there was so much there beyond just Quidditch. I felt like I got more a sense of everyone's personalities by the way that they that played, especially Minh and Viki (both of who I want to know so much more about rn).
Also, sidenote, man, I love Oliver Wood so gash darn much, it's ridiculous. He's one of those characters who I kind of forget about and then BAM there they are again. You really locked down his personality there, I like that he was the one to bring up Harry.
Also, I love love love love Viki. Can she be my best friend? Pretty please? She seems so sweet and nice and just the kind of person who I love. So we're going to be best friends now, k? Good :P
Absolutely in love with this story Lo! So good to be back!
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After a terrifying night in July, 1994, her life is changed forever. While Hogwarts hosts the TriWizard Tournament, Catherine Lawrence isolates herself into sleepless nights while she struggles to come to terms with her new reality. As she attempts to decipher if the voices and the ghosts haunting her are real or imaginary, Catherine fails to notice those who reach out. But Fred Weasley could be the one person to shed light into her fortress - if she can learn to let him in.
Okay, so I've been meaning to get back to this story for literal ages and I finally had free time last night.
Oh. My. God.
I don't know how I ever stopped in the middle of this??? You have such an amazing plot set up here. I need to know everything that happens like right now. I mean, not really, cause that would probably ruin the beautiful supense and tension that you've built up here. But still.
Your characters, man. Holy crap, they feel like such amazing, real people. You've written Cate and Rob's pain so vivdly, I can really feel what they're going through. Also, kudos to you for tackling the canon characters. Fred, George, Angelina, and Lee are some of the most intimidating characters to write imo and you absolutely nail them. Fred is one of my favorite HP characters and I love how you've characterized him.
Also, I see that Slow Burn tag and let me tell you, I am in it for the long haul (I am a sucker for Fred/OC which is where I think this is going *she says hopefully*). Bring it on! ;)
So happy to see you back here on this story!
Yay, thank you! I kind of struggle with setting up plot and storyline structure sometimes, so I'm glad the suspense and tension has been built up well. Things are gonna start spiraling pretty quick from here.
Oh god, I'm so intimidated writing them! But I'm glad they come across as true to their characters.
It is a very very slow burn. That's all I'll tell you :P (You might be on the right track though!)
Thanks for the lovely surprise review XD
Just stopping by to transfer the reviews I left this amazing story on HPFF! ;)
Hey, Jill! I'm so so so so so sorry that it's taken me so long to get to our swap, real life has just been hectic.
So I know that we agreed to a one chapter swap, but I am so hooked by this that I had to keep on reading. Your characters are so spot on, I love all of them. Speaking from experience, trying to write Fred and George is incredibly intimidating, but you pull it off amazingly. I really felt like I was reading the exact characters JK wrote about in her books. Seriously impressive.
You have such compelling characters here. From the little glimpses that we've seen of Tommy, he's already such a real character. I can see that he really does care about his sister in his own way and I love all of his little quirks as well s his apparent issues with the twins. I also love love love Cate. She's such an interesting and intriguing character with her own idiosyncrasies. While she may not be the most likable character, she certainly is a fantastic choice for an MC and PoV character. She has such a strong voice that really comes across on the page, it's wonderful!
I'm also so here for the plot you've set up. I have so many questions, but not in a bad way. I genuinely want to keep reading so I can learn more. What happened to Chris? Why did Cate and Rob have a big fallout? Why aren't Cate and Tommy closer? What're the twins' roles in all of this? You have me completely hooked, I can't wait to come back when you've updated :)
Thanks again for the swap!
Hi, Claire! No worries on the lateness!!
Ah, thank you so much for saying that about Fred and George! I really struggle with writing humor - especially for the Weasley twins - and am always afraid that it won't be as funny to other people. So thank you, that really means a lot!
And yes, Tommy does care about his sister, but as you said, in his own way - they just have a lot of things to deal with.
All fabulous questions! They will be revealed in due time, if I can get my stuff together long enough to write more of this for you all :)
Thank you again for your lovely review!
Heeeeyyyyy!!! Here with review 1 of 2 for our swap!
Okay, you know how I feel about this story, I've mentioned it repeatedly. But I love how real everything feels: the emotions, the characters, the dialogue. I get sucked into everything and find myself absolutely dying to know more about Cate and Rob and what happened over the summer between the three of them to cause the both of them to feel like it's their faults.
