Renacerá - She will be reborn.
Harry Potter fanfiction author since 2006.
Reader. Writer. Cat lady.
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“Get some sleep. Insomnia isn’t romantic.”
After a terrifying night in July, 1994, her life is changed forever. While Hogwarts hosts the TriWizard Tournament, Catherine Lawrence isolates herself into sleepless nights while she struggles to come to terms with her new reality. As she attempts to decipher if the voices and the ghosts haunting her are real or imaginary, Catherine fails to notice those who reach out. But Fred Weasley could be the one person to shed light into her fortress - if she can learn to let him in.
Emily here, reviewing for the 'Puff Special November/NaNo Review Swaps! It's been a while since I've started to read a WIP, but I'm so happy that I found this!
Let me stary by saying that your characterization in this first chapter was really lovely. I immediately connected with Cate and the struggles she's going through. She felt very real to me, and I liked that a lot. The other characters were good too, and even though it took me a little while to keep all of the OCs straight, I didn't struggle too much once I got their names down. It can be hard to start a story with an ensemble OC cast, but I felt that you introduced people very naturally, and I look forward to getting to understand them and their relationships to one another.
Secondly, the emotions here were wonderful. I could really feel the trauma that Cate is experiencing, and those feelings made me very eager to read on to see what happened over the summer with Cate, Chris, Rob, etc. It's so important to capture readers' attention early on, and you definitely succeeded at that.
Finally, I love that Fred and George are going to be a part of this story! They're some of my favorite characters to read, so I'm really glad they're here. I can also tell that Cate is really going to need someone's support to get through what she's experiencing, and I know Fred will be great at that.
I'm so glad that I found this story, and I'm excited to read on. Look for more reviews from me soon!
Emily, hi! Nice to see you on this story, as it's my baby <3
Thank you so much! Especially with my OCs, I really strive to make characters feel real as well as introducing them organically. Rather than being like "This is Rob my ex-boyfriend and Tommy my twin brother" I like to see you guys put the pieces together with Cate. I'm glad that worked here!
Yesss, Fred and George! They're going to be great in this story, and it's been so much fun writing them!
I'm so glad you enjoyed this first chapter, and I hope to see you here soon - thanks for the lovely review and organizing the review swaps!
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I'm here to review for you for the 'Puff review swaps! I'm so glad to come back to keep reading this. I'm sorry for how long it's been since reviews! But I really enjoy this story, so I promise I'm still interested.
So, anyhow, thoughts!
I really love Cate's characterization still. She's clearly traumatized, and we're starting to see and understand why. I'm so sorry for her having witnessed Chris's death. I can't even imagine what a mental state that would put you in afterwards. I think you show her trauma very realistically, which is great, if very sad. I also wonder how reliable of a narrator she is, which makes this story all the more interesting.
I can't wait to see how she'll integrate Fred and George into her recovery and what the big conflict will be within Hogwarts and her current experiences. So...I literally could have said, "I can't wait to see what happens next." XD At the moment, the conflict is mostly internal (with some external through Tommy and Rob), so I can't wait to read on.
So far, this is great! Wonderful writing--very clean and captivating. I'll read on ASAP!
Hello, Emily! I was wondering if you were going to come back to this story for the January swaps, and I'm glad to see you have!
I'm so so glad her trauma is coming off realistically; it's something that is super important to me for this story. I want her to have time to grieve and wallow and feel guilty, and show that grief doesn't just magically get better over night. I'm also glad you're wondering if she's a reliable narrator ;)
Bahaha, I'm glad that you can't wait to see what happens next! There's not much big conflict within Hogwarts, since this was the time of the TriWizard Tournament; but that in itself creates an interesting backdrop for her recovery, as well as Fred and George. <3
Thanks so much for this great review!
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For moonbaby11's Up For Grabs Challenge and the Every Word Counts Challenge
It’s like making love to a ghost.
The other person disappears in the act of becoming part of you,
and you are left with yourself, pure and raw and complete.
But there is someone else inside you, incorporeal but undeniable.
Review time for this year's Snowball Fight/review battle!
