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Bravery comes in many different forms, even for a Ravenclaw like Rose.
Hey Beth! I'm here to (finally) complete your requested reviews in my review thread, even though it's been several months since you requested (oops—so sorry about that!)
So I really liked this chapter as a whole! I liked the introduction to the minor characters and I can already see their personalities developing. I find Al and James's personalities to be extraordinarily similar though—overprotective womanizers. It's slightly endearing, though mostly i'm hoping to see more layers to their characterization in the following chapters, especially as Rose's secret is revealed. I really liked learning about Molly too and think that her relationship with Wolfram (which is, in my opinion, a very fitting name for the character you've created) is sort of adorable. I think that all of these characters have already strong, well-defined personalities, and I'm looking forward to exploring their relationships with Rose.
I really loved meeting Scorpius for the first time. I can already tell that he is a good, stabilizing influence for Rose, being "the only person" who can calm her nerves (which is actually super sweet). But I really like that you didn't shy away from his personality flaws, like his temper; I like the idea that Rose can also act as stabilizing influence for Scorpius. I think that's a sign of a very realistic and shippable dynamic: where two characters help each other be better—not perfect, but just perfect. That last moment between Rose and Scorpius was honestly such a tender and sweet moment: two broken people comforting each other. I loved it, and already ship them.
The chapter felt a little slow as we were being introduced to the minor characters, so the sudden switch in action when the guy came onto Rose was rather jarring at first. I really appreciate how well you handled that; I think it's befitting that it was jarring for us, the readers, as it was clearly jarring for Rose. I also really liked the elements of mystery you move into this character; that was really unexpected. I'd thought that that character would be a minor character, but obviously, since he can apparate even when Petrified, he's more than that. I can already tell that this story is one of those stories that's going to surprise me often and be rather unpredictable, which makes it all the more exciting!
Overall, this was a great chapter. Characterization-wise, I felt that maybe James and Al felt too one-dimensional, but this was my first experience with them and I'm sure more layers will be added in the next chapters. Excited to read the next chapter! :)
YAY SCORPIUS POV. This was a pleasant surprise!
I really enjoyed reading from his POV; this chapter led me to sympathize with Scorpius even more. After reading about his childhood and family dynamics, honestly, I felt like hugging him because he honestly is such a cinnamon roll. I liked the description of his family dynamics; I think it offered insights on why Scorpius is attached to the Potters, and I wonder if loyalty to Albus and the Potters, as they seem to be his second family in a way, would prevent him from taking action on his obvious (and very sweet) feelings for Rose.
One thing I've been noticing throughout the novel thus far is how much the characters' personality traits are influenced by their parents' personalities. For example, Molly, in the previous chapter, seems like such a carbon-copy of Percy, though perhaps with a little more flirtatious-ability ahaha. Reading Scorpius's confrontation with his father, I was really reminded of Draco's petulance and his firm, unyielding beliefs; I really like seeing that Scorpius's beliefs are, unlike his father, more accepting, though. And I like that he doesn't shy away from bringing up topics that are obviously uncomfortable, like Draco's previous prejudices and behaviors. That makes him even more admirable. At the same time, that outburst, though admirable, felt petulant and capricious, and to me, hinted at his temper.
I also liked the flashback scene with Michael. OK, being perfectly honest, I didn't really like Scorpius's treatment of Michael; it seemed reflective of Draco's tendencies to use people, which Scorpius is obviously doing with Michael. (He even admitted it!). I mean, Michael just wanted to hang out with Scorpius and is rebuffing seemed so indifferent and apathetic... it really did remind me of Draco's mannerisms to some degree, and sort of reminded me that Scorpius isn't perfect by any means, showing me more negative sides of his personality. And even though I wasn't Scorpius's bigggest fan after his dismissive treatment of Michael, I still felt so sympathetic for him at the scene describing the sight of his parents' bodies dead. Not gonna lie, I almost teared up for Scorpius, especially because the last conversation he had with his parents was a fight... I can imagine that the angst from this conversation is a source for lots of his negative personality traits, like that uncontrollable temper. (That scene was also really well-described, and I seriously want to hug Scorpius now. <3).
Since you've asked about characterization specifically, I'll say this now: you've developed a wonderful character in Scorpius. His personaliy is a mulit-layered mix of fiery aggression (that can be protective and petulant), cool indifference and superiority, and sweet and gentle tenderness that only seems to come out only around Rose. Overall, he seems unsteady and morally ambiguous in all areas except one: Rose. I really love that—you've created such a fascinating character in Scorpius.
This was such a poignant chapter; I'm really excited to read the next chapter. Well done, as always!
The chapter summary made me laugh hahaha.