I'm so so happy that Cate has seemed to realize that her friends are there to help her. She needs someone to help her figure out everything that she's feeling and she certainly has enough people in her corner willing and able to be there for her.
And speaking of people being there for her...how long are you going to torture me with this slow burn???? I really don't care if Rob and Cate are destined to be endgame or not, Cate and Fred better happen soon or you will have a riot on your hands. I'm not kidding, I am so behind this ship, it's not even funny. Yes, Rob is the only one who truly knows what she's going through, but Fred is the kind of person she needs right this moment and it's killing me that they're not together already.
This next chapter better have the cutest Cate/Fred scene ever or I'll...something, you hear me?
I do know how you feel about this story, but I sitll like hearing it ;) One of my biggest concerns has always been to make sure everything feels real, so I'm glad that's coming across well. And, er, you're right about Cate and Rob: it is both of their faults. A lot of things happened and more will be revealed in due time. <3
Yes, it has taken her a WHILE, but babygirl is finally realizing that these people are here for her and want to make sure her life gets better.
This entire paragraph had me giggling, not going to lie. I'm so, so happy you're this frustrated and so behind this ship, though; that's kind of where I want you to be, and you're gonna love chapters, um, 13-16? Something to that effect. But yeah, you're gonna like 'em.
As far as the next chapter, well... maybe I should hide from you :P
Thanks for the lovely review!!
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Hey, Sam! I had some time and I figured I'd start to transfer all of my reviews from CTF :)
Honestly, this is one of the most beautifully written pieces of fiction I've ever read! The flow of it is absolutely incredible and the pacing works so perfectly. I know that this is short piece to begin with, but wow, it felt like I was only reading for two seconds! All of the metaphors and descriptions just move into each other so nicely! I honestly wish my descriptions came out this well.
The way that you crafted this around Ginny and the diary is so inspired. It fits in so well with the way that her writing in the diary is portrayed in the books. She was so dependent on Tom while she was writing to him and I love this take on what could have happened to her if she was in the Muggle World (which is where I'm assuming she is?)
Also, wow that twist. My eyes got wide when I read that line about her bracelet. It was like a punch to the gut and you built up to it so well. Everything before that was so full of tension and suspense and then everything after just slowly led us down and out of the story. I'm just so in awe of how well you captured Ginny's mental state through your prose. Everything about it is simply inspiring.
Absolutely stunning! (As per usual :P)
My review response on HPFF was mostly squeeing, so here’s a more collected response.
*rereads your review*
OMG ALL I CAN DO IS SQUEEEE
I was being really experimental with this story, so I honestly didn’t know if it would work at all. I got a mix of feedback on it, but I can’t deny that I’m partial to your adoration.
I tend to write my chapters out of order (start at the beginning, think of a few lines that would go well in different spots, and then connect the dots), so I found that that really helped in writing this story, since it kind of had to be constructed out of order.
I love Ginny (or want to love her, but am not nearly as satisfied with her in canon as headcanon), and I’ve always been intrigued by the after effects of her relationship with Tom. She went through some serious trauma for about a year, and we never really talk about it afterwards, but I think it had a fundamental impact on her. OF course, in this story it was a much more dramatic impact that I actually imagine, but I really wanted to take that idea and run with it.
I didn’t actually consider replacing her in the muggle world, though she was in a mental hospital that I was rather muggle inspired.
Thank you lots!
We were meant to be friends, Remus. You know it, as well as I do.
Two children who grew up together. Two boys struggling on their paths towards adulthood. Two men faced with darkness too thick for them to get through.
A Peter/Remus story.
Set in the All the truth about Jimmy Portman's universe.
Hufflepuff Story of the Month - November 2016
Sitewide Story of the Month - January 2017
Golden Chalices Awards 2017 Runner Up - Best Drama
Golden Chalices Awards 2017 Winner - Best Minor Canon Character
FROGS 2017 Nomination - Best Marauders Era
FROGS 2017 Nomination - Best Minor Canon Character
FROGS 2018 Winner - Best Minor Canon Character
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Hey, Chiara! Here for our swap :)
So I'm definitely going to admit that this is a pairing that I never would have come up with in my wildest dreams, but I'm super psyched to read your take on it. I've heard nothing but amazing things about this story and I'm super excited to have an excuse to finally get to it!