So, I don't know if I've ever read a James/Sirius story before, but I honestly don't know why I wouldn't have! This was really lovely! I'm honestly floored by your command of language and poetry. This read like a song or a poem or a prayer. It captured me with the feelings just below the surface. I don't know how to describe it, but I really felt like I was flying with Sirius with this sort of...desperation or rush driving me. I read this quickly, and then slowly. It was like the first time I had to get through it, had to know what I already knew he'd find...but then I had to go back and really drink in the feelings and emotions. You did an amazing job with them.
I love your characterization of Sirius and James, as subtle as it was. I feel like you really captured the dichotomy of James' dual life. I also adored the last few lines ("The home you made with her is ashes. The corners we hid in are gone. The shadows within me remain. Will the ghost of you still find your way there?"). The part about ashes for some reason really struck me. There's so much that our Marauders lost that night that is easy not to think about, but this story brought it front and center.
All-in-all, this was fantastic. I honestly don't have constructive criticism (I wish I did so this would be more helpful!). Wonderful job!
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Daphne finds Astoria in an abandoned corridor just before the Death Eaters storm Hogwarts.
“He’s on the wrong side." She raised her wand. "And so are you, little sister.”
What a dynamite beginning to this series! I don't even know your Astoria yet, and I literally love her. The line that made me Team Astoria, 100%, was: "Life wasn’t about valid excuses for cowardice and inaction; it was about doing your best to make a difference." I was basically cheering.
So, let's start there: characterization. I loved your Astoria unconditionally. I loved that she's a Ravenclaw. I loved that she has this strong moral compass. I love that her brother is a Slytherin who she looks up to. I love that she stayed. I honestly love just the fact that people stayed, especially underage kids (and all the Hufflepuffs over 17! because we are AWESOME.). So that was a fantastic start. Her voice is wonderful too, and I'm excited to get to explore her world.
Daphne is such an enigma here. I've never read stories with her, let alone stories that cast her as an antagonist to Astoria. So I'm really interested to see where you go with that.
Their interaction was so tense and realistic. I've been at odds with people before, and I've felt these exact feelings facing them down, alone. Not knowing what to say or do, your thoughts racing. I get all of that. So that was awesome.
The only minute CC I might add is to engage the setting more. What's the mood like around Astoria? Are the crowded hallways loud? Can she hear the battle beginning outside? Do people seem afraid? Etc. etc.
All-in-all, though, this was an awesome entrance into this world, and I can't wait to read more. Great job!
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Some scars last a lifetime.
Winner of round one TidalDragon's 'Knockout' challenge at HPFF
Ahhh, so much wonderful Greengrass interaction! I feel like I'm a part of this family right now, and I wouldn't have it any other way! Your characterization of the siblings is amazing, and I'm so attached to all of them as characters. They're all just so compelling!
I know you mentioned in a PM that you were sorry this was still in third person. I assume that's because you're switching it to first person eventually? I'll definitely reread when you do if you'd like! This is fabulous as is, though.
The only error I saw (though, maybe it was just Daphne not caring enough to remember) is when the sisters are talking and Daphnes is justifying forcing Astoria to leave the battle. And she says, "You were sixteen," but that's not accurate according to the other stories (which say that Astoria was fifteen).
I loved the depth you gave Astoria's entire sixth year in this story, despite it being skimmed over so quickly. The detail about the window being kept open crushed me. And the emptiness of their dormitory. And her fear of the dungeons. It was all so well placed to show everything Astoria has gone through. I loved that.
I also just love the emotions you were able to put into all of Astoria's actions, even running from Daphne and showing up at Brendon's. She's so broken right now, but I can tell that she's strong and she'll move forward in time.
This was really a wonderful story for showing the dynamic between the three siblings (and even somewhat their parents). I liked it a lot.
On to more stories!
There are darker mirrors than Erised in the Wizarding World.
1st place in AditiDraco95's 'Death Eater's Victim' challenge at HPFF
Hello, my dear!
I can't believe I'm done with your current Drastoria fics! But now I get to move on to reading your other stories! I'm leaving the Johanna ones and the Tedoire ones for a while and bouncing to some others, so here we go!
This was really written lovely...ly. I wasn't sure what to expect when I saw that Dorcas was the main character, but this was really nice. I feel that you did a good job portraying the struggle of an unfamiliar character. I'm not 100% sure waht she was experiencing, but it was still really moving.