This chapter was really touching after the previous chapter. What I really liked about this chapter is that we really got to see Rose through Scorpius's eyes; through his eyes, we see the best part of hers. Rose is so wholesomely sweet and sincere. Her rambling about how difficult it was to get there was so endearing. And I really loved how she handled Ron; that felt like a very Hermione-like response :D Particularly, seeing Rose through Scorpius's eyes shows me how different Rose is now, and I'm really curious to know what happened to Rose to cause such a change her. She doesn't seem as vivacious anymore, though she's definitely just as loving.
I really liked seeing more of Rose and Scorpius's dynamic. My heart broke a little when Scorpius was so surprised that Rose and Al had come to visit him, like... they're his best friends, and that he didn't expect to come see him after his parents died just shows me that he's really used to being alone. (Which makes me want to give Scorpius a huge hug—my sad, precious baby <3). One thing that I would've loved to see more of was Scorpius and Albus's interaction—though I did like the line about Albus being a wordless emotional and physical support, in the way that only a best friend can be. That's such a true sentiment; my sister is my best friend, and I find that in times of need, her presence, without words or consolations, just her presence, can help so much.
I'm not a fan of Ron's reaction; I felt that his characterization was fairly realistic, though I'm glad that Rose pointed out that he, of all people, should understand why Rose and Al came to Scorpius's side because I was thinking that during his outburst. I also understand where Ron is coming from, the overprotective-dad-side that is maximized considering Ron's already sort of volatile temper.
One thing that touches me is the fact that Scorpius still calls his dad "Death Eater Dad", even after his father's death... that just breaks my heart, and shows me how terse their relationship was, that even after death, Scorpius still thinks poorly of his father.
Also that whole "kitchen accident" explosion feels like such a "sweep-it-under-the-rug" explanation. I bet there's something else going on there... :) I love the mystery elements of this novel; they're intertwined so neatly with the characters' interpersonal drama, and it makes this novel so exciting to read.
Loved this chapter. Well done, as always! <3
OKAY so the beginning of this chapter almost made me cry. The graphic depiction of Rose's scars made me sympathize for her so much; this was the first time, I think, that we were given a really direct hint at what she went through. Whoever this Stannous guy is, I really hope that he shows up later in the novel so that someone can kick him in the balls, and so that he can pay for what he deserved. What I hate about Stannous most, and what I found to be most tragic, is the effect that he had on Rose's self-esteem—her insecurities about her scars were so sad, but so realistic. They're especially tragic because they show me that Rose isn't comfortable with herself anymore, when the previous chapter showed a Rose that was vivacious and happy with herself. So yeah. The beginning of this chapter was super emotional to read and now I want to give Rose a big bear hug <3
This chapter made my shipper heart go CRAZY. I loved the revelation about Scorpius and Rose's sexual past and I loved that he hasn't been with anyone since Rose; I think, to me, that reflects again how Rose acts like a stabilizing influence for Scorpius, which makes their relationship even more endearing.
Scorpius and Rose's conversation really makes me sympathize with Scorpius even more. His regrets about his treatment of his mother really broke my heart; I can imagine him replaying that conversation, as you described in the previous chapter, thinking of everything he could have said, everything he wanted to say. Scorpius's anger at his father and his claims that he's just like his father were really interesting, since I noticed earlier in the novel that he is actually a lot like Draco in certain aspects. But I appreciate his self-awareness and his desire to change, which makes him different and better than Draco.
I liked the little touches about Scorpius's character, too, how he's always so proper. Honestly, drunk!Scorpius can be so hilariously adorable. I also have to commend you on how well you handled the switch from humor to seriousness; the conversation started out as sort of amusing, and quickly shifted to verious serious and sad, and ended on a really tender note—and it all flowed so seamlessly. It's really hard to do that, and I think the best part is that that sort of flow is very authentic and realistic. I don't think I've commented on this before, but your dialogue is really spot-on realistic. Personally, I struggle with writing really realistic dialogue, so I'm very impressed :)
Overall, this was a really fantastic chapter. Excited to read the next one! <3
OK YAY MORE ABOUT ALBUS. I was looking forward to something like this; I think I mentioned earlier that I felt his character was a little one-dimensional, and this chapter definitely proved me wrong there.
Your characterization of Albus is rather different than what I’ve read before. Love the idea of him being in Ravenclaw, clearly a superior house ;) I also like that he isn’t a totally rational Ravenclaw. I think that’s a stereotype of Ravenclaws that really falls with the “we’re-just-nerds” stereotype, when in fact, we are so much more complicated than that. Albus’s personality is also rather different than what I’ve read before. At first, I thought he was a bit of a cad because of his flirtatious womanizer ways—and I suppose he still is a little bit like that? But if anything, I see some of Ron in him in his temper and desire to prove himself. Speaking of, I think that’s a wonderful character nuance, because ya so true—he has a lot to live up to.