So I admit that I am not a always the biggest fan of Peter but I love that you started with him as a kid so we really get to see him grow up. I like what we get to see his mother and how she reacts to him, especially with the added detail of his dad being gone.
I really love everything that you've set up with Remus here. For as much as I love him, I never really thought about how kids his own age would react to finding out about the whole werewolf thing. It was heartbreaking, especially when he had to move away and leave behind someone who would end up being one of his biggest allies in a few years.
I never really considered the fact that Remus and Peter could be friends before Hogwarts, but you really set up their future friendship nicely here. I'm super curious to learn more about their friendship as it grows and changes throughout their Hogwarts years.
I'm so excited that I finally got an excuse to start this story! I will definitely be back soon to read more :) Thanks for doing the swap!
Hi, Claire! Thank you so much for swapping! :)
I'm so happy you decided to stop by this story, it's probably the one I'm most proud of and I'm always happy to hear people's thoughts about it. :)
I know, Peter is not the most loved character (guess it has something to do with him betraying the Potters?) but I do have a soft spot for him... I think it's really fascinating to explore his character and his motivations and I'm glad you liked to see him in his child days. My headcanon has always been that Peter's father died when he was very little and that his mother (partly as a result of that) was very overprotective of him, which made Peter a bit unsecure. I'm glad you liked their interactions.
And I'm glad you loved Remus, too. I've always felt so bad thinking about the pain he must have suffered because of lycanthrophy since he was only a little kid, and I can totally imagine him being bullied by other kids his age because of it, too. And yes, it is heartbreaking that he had to leave Peter, but at least we know that they'll get back into their friendship at Hogwarts.
I never really thought of them being friends before Hogwarts either (or being in a romantic relationship, for all that matter...) This story just sort of happened, honestly, but I do love how everything turned out in the end.
I'm so glad you decided to stop by here, I really hope I'll get to hear your thoughts about what happens next as well. :)
Thank you so much again for swapping and for leaving this lovely review!
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Aislinn Walker knew when she was recruited as an Unspeakable that her job would be dangerous. Returning to Hogwarts as a student was a task she hadn’t expected. Facing death as it stalked the blood-splattered halls would be a nightmare she might never recover from.
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I am very impressed by how well you work with clichés in your writing. And I mean that as a genuine compliment. I feel like I try to avoid them in my writing, but I love how well you take them and work them into your own writing. To clarify, the cliché I was talking about was the describing the appearance in a mirror, but I love how you used it to explain plot points that may have otherwise been too much in just exposition. It also added a lot to the creepy element that you have going here, with her seeing her dead sister in a reflection of herself.
Speaking of the creepy vibe, wow did you knock it out of the park! Personally, I absolutely cannot do horror in any way, shape, or form, it just freaks me out to no end, but I love how you used it here. The descriptions really made it and I'm completely blown away by them. You know Aphoride? To me, this is almost on par with her descriptions and believe me, to be anywhere close to her basically makes you lightyears beyond everyone else.
I also love how you always leave me wanting more (I say as if I've read more than two of your stories). But still, I'm so drawn in by your plot that I just want to open up my brain and have this entire story poured right in to it. Right now. You craft everything so well and I'm sincerely jealous.
I'll be back for more!
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Oh my god, this is seriously on of the best stories I have read for this game and I've read some really stellar ones. Your command of language and descriptions are seriously off the charts. Everything is so completely vivid in my mind and it's simply amazing. Because you are able to use such detailed language, even when there are bits and gaps, I'm able to fill them in myself and it honestly adds so much to the story.
I also love all of your characters so much. Aislinn is just so well done and I love how she adopts Charlotte's personality. You make it extremely clear how she is definitely not the same person as Charlotte and she struggles to adjust her thinking, even after months. Lily also is such an amazing character. I know that she's relatively minor, but you really nail her personality and how she would react to each event.
Also, side note, but your Dumbledore is so completely spot on ad he is not easy to do well.
Also, your action sequences are absolutely to die for. This just goes along with what I said earlier, but you really just have a way with words that makes everything come to life and seem more real. I'm not going to lie, I was pretty terrified the whole time, but man, if this isn't one of my new favorite stories.