Definitely the thing I have to commend you on the most here is the emotions that you portrayed throughout this story. I could really feel Dorcas's fear and desperation, as well as her anxiety and compulsive need to get away from the mirror. That was all very real for me. We've talked about V for Vendetta a few times, and this gave me some Valerie-vibes akin to her imprisonment.
By the end, I assumed she was being held captive by Death Eaters, but I wasn't too sure. I'm still not, but I don't know if that matters too much. She was clearly experiencing something, and I didn't really have to know what.
This was good, and I liked it a lot! (Still missing my Draco and Astoria, but shh. That's a me problem.)
On to more fics!
He and I, we were infinitesimal.
For Connor & Tanya
So, this is the first James/Regulus story I've ever read, and it made me desperately want to search out others. This was so incredibly well written. It was stunning and beautiful, and I really, really loved it. There are so many wonderful lines that you crafted, but this one stood out: "I felt something in my stomach clench and thud, like a stone falling off a window-ledge." I literally know that feeling precisely, and that you put it into words is so amazing. So that's my first compliment: the writing in this story is STUNNING.
Secondly, the characterization that you portray for both James and Regulus (as well as Lily from James's point of view) is wonderful. I love that you captured James's mix of guilt and acceptance over what he had done to Lily. I love Regulus's uncertainty and loneliness and desperation. I really wish I could've read Regulus's letter to James at the end. I feel like I would love to see how he thought of their relationship. Lily was also wonderful. James knew she would be so hurt to learn the truth, but I feel like she also has so much compassion that I would love to see her own reaction to this.
The epistolary style was such a great way to portray this truth that James lived. I think it was really important for readers to see him looking back and justifying why he did what he did and how it's affected his life. I definitely don't think what he did was RIGHT -- cheating is definitely not okay! -- but I think a story like this needed his explanation in his own words.
Overall, I think this story was wonderful, and I'm so glad I found it. I think it will be the first I add to my Favorites list! Thanks for writing this so I had the pleasure to read it!
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It's not every day you find a golden snidget in a beautiful forest.
I've never read a Lucy story (I don't think), so this was a really pleasant introduction to her as a character! And this story was really lovely as a moment in a person's life, out of her comfort zone, where something really special happens.
I can absolutely see Lucy as Percy's daughter. I think he gets too much criticism, but I think he'd be a really good dad, despite inevitably influencing his daughters to be a bit stuffier than their cousins. Your characterization of Lucy was really nice, though. I liked that she was unashamed of liking the indoors and the work she does. It wasn't overstated, but I could tell she was happy with the life she had, and I liked that a lot.
I also loved her moment with the snidget. The only constructive criticism I might have would be to mention just how rare it would be to see one. (They were hunted nearly to extinction, weren't they?) Lucy with the snidget was so nice. I loved that, even as a bird, the snidget had a personality and added to the story and Lucy's understanding of something outside of her daily life.
This story felt bigger than itself to me. Even if you didn't mean for it to be there, I felt like I got a message about nature and comfort and good times despite being busy and having a life away from simple pleasures. Maybe I'm also just reading too much into this because my life has been so hectic lately, haha. Either way, I liked that "message" a lot.
Thank you for writing this. It was really sweet. :)
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Astoria has to be careful about how much she indulges her vices.
HPFT: FROGS Best Depiction of Mental Illness 3rd place (2018), Featured Story (Dec 2017), Ravenclaw SotM Best Characterization (Jan 2017), 'New Beginnings' challenge runner up
Okay, finally we have some Draco/Astoria interaction! Yayyy! I'm honestly so excited about this, but I'll try to stay objective so I can be useful to you instead of just gushing.
So let's start off with a question that I had while/after reading this! First off, it was a little hard to tell the timeline in this story. How long has it been since Unforgivable? In that one, Astoria was sixteen, so it seems like this happens a while after that if she's drinking legally (She has to be at least seventeen for that in the wizarding world, right?), but I couldn't quite tell how much time has passed. Is she still at Hogwarts? Or is she out in the world now? If so, she's still living with Brendon? I just wasn't quite sure!
Characterization-wise, I loved getting to see this side of Astoria. She's been through so much, and it was so hard to see that she's struggling so much, but it was also so realistic. I thought it was good that you explained that she knows drinking is her vice, but she's accepted that in lieu of other self-harm. I felt terrible for her though, and I really do hope things get better for her soon (possibly with Draco's help, hmmm?).