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When the destruction of the American Magical Academy forces Alex to flee to Hogwarts for protection, she learns that some secrets can kill and some secrets are worth dying for.
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So as I know you are more than aware, the idea of a transfer student coming to Hogwarts is not new, but you have such an interesting spin here, that doesn't even matter. It's only been 1000 words and already you have me 100% hooked and even if this isn't the flag story, I'm coming back for more.
Alex is such a good character. I think it would be easy for her to slip into one-dimensional territory, but that is nowhere close to what you have here. She has such a good presence about her that really pulls the entire story together. You balanced out everything about her in just the perfect way and I really want to know more about her personally.
I absolutely love the world you've established here. It's new and fun and it's certainly unique, at least to me. You weave in the details so well that I barely even noticed that you were world building here. I'm definitely intrigued about why Death Eaters attacked an American wizarding school and what that is going to mean for Alex. I also have a million questions about what actually happened at the school. Why that school? What were they looking for? How did Alex escape? Did they let her?
I'm so hooked! Stunning job!
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As Sirius led me around the room, I took a deep breath and looked up at him firmly.
“So, was it a bet or a dare?”
“What are you talking about?” he asked, shiftily enough to tell me my guess had been right. When his eyes drifted to where James was sitting by the far wall, I grinned.
“Don’t play dumb. We both know you’d never ask me to dance in a million years. Not with ninety-five percent of the girls here gagging for it, and, well, I’m not. Besides, Potter just gave you the thumbs up.”
He groaned. “Are we really that obvious? Okay, yes, it was a dare.”
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Hey Mel! I had a bit of free time with summer starting so I thought I'd transfer some of my CTF reviews :)
So I've admired this since I first read your work and what I love the most is your writing style. It is so distinct, but at the same time it reads as so normal? I don't think that's coming out right, but I mean that as a really sincere compliment. The way you write is just so you and so distinct to this type of story that it would feel wrong if it were written any other way. The first person extremely detailed inner monologues that give us backstory normally feels kinda clunky and too much for me, but it coupled with what we get of Laura's personality works amazingly together to give this really tight, concise feeling to it.
Gosh, everything is just so wonderfully normal in this story and I definitely know now that I'm not saying this right. But what I mean is you drop us right into the normal, everyday life of these characters and make the reader fill in the blanks for themselves. Even with the detail backstory type stuff we get from Laura, the characters' actions show us more than narration could ever tell us. Your characters are real people with real feelings and real reactions to things. It makes me feel like I'm really inside the story.
I think you know how I feel about this story, but still, I absolutely am in love!
Luna and Colin have a way of seeing what other people overlook.
Especially each other.
Hello Renee! Here for CTF :)
This is such an interesting pairing. I never would have thought about Colin and Luna together before, but after reading this, I can totally see it.
I've never read anything with Colin as the main character, but I love what you've done with him. Whenever I think of him, I usually only think of that really annoying kid who followed Harry around like a groupie, but you've definitely changed my mind. Even in such a short piece, you've packed a lot of characterization into it. He seems like less of a bumbling groupie and more of a nervous kid who isn't sure where his place is in this new world. I'm already rooting for him and it's only been 600 words!
I also love the rest of the characters too. I know Luna and Katie only had a few lines, but they really seemed true to the characters that we knew in the books. The little quip about Oliver was nice too. I could hear Oliver teling Colin that he'd rather not him take pictures and it says a lot about Colin that he went ahead and ignored Oliver (I don't think I'd stand between Oliver and his Quidditch). The amount of detail you put into the description of Luna's picture is exactly right and not overwhelming at all. It fits right in with the the rest of the story you've crafted :)
This is such a wonderful introduction to this story and this pairing. The level of detail that you packed in is amazing and makes me want to keep reading! Fantastic job!
Hello dear! Thank you so much for the lovely review! I am happy you enjoyed the story and the pairing, and that you thought everyone was in character. I'm planning to add more to this chapter because I've changed my mind about the format of this fic. I'll try to let you know when I've done that = )
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Lysander Scamander's biggest problem is that his best friend is dating his twin brother instead of him.
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Hello there! I'm here for the BvB Tag :)
First, I'm going to apologize, I haven't written a review in months and I'm a little rusty. But here goes!