Draco himself was quite good as well! He's so different in this from how I usually read him, but I liked it! He's not quite as hotheaded, and I liked that he clearly knows he messed up during the war and is trying to atone for it. The one line that I wasn't so sure about though was when Astoria asks, "You really are scared, aren't you?" and Draco replies, "Yes, Astoria." It was hard for me to imagine Draco admitting to being afraid that bluntly to a person who's essentially a stranger. I also wondered why he was so interested in talking to her or helping her in the first place. I understand that he knows and likes Brendon, but going out of his way for Astoria was a big leap for me. I'm interested to read more about your Draco in other stories to piece that aspect of his transformation together.
The settings you chose were very vivid, and I liked the fight in the Three Broomsticks. It was an intense first moment for Draco and Astoria, and I feel like it shows what they're going to go through together if they're going to stick with each other.
Overall, I really liked this. It was wonderful to read about their first moments, and I absolutely can't wait to see where this relationship goes!
Five months after the death of his love, Draco Malfoy spends Valentine's day with an old muggle camera and reliving his lost relationship.
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For the Throw Down the Gauntlet challenge.
I am so incredibly happy that I found this story. I can't wait to read the next chapter. Honestly, this was so lovely. You hit every high and low emotion there is, and I have to applaud you.
Your characterization of Harry and Draco is spot on, and I loved that you had Draco's Slytherin friends at the beginning and the compassion they showed for him. I loved the evolution of Draco and Harry as individuals and how they came to see each other differently to the point where they could be together.
The writing here is fabulous. I was smiling at Draco's antics and then holding back tears from line to line. I fell in love with this funny, happy Draco who likes to joke and flirt and be a better person than he was as a teenager. And the way you portrayed his grief was so potent and realistic. It tugged at my heart to see his desperation over losing Harry. I don't blame him in the slightest for his grief still being so powerful five months later -- in my own experience, it can last much longer than that.
I also loved the parallelism with Valentine's Day and its importance to their friendship and subsequent relationship. It made me want to see their life closer up, rather than just the lens after Harry's passed away.
Overall, this has been amazing so far, and I'm so glad I found it. Thanks for writing this so I had the pleasure of reading it! On to the next chapter!
Oh! Harry's alive! Oh my gosh! That's definitely not what I expected. The style of this second chapter was so different from the first that I read it twice just to check that I understood what was happening. I'm so happy that Harry is back with Draco, but I also really thought he'd died, so I'm super thrown off!
I think you did a good job with this chapter showing the guilt that Harry felt for leaving Draco, but I was still a little unclear on why he did it. It seemed like it was part of a work assignment? But what sort of Auror job would make you break up with your boyfriend? Was he pretending to be dead? I'm unsure.
I do wish this story went on longer! I think you really do show a great relationship between Draco and Harry, and I would love to read more. Thanks for writing!
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Crookshanks wants to find somewhere to sleep and rest his weary bones, but Ron and Hermione won't let him.
A fanfic of a fanfic for a challenge. A fanfic of GeorgiaWeasley's 'Time to Go' at HPFF, with her permission.
Can I just say that I love kitties so much? So, of course, I had to read this. Crookshanks is amazing! I loved that this was from his point of view and that we got a peek into what he does during the time when he's at home alone.
You write the perspective of a cat so well! I laughed so many times when Crookshanks was making messes and going places he wasn't supposed to go. That's so much like my kitty. You definitely captured the disdainful-cat(kneazle) voice perfectly. He definitely didn't care what anyone thought of him! And I loved the ending! Waking up Ron and then not even eating what he'd been given was wonderful, haha! (Though, my cat would never turn his nose up at food.) And then when Crookshanks goes and steals Ron's spot by Hermione--perfection.
The only constructive criticism I might offer would be to strengthen descriptions of the house from Crookshanks' point of view. Since he's so much lower to the ground than us, do things look different? Do they feel different under his paws? Can he see clumps of his fur on the carpets? You had a lot of really good descriptions here too, so this would just be in addition to what you've already written!
Overall, great job! This was really sweet, and I'm now going to go attempt to hug my kitty (which he'll hate, but I'll do it anyway).
So your CC first: description and emotion are by far my weakest points, so thanks for letting me know it's a bit weak here. I appreciate the CC.
I love kitties and have written a few things from their pov, and I really love doing it. I loved writing Crookshanks as a grumpy old man and having him voice his concerns. If you haven't read the story it's based on, I highly recommend Georgia_Weasley's story, "Time to Go," since this was a fanfic of a fanfic challenge.
Thank you for the review and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Lily needs a little space from her family, so she does the most sensible thing she can think of: she runs away to live in Edwin Dursley's closet.
So, I didn't even know the blizzard was going on and just happened to be reading your stories compulsively. So, it works out!
I've been wanting to read this story since I saw the summary literally forever ago. I've never read anything that references Dudley or his family in Next-Gen, so the description of this was just thrilling. And I am hooked.
I am so here for this! Like, seriously! I love the characters you've chosen in this. Lily also isn't a character I've read much or know much about, so that's gonna be fun. So far, I really like her. I love the dynamic you're describing. Her annoyance at her family's recklessness is so believable. And I can so relate.
I also adore that Scorpius is a part of this (even if he's not with Albus, but like...c'mon, Scorbus!). I love me some mini-more-levelheaded-Draco! So this is going to be fun for me, characters-wise.
You also set the scene so well with the mentions of all the other hospitalizations and Lily's feelings towards them. And also your writing. Ugh. It's so wonderful. I hatelove it. You're too good.
So far, I really love this. My CC is, as usual, absent. Because I suck.
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"I wish there was a way to practice first," Dean commented. "Y'know, before the real thing."
"We could," Seamus said. "We could practice together."
Dean balked, and Seamus held up his hands.
"No, no, hear me out." Seamus' cheeks flooded with red and Dean felt like his were just as hot. "Ya don't want a girl to think you're a shit snog, because she'll go tell all the other girls, and then you'll never get another one."
"But I'm not-" Dean lowered his voice. "You're my best mate. My best guy mate. I'm not gay."
Could I have loved this more? Honestly, I don't know. It was wonderful. There are no other words for it. And seeing that you have other Dean/Seamus stories means that I will have so much to read in the coming days/weeks! I am so excited!
This was fantastic. I'm going to just gush about how wonderful it was rather than provide any constructive criticism whatsoever, but I hope you still like this review!
Characterization-wise, this was awesome. I really felt like you captured Dean and Seamus's canon personalities and built on them to add to this story. The embarrassment they both felt at deciding to "practice" snogging together was wonderful. And the evolution of how they thought of each other was also fantastic. I loved that they came to their realizations about their feelings for each other at different paces. That made it very realistic for me.
The interactions between the two of them were also wonderful. I really adored the fact that they saw each as best friends first, and everything else second. And then not wanting to mess with their friendship. And then being apart and realizing that they wanted desperately to be together. Omg. I have no words. That moment when they reunite and Dean admits that he's going to kiss Seamus for real, and then Seamus kisses him. :D :D :D :D :D SO INCREDIBLY PERFECT. I LOVED IT.
I really have no words for the love I have for this story. Thank you so much for writing it. I'm going to favorite it and go on to read more of the things you've written!
I race around trees and over branches, chasing my prey with a deadly hunger, ready to be unleashed amongst the lightning and the thunder. I’m a monster and that’s all I’ll ever be, I’m a monster who simply wishes to be free. I’m going to make you pay, for all you’ve made me suffer, all the times you’ve kept me away. There’s no coming back for you now, you’re mine, mine, mine.
I've never read a Greyback story, but I'm so glad this was my first! This is so well written! Honestly, this read like poetry, and I'm probably going to spend paragraphs just talking about that.
Your writing in this story was phenomenal. The fact that you were able to capture the out-of-control feeling of a werewolf transformation in words without ever saying that's what the story was about was amazing. The rhyme scheme kept this flowing so easily while I read, and the fact that it was so much like a chase scene was incredible. I could almost feel myself stumbling through a forest away from a pursuer, but through the story you realize that there is no pursuer--it's in him the entire time. Eerie.
So, yes. The language was fabulous. It conveyed so much, but it didn't hit the reader over the head with anything. I also loved the characterization here. The fact that the werewolf within Greyback is a character of its own, distinct from Fenrir himself, is so interesting. The subtle additions of Greyback killing a girl he loved by accident, etc., were wonderful. I liked how the emotions of the wolf's bloodlust and Greyback's desperation fit together so nicely.