Right off the bat, you have me hooked. I know this is a one-shot, but if you ever turned it into a full length story, I'd eat it right up. You have a ton of characters set up that I'd love to know more about. You have the dynamic between Lorcan and Lysander set up really well and I'd be really interested to see it played out more and in different senarios. The same with Lily and Lysander, I like how you've established that while they're twins, Lysander and Lorcan react entirely differently to people.
I am curious about this Hufflepuff that likes Lyansder. If you were going to expand this (she says hopefully), that would definitely be a route that I'd like to see the story go. You have such good characterizations of everyone and the setup here for even just a short story is perfect. I'll stop writing your story for you now, but seriously. This works really well as a one-shot, but it'd also be a kiler chapter one.
All in all, I really enjoyed reading this. The twins aren't characters that get a lot of screentime so to speak, but I always love seeing how people characterize them. Awesome job!
Hel-lo, Claire, and thank you for stopping by! I'm super excited you liked this story and it was topped by discovering that it won 2nd place in the challenge it was written for! Would you believe that this was supposed to be a rom-com? Yeah, that, um... Didn't pan out for me...
To be completely honest, I am only a new fan of the next-gen and, well, I love twins and Luna was my favorite female character... I have heard a lot of people (mostly my friend Jill who is incessant about it) that this should be a longer story and while I am NOT going to do that, I may have some plunnies for one or two one-shot sequels. I'm glad you mentioned the Hufflepuff because I forgot about that person! Perhaps more than one or two one-shots. One for sure! It was almost my plunny for the Christmassy Love challenge...
Please excuse my rambling as I ramble through this reply... ANYWAY. Thank you so much for your review and I'll see you in BvB!
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Johanna Greengrass calls Teddy on a serious case of mentionitis.
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Hello! Here for the BvB :)
Okay, I swear that I've read a story with Johanna before that wasn't the one you mentioned in your note, but that's an investigation for another time haha
Moving on, I love all of the characters you mention in this. They all have such distinctive personalities that go really well together. The conversations flowed really nicely and were completely believable and natural. It read exactly like a few old school friends getting together for a quick catch up.
Going off of that, I absolutely love Johanna. She's the kind of friend that everyone needs at least one of. She's a perfect compliment to Teddy and the two of them seem to bring out the best in each other. I'm sure you answer this in a different story, but just for my own sake, is her mother Daphne? And who is her father?
I remember you mentioning something on Twitter about the concept behind this and I just want to say that you nailed it. Teddy has just the right amount of reservations about liking someone so much younger than him but still conveys that he does have romantic feelings for Vic. It was handled really well and I'd love to see more of their relationship :)
Fantastic as always Branwen! I'll definitely have to stop by to read some more of this universe!
Once upon a time, four friends believed they would be there for each other forever. That time is gone.
This is the recount of the last year of the Marauders. A year of suffering, of mistrust, of betrayal, of loss. The year when everything ends.
FROGS 2017 Nomination - Best Marauders Era
Hey! Here for our swap :)
I was scrolling through your AP looking for something with only a few reviews and this caught my eye. I'm a sucker for a really good Marauders story and I love that this one is set post-Hogwarts. Don't see many of those!
I absolutely love your characterization of Peter, which is not a sentence I expected to be typing haha. It was so absolutely perfect with what we know he does in a few months. His hesitation was spot on to his personality and so was his feelings about his friends. I feel like that gets swept under the rug a lot, but Peter really did have a reason for going to Voldemort's side and you've articulated that beautifully.
Also, wow, I'm crazy impressed with what you did with second person here. Even without the specific details, I'm positive I could have figured out who each of them was. Their personalities were so clear, even with the second person. At first I was skeptical how it would work with this kind of story, but boy, I was so wrong. It adds so much to everything and really pulled me into the narrative.
This was amazing! I'm so curious as to how Remus's POV plays out, so I definitely am going to have to stop by again soon! Thank you so much for the swap!
Hi, Claire! Sorry for the late reply.
I'm happy you picked this story, it is one I'm quite fond of. :)
Ahahah! Well, I like to think of myself as a Peter expert... :P I might have a slight obsession for the guy... glad you liked his characterization and found it verosimilar. Yeah, I've always thought that his decision came more from resentment rather than fear. Not that this justifies his actions...