You really captured this story and situation. Honestly, such a good job. I wish I could think of constructive criticism, but it was really quite lovely. Thank you for writing!
Thank you so much! This is a story I wrote years ago now, so it's so lovely to revisit it & have such kind words said about it. As much as I think it more likely Greyback is just a horrible person, it was a lot of fun to write it this way instead, to picture it as some kind of horrific supernatural force taking over instead of people themselves just being horrific.
Making me come back and revisit this has really inspired me to try writing something again, so thank you so much for the lovely review <3
Astoria mentions a chance meeting with Draco Malfoy to her brother over breakfast.
Okay, so it seems like maybe "Dead Eyes and Red Eyes" takes place essentially right after "Unforgivable." Or is that wrong again? Omg, I need to get my timeline straight.
Well, I liked that I got to see this conversation between Astoria and Brendon! I really do love their dynamic. And Brendon seems like such a good father. He's still really cool, despite being a dad, haha. So, characterization-wise, this felt good again! I love what a clear grasp you have on your characters. It's really nice to see an author who knows their people inside and out. The conversation between Astoria and Brendon felt so natural and seamless (something that I am so struggling to achieve in the edit of Collateral that I definitely envy your ability to pull it off!). They're clearly siblings, but I get the feeling of hero-worship from Astoria so easily, and I get Brendon's older-brother vibe just as clearly.
I loved that Johanna was in the background here. I've skimmed the summaries of some of your other stories and see that she'll show up as an adult eventually, so I'm interested to see how that goes when I read those ones! Here, she's just cute and she loves her dad. I like that.
The only error I saw in this was in a line of dialogue Astoria has where you've written, "Do he really get death threats?" when I think you likely meant "Does he..."
Other than that, another lovely story! I'm just flying through these! I love this universe so much already, and I can't wait to read more!
Dating a part-veela isn't always a recipe for success.
So, a new pairing for me! And a new character! I don't read much about Dominique (Actually, I may never have read about her.), so this was new for me! Does this one tie into a larger story or is it a stand-alone? I would have liked the chance to get to know Dominique a little more!
So, Charlotte was a good OC! I could tell that she was having trouble with the breakup, which is super relateable for basically all readers. And I could feel her awkwardness when she went to see Dom. I do wonder if you could show a little more about Dominique's character (more than what we're told at the beginning about her being a heartbreaker, for example). I would also have liked more about Louis who seems great!
Formatting-wise, I noticed an issue--there should be a line break or more spaces before the line "Charlotte was still smarting..." since I had trouble at first realizing that we'd switched scenes.
Other than that, this was good! I wasn't as attached to Charlotte as I would have liked to be, but she was a solid OC, and I love all LGBT+ stories, so this made me happy to have a post-breakup lesbian/bi/pan/etc. story. We don't get a lot of those.
Good job! I'll read more of your stories very soooon!
The house elves plan a special celebration for the victors of the Battle of Hogwarts.
Part of the Recovery series.
I'm so happy I found a house elf story that I actually liked, haha! I'm pretty awful when it comes to the elves, and I'm so happy this story was different. I'm a huge fan of Kreacher (who isn't, after the frying pan incident with Mundungus?), but I could never stand Dobby, and that's colored all the house elf stories I've read. So, congratulations on breaking that mold!
This was such a sweet little story. I liked that it was so fluffy. Post-war really needs moments like this. I liked that you showed Winky in a new light, how changed she was after the war. And I loved that you showed the care and attention the elves put into the meal for the victors. They'd all been through so much, but sometimes you really just need something good to eat and a moment with friends. So this was really sweet.
Your characterization of the elves was really nice. A tiny bit of constructive criticism might be that I would have liked to see more descriptions of the kitchens themselves: Were they damaged at all during the battle? Did some of the elves have to sit out of the food preparations because they were injured? Was the food still there or did some elves have to go out and get supplies? Etc.
Overall, though, this was so sweet and a really nice read. Thank you for writing it!
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Her unique way of being a beacon of light, to blast through the never-ending blackness, was the constant stream into your diminishing fountain of strength.
Ginny/Luna is definitely one of my favorite LGBT+ ships, and I was so happy to find this story! You did this ship so much justice, and I genuinely enjoyed this story. I only wish it had been longer!
To start off, I have to say that I absolutely love stories that take place at Hogwarts while the trio was off camping in Deathly Hallows. There was so much happening at Hogwarts at the time, and so many moments of resilience and bravery that definitely get overlooked. So thank you for writing about one of my favorite times in the series! (Man, I need to write a story during that time too...)
Next up, characterization! I felt like your Ginny and Luna were really great! I love that you mentioned that Ginny feels like she always has to be brave and strong. But realistically, she's a sixteen-year-old girl trying to survive a war, and all of her family and friends are in danger. That's a lot to put on a person. It's so natural that she'd break down sometimes. I love that Luna was the one to be there for her. I would have loved a follow-up story of how Ginny feels when Luna is snatched off the train by Death Eaters in the spring. Luna herself was so sweet and caring. I really like how you dealt with them both.
I also loved their interactions together and the realization that they were giving each other strength; that it wasn't just a one-way street. Their friendship is one of my favorites in canon, so I love seeing it evolve into more.
Overall, this was really sweet and captured a great "missing moment" in the series. I loved it. Wonderful job!
Susan and Luna share an intimate moment in the greenhouses.
So, I couldn't resist reading more of your stories after I checked out the last one I reviewed! Mostly because I desperately need more queer characters in my life. Also because you deserve all the reviews in the world!
So: Aww, Luna and Susan! This is another pairing I hadn't thought of before! And I really love it! I was glad you chose Susan instead of Hannah, since I'm very particular to her being with Neville, and this just worked so well. I loved that Susan clearly knows Luna and loves her for exactly who she is. Their interactions made me want to know their whole history: how they got together, their past, their future, just...everything. You made me want to be a part of their lives.
Characterization-wise, you did a great job showing Susan and Luna's different personalities, and you captured Luna wonderfully. Her wonder and happiness at the simplicity of the smudges on the table was so beautiful. And how much that meant to Susan! Ahhh! So cute! I just want to see these two from meeting to death, is that so much to ask???
The setting of this was so well-chosen and really added to the moment between Susan and Luna. The greenhouse was clearly somewhere important to Susan (But hey! Do ALL us 'Puffs have to love Herbology? ;) ), and Luna wasn't expecting the night Susan had planned, but what they did have was still so sweet! And hey, we don't know what happens after this story ends. ;)
This was lovely. You did a great job. I have no CC because I'm useless.
McGonagall hosts a Cat Fight Club in the Room of Requirement. Inspired by a tumblr post by ababelofprose.
This is Renacerá from the forums (previously DarkRose/DracoFerret11 on HPFF!), here to review for you for the MAGIC House Cup activity! This time's challenge is to write a rhyming review, so I apologize if this sounds ridiculous, but I promise it's sincere! Here we go!
A fight club of more than one cat:
Now where's the story in that?
Well, I'll say that I, for one, loved this!
It's funny and wasn't a miss!
McGonagall's character was flawless.
The kitties weren't hurt and fought clawless.
At times I laughed out loud,
and think that you def should be proud.
My own kitty, Gumbo, loves napping,
or else maybe he'd win by trapping
the other cats under his belly
which is weighty and wiggles like jelly.
So, as for advice, I have one thing.
It's minor, but to you help may bring:
The last line of the story says "severely,"
then two words later says, "severely."
Overall, I found joy in this story.
I'm so happy that it wasn't gory.
I love cats more than I can say,
So this honestly made my day.
Phew! Well, I hope that was a helpful (and somewhat entertaining) review! I really do think this story was both funny and very cute. Your characterization, though humorous, was believable, and the description of the Room of Requirement, as decked out for kitties, was wonderful! So vivid, and I know that Gumbo would have loved to hang out in there. The story was great. It's very unique; I enjoyed it a lot; and I'm glad I found it. Thanks again!
Oh, I'm going to go fix the double severely thing right now. I hate being redundant and repetitive and repetitive and redundant. Thanks for this nice review. I saw the tumblr post about this and knew I had to write the story, as I love kitties and love writing about them.
I really like the poetry and the review. I showed it to my wife and she got a kick out of it, too.