Ah, I'm so glad that you enjoyed the second person, too. This story was my first attempt at it and it made me so nervous, so I'm very glad that it worked out fine! And so happy that you felt the characters' voices were recognizable! Thank you so much!
Remus will open the next chapter and I would love to hear your thoughts on him, too. ;) I have to warned you, though, it's sort of depressing...
Thank you so much for the swap and the lovely review! We should do this again sometime! :)
Lots of love,
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Hey! I had some free time, so I figured I'd start to transfer over a few of my CTF reviews :)
Heartbreaking is pretty much the only word I can think of to describe this. You basically took my heart, ripped it out of my chest packaged it up, and chucked it across the ocean. That probably would have been less painful than this. In a good way, of course.
The raw emotions in this were so powerful that I found myself blinking back tears more than a few times. Sirius's time in Azkaban is something that I try not to think about too much because it hurts a lot. And you made it all that and then some.
I'm going to be honest, I did not read the story shell before reading the story and the whole time I was hoping that it'd be a Wolfstar piece and boy howdy was I not disappointed! I love that I was able to tell exactly who he was writing to without you ever having to say it. That alone makes this an amazing story in my opinion and the rest of it is just a cherry on top.
The structure of this is also so well done. You knew exactly when to break things off and move onto the next section. And each part hurt more than the last. It was all just so beautiful and so painful at the same time.
So, sorry if this was completely rambling and incomprehensible, I'm super tired. TL;DR: I love this story and you for writing it!
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It's the most wonderful time of the year. Why not share it with the ones you love? Share your hopes. Share your dreams. Share the secret that you are a wand-wielding witch. These are the struggles Dominique Weasley is dealing with this holiday season. She hopes her boyfriend will understand and accept her, but what he doesn't know is this isn't the first time they've done this.
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Hello again! Back for the BvB :)
Oooo, I love the start of this! You've really nailed Dom's characertization. She has that typical love of fashion that most people seem to give to her, but that's not her whole personality. She seems really smart and level-headed, even if she is slightly anxious. I like the little tid bit about her being trained as an Obliviator; it's a neat detail about Dom's backstory and definitely a cool profession (one that I'd forgotten was even a thing!).
Mark seems great. I'm really interested to get to know him better and see how his personality plays out. I also love the distinction between the three siblings. Louis is great and Vic is too. They all play off each other really well. You definitely nailed the sibling relationships.
You've set up the rest of the story really well here and I'm definitely interested in seeing where you take everything :) Fantastic start and I'll definitely be back again soon to read more :)
Oooh, do you know of some of these stories that you could rec to me? Most of the stories I read where Dom is mentioned or portrayed, she's either out of school and a healer or she's a really brainy bookworm and I don't think I've read any (not that I've had time to go looking, I get really busy) where she is the MC.
Okay, moving on from a slowly developing obsession with this character, OH HAI! I'm so glad you liked this story- it's one of the ones I'm most proud of, I think. It was my first forray into A) next gen and B) character post Hogwarts. Just do me a favor and don't shout? Some poeple get shouty. It's... Scary. XD
I do hope to see you back and until then, thank you for the review and happy reading!
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All Bellatrix Black cares about is keeping up her appearance.
Okay I'm back again because someone *side eye* can't be nice enough to give us a hint.
...anyway, back for CTF :)
Bellatrix is such an interesting character and I love this take on her. Tbh, she's not really a character that you think of as being a child. It's kind a just like she popped out of the womb psychotic and sadistic. I never considered the fact that she once had parents who actually had some control over her, so I really like what you did with all of this.
I'm not sure whether I should feel impressed or worried that you can get inside the head of someone like her as well as you do. I seriously felt like I was really there inside her mind as she spoke to her partents and her sister. Everything just came across as so authentically Bellatrix, from her thinking that she could just kill her father is she didn't want to do what he wanted to actually telling Narcissa that she was going to kill Rudolphus if he stopped being useful to her. It shocked me just as much as I wanted it to, so kudos there!
I just love the whole feel of this story. Everything felt just right to what a story about Bellatrix should feel like. It felt cold and haughty (can a story feel haughty? idk, I'm going with it) and kind of sad, I'm not going to lie. It's one thing to see an older Bellatrix so completely devoted to Voldemort, but see her as young as seventeen and just as crazily devoted to him is both pittiable and honestly strangely admirable...those are not words that I would ever think to put towards Bellatrix Lestrange, but you gotta respect homegirl's devotion even if it's a little too much.
Kaitlin, this better be it, is2g...
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WINNER - The Pride of Gryffindor Awards 2017 - Best Post-Hogwarts
Dobby 2017 Nominee - Best Minor Character
2nd Place - Frankie05's Dobby Challenge
A tale of death, love, and the bond that holds everyone together.
Hey, Kaitlin! Here for our swap :)
Ahhh, I love this story so much and I'm so glad that CTF let me get to it!
I still think it's so cool that Dobby was the one chosen to help Harry through he afterlife. At least I feel like the connection between the two of them isn't used much in fanfiction, so I'm hyped to see this all play out between them. I'm dying to know why Dobby!!!
I know this is like super random and not really important to The Plot, but I love the little details about the Wotter Clan that you threw in. As a total Next Gen nerd, it was so cool to see those little bits tossed in. It also did a lot to show what exactly Harry has left behind. It really made me stop to think that the there was a whole other world besides the afterlife that we're focusing in.
Oooo, this wand weighing seems so cool! I'm intrigued about what it means, especially since the equivalent for a house elf is weighing the heart. My first thought was that it looked at all the spells they've cast and that way they can see the type of person that they are? And then maybe that's why house elves use their hearts? I don't know, that seems kinda over simplified, but that's what my gut is saying. I'll have to read more to find out, now don't I ;)
Fantastic job, Kaitlin! I'm absolutely in love with thsi story!!
Hey, Kaitlin! I had some free time so I've been working on transfering some of my CTF reviews over :)
I've been meaning to read this for a while and I'm glad I finally get the chance to because I love everything that you've set up here. It's something that I vaguely recall seeing maybe once before years and years and years ago, but even so, it's already completely new! Tbh I'm not really sure what I believe the afterlife is like, but I'm digging what you've set up here. I love that everyone is able to stay together and meet up with each other. I also love the idea of tests to make it into wherever it is they are.
You've also got such amazing characterizations here. I'm incredibly picky about how I view certain characters (like James, Sirius, and Dumbledore), but dang, you completely nailed all of them! They all feel incredibly real to me and I like that even though this is on the somewhat shorter side with a huge cast of characters, each of them has a distinctive voice that really relates back to how I see them in canon. I especially like how you've established relationships early in too without overwhelming the reader. We understand who is attached to who but you never needed to spell it out. You just let the reader figure it out as we go.
Look forward to reading more!
Back again to transfer some more reviews :)
So I can fully admit that I have never read a story with Dobby as an important side character, much less the main character, so I'm so excited to get to read more of what you have in store for him! You've really nailed his characterization. I love the little details that you weave in and nothing feels too over the top. The bits where he punishes himself are thrown in with just the right amount of frequency to make it believable but not comedic, which I find is a really hard balance to walk, but you're nailing it!
I'm also fascinated by this afterlife that you've created. It's obvious that you've put a lot of thought and effort into making this feel as real as a it possibly can. I like that everyone has a name and is familiar with each other because it helps to cement me as the reader into your world. I also think it's such a neat idea for you to pick to use. I also like the little bit of details that you threw at us with Charlie and Hannah having portkeys which means that they're going to die soon. Once again, it adds a ton to the realism and makes me feel like you really put an enormous amount of time into this, which is always wonderful to see as a reader :)
From virtually the moment they met, James Potter and Lily Evans were at odds. He was a hex-happy prankster with talent comparable only to his loyalty and arrogance. She was a clever student with a kind heart, but little patience for rule-breaking. This is the story of how two apparent opposites came to realize they were, in reality, a perfect fit. [REVISED EDITION]
2017 F.R.O.G.S. Finalist - Best Novel
2015 Dobby Finalist - Best Marauders Era
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Hey, Kevin! I had some free time, so I figured that I'd stop by to transfer some of my CTF reviews :)
Ooo, yes Marauders! This is possibly one of my favorite eras to read, but that being said, I also have more than a few extremely strict headcanons of my own, especially when it comes to James, who is the light of my life. That being said, I do really like your interpretation of James, even if it is rather different from my own. He seems more serious, though definitely not in a bad way, than I picture him, but tbh, it works really well for your writing style. I like that even though he is a little less carefree than I imagined him, he's still the same person we see in the brief glimpses we get in canon.