Scorpius wasn't sure if he was living life or drifting through it aimlessly.
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I don’t really know how I got to the point where I was entirely too drunk and alone in a Death Eater’s flat with him, but there it is.
2nd place in the prefects' inter-house friendship challenge
Hello again, dear!
This is such a fantastic addition to Draco and Astoria's story! I loved it so much! The two of them are advancing as characters both separately and together, and I love getting to know them. There were so many moments that I loved in this, and it's such a convincing moment that will move them towards a relationship. I wanted to "awww" out loud...but I'm on my break at work and that would be super awkward to the customers around me.
Characterization-wise (which you know I love to talk about), this was fantastic. I loved the moments of tension between them. They aren't quite friends, and I really adore that. They're both suffering, and they have that in common, but they're on an edge that they haven't quite fallen over (until perhaps the end of the chapter). I love that there's this distance between them that Astoria is so afraid and unwilling to close. She's such a strong person, but she's also been through so much that she's guarded, and I don't blame her for not wanting anything to do with a former Death Eater.
Your Draco is fantastic. I really, really love him. I wish I could write him like you do! *sobs* He's so dynamic. I can almost feel him taking calming breaths to not lash out like he would have done in the past. But he's trying. And that's such an obvious part of his character as you write him, which I really love. I also like that he's more able to open up than Astoria. I feel like he really wants to be closer to someone, and he needs her to be there for him to talk to. He's been through a lot, and he's not familiar with making real friends, but he wants to try because he just can't do this alone anymore. I just...sigh. He's just so lovely.
(Had to take a break and finish my work shift, back now...four hours later.)
So, the settings and plot here were also great. I liked watching how things evolved throughout their different meetings. I can see a tiny bit of trust building through their experiences, and I can't wait to see where else it will go.
The only CC I have for you is about the first line: "I don't really know how I got to the point where I was entirely too drunk and alone in a Death Eater's flat with him, but there is is." -- Is the end of that logical? It reads really strangely to me. "There is is" sounds like it should be "there it is" or maybe "there you have it" or even "there I was." The current line (which is in the chapter summary too) just didn't read right to me.
Okay, I think that's all I have about this one! Fantastic job! Sorry for gushing, haha. I just love your writing so much.
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You're hopelessly and stupidly in love, and you didn't even see it coming in time to get out of the way.
Shadowplay Nonfiction of the Month October 2017 | Winner of the 'Inverted Chronological Nonfiction' challenge at Shadowplay
So, I finally took the time to read and review this, because I really wanted to understand your relationship with ManPerson and what all you'd been through. And obviously to understand you better too!
Your writing, as always, was incredible in this. You captured so many different emotions, and the reverse-chronological style was really cool. I usually don't like reading things out of order, but this was actually a really interesting way to delve into what you've been feeling. I liked it a lot.
I can relate to this experience so much with different people throughout my life. I'm lucky that my relationship with Brady evolved so seamlessly from friends to more, and it's always interesting to me to see what other people experience. I really do hope this works out in a way that makes you happy, however that looks for you personally.
Writing-wise, this was really well done. The language is consistent and evocative, the scenes clear. It felt very personal, of course, but I can see this as something readers will really connect with. Fantastic job, my friend.
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"To me, there is no greater act of courage than being the one who kisses first."
Ahhh, Marlene! I love Marlene stories! I don't even really know why. I just think she's a fascinating character to explore. And now that I've read her as LGBTQ+, I feel like I'll never go back. I usually see her paired with Sirius, but now I desperately want to find a bunch of Marlene/Lily stories (which I somehow doubt exist, unfortunately).
You did this ship so much justice. I desperately wanted the end not to be a fantasy. I was hoping she'd say something like, "Oh, and now it's real," but it wasn't. Sigh. But hey! It was still such a good read. The fact that it kept me in suspense despite the fact that I know canon shows that you did a good job grappling with a non-canon pairing.
Your characterization of Marlene was really lovely. I like how she thinks in terms of House qualities without realizing that she is brave. She joined the Order. She's kept a friendship with Lily despite hiding her love. She's being brave without even realizing it. And I loved her thoughts-from-afar. Those can always show so much about a character.
The ending was lovely. I wish it had been real. Overall, this was just a really nice one-shot, and I'm glad I found it!