I also adore how you've set the Jily relationship up. I myself tend to go with the interpretation that James had always fancied Lily from day one and he was just ridiculously persistent, but I think I like the idea of a prank better. It lines up really well with what we know about him, it works a heck of a lot better with your characterization, AND it sets up a way more interesting plot dynamic. Plus, I love that you're having them date other people first. I do love a good slow burn!
I'm so mad I never read this before, but I'm glad I got to start!
Thanks for coming by to transfer this, Claire!
Lily needs a little space from her family, so she does the most sensible thing she can think of: she runs away to live in Edwin Dursley's closet.
Hello lovely! <3
Oooo, I love this so much from the very first line! I remember reading a few of your other stories where all of the Wotter Clan is obsessed with jobs that frequently put them into danger so I'm loving getting to see a new side to all of that insanity. And to do it through Lily is an absolute treat, I never get to read enough stories with her!
The emotions you've weaved throughout this are absolutely fantastic! I can really understand Lily's objection to anything and everything about the jobs all of her older cousins/siblings have, especially if she's the baby of the family. I can't imagine what it's like seeing almost everyone you've idolized as a kid going off and getting seriously hurt almost every day on their jobs. I think I would be panicking just as much as she was and honestly, I'm impressed that she's been able to keep it together as long as she has!
Her thoughts about Albus are particular favorites of mine, just because they work so well for her personality. She just assumes that she can't be the only crazy one in the family and then Al drops something like that on her and she can't understand why. I also love that Scorpius is the one to help comfort her. I'm already here for their friendship where they just sit and complain about their pain in the butt family/significant others and their penchant for almost getting killed :)
Well, you will certainly see me back soon for more of this wonderful story!
Hello again love <3
Yaaasssss, I'm so here for this story. I love love love the idea of Lily wanting to do something not dangerous and terrifying is considered rebelling and then I absolutely adore the idea of someone taking a year off from Hogwarts to do other things. I guess I never considered that they could do it, but people take gap years from college all the time, so yeah, I'm totally here for it.
I feel so much for Lily in this situation. I mean, I can't say that I've ever been in her position exactly, but she just seems so confused and lost and I've definitely felt like that before haha. She's just so genuine about everything that she believes and wants and I love that so much. Especially in a time when it seems like everyone wants to have a dark, gritty anti-hero, it's nice to see someone who is just genuine.
God bless Harry and Ginny tho. Like, they could have just shut that down so fast but they didn't and I'm so happy about that. I think it's really important for parents to be supportive and they most certainly are. They are such fantastic parents to Lily and I'm so glad that you chose to write them like this because who would ever write Harry as a crappy dad, right? (coughcursedchildcough)
Oh, yes, I am HERE for a Dursley child. I'm so incredibly excited for everything you have planned here, it's ridiculous <3
Back again for this amazing story! <3
Okay, so first off, Edwin is someone who I want on my side all the time. That man is a ride or die kind of friend/cousin/person and I need me one of those. Homeboy is a super star for letting a cousin who he is vaguely afriad of into his flat and then let her basically trash the place with magic and then finds her a bed. Like, that is a man you want as a friend. Just saying.
Ok, so obviously I'm slightly in love with Edwin Dursley, but moving on, I just love how I thought Lily was the totally reasonable and logical one and then here she goes basically screwing up anything and everything that she posibly could in her cousin's flat. I love that it shows that she really is a part of this crazy messed up family even if she may not think she really belongs there.
Okay, I'm 100% here for The Crazy Misadventures of Lily, Edwin, and Company. So I know that the story is not going to keep going like this, but I just really want to see Lily trying to fit into Muggle culture and failing miserably, all the while making Edwin go prematurely gray. Just think of the possibilities! Also, I'm super hyped to get to meet whoever this OC that will be engaged in a slow burn with Lily is. Ohhhh, wait is it Annie? Oh, my god, is it Annie? DO I GET MEET HER NEXT CHAPTER???? Because if so, Imma need that right now, k thx bye.
But seriously, Branwen, this is so good and I cannot wait to jump into the rest of the universe that you've so carefully crafted! I'm hooked!!! <3