I’m so curious about this tension between Albus and Harry. During the entire duel, all I could think was: WOW THAT ESCALATED FAST. (Oh, and that the fuel was extraordinarily well written, which is so impressive because those fast action-packed scenes can be difficult to write well). I can understand why Harry wanted to make an example out of Albus, and I can definitely understand why Albus would be irritated—so that’s why it confused me that the situation refused as quickly as it started, that Albus acknowledged that his father was right. I wonder if there will be lingering tensions between them. That would be an interesting thematic idea: father-son tensions.
I love that Scorpius calls Harry Harry by the way hahha! To me that shows the degree of familiarity between Scorpius and the Potters and how he’s really integrated himself into the Potters—how the Potters are a second family to him, which is honestly rather sweet.
I found it to be an interesting choice to tell us abot Scorpius and Rose’s weekend together retrospectively, especially because it sounds somfreakin’ adorable. I’m just wondering why you wanted to do that? I certainly saw merits; this allowed you to focus on the aftermath, on the Scorpius/Albus dynamic, and inject a little drama into Scorpius’s revelation of his feelings (though I think that if Rose doesn’t know them already, she’s pretty freaking blind hahaha).
Thank you for another fantastic chapter! This story is so compelling and never fails to make me laugh and smile and think. (The last scene made me giggle hahah). Onto the next chapter!
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Sirius Black learns how to be woman's best friend for a few days.
I share everyone else's anguish over the fact that this is only a one-shot. Whyyyyyy? I need more adorableness! First off, I commend you again for coming up with such a cool idea. I've never actually stopped to consider where Sirius's nickname came from--I always figured it was something James or Remus might have called him--but this was such a cute and interesting take on that.
I also have to commend you for writing dog!Sirius quite well. I know it must be a little difficult to keep in character when writing for a non-human, but Sirius was still pretty much spot-on throughout the whole fic. I also liked how what was showcased was his compassion and loyalty--the reasons why a dog animagus is perfect for Sirius.
The ending broke my heart. How do you always make my cry with your fluff??? Fluff is not supposed to make people cry hahaha. This is definitely one of my favorite fics of yours :) Well done!
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2015 Diadem Finalist: Best LGBTQA+ || 2016 Diadem Finalist: Best LGBTQA+ Character - Parvati || 2017 F.R.O.G.S. Nominee: Best Minor Character- Parvati || 2018 F.R.O.G.S. Nominee: Best Family/Friendship- Lavender/Parvati
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I was super excited to see this on your AP because I love Lavender/Parvati. I really identify especially with Parvati. I mean, it's hard not to; like her, I'm an Indian girl with a twin sister haha! When I realized this chapter was about Parvati and Padma's sorting, I think I should've braced myself for the emotional impact this would have me on personally, but I didn't, so I was surprised by how emotional I felt after reading this.
I loved how you established the contrast between Parvati and Padma right away, right from the first line--Parvati is jittery and nervous, whereas Padma is curious and calm. They already show the characteristics of their two different houses, and I think that the way you showed that was really clever. I think in this situation, I'm definitely more like Parvati. I mean, I'm a Ravenclaw, there's no doubting that, but I would, like Parvati, feel a little anxious at the sight of the Sorting Hat, terrified at the prospect of losing my sister.
I really liked how you made Parvati acknowledge that she and her sister are different people too. I got the feeling when she was walking to the Sorting Hat that she knew that she wouldn't be sorted into Ravenclaw--which was probably why she had such trouble clapping along with the rest of the school when Padma was sorted. I think that was an interesting touch and a very realistic one too!
The only part I sort of disagreed with was Parvati's statement that they're more friends than sisters. I think that that's because I have a different understanding of what a sister is to me because I have a twin too, but I've always considered a sister as a step above a friend--like a soulmate in some aspects. I don't know however if Parvati would feel the same and this is honestly a little nitpicky and definitely influenced by my own experiences.
After I finished reading this, I was a little emotional because you captured Parvati's emotions perfectly. I could really put myself in her place, and maybe that's because I identify with her so much, but I think that even if I didn't, your description of her emotions would still make me feel just as sad. So, overall, I really loved this! Well done :)
The war is over and the Dark Lord has been defeated, but as the Golden Trio return to Hogwarts to complete their seventh year, the scars of the war remain. Hermione has been appointed Head Girl alongside Draco Malfoy. With an unknown threat lurking in the dark, is it possible they can build a new path that leads them all to something brighter?
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I’m 1000% trash for a good Dramione fic and especially one with the Head Boy/Head Girl trope so I was really excited to start reading this fic. I’m even more excited now to keep reading it, seeing the interesting twist you’ve put on it! I love that you’ve put a secret between Draco and Hermione; I think that adds a layer of tension that’s definitely going to make this more interesting.
The scene with Hermione’s torture made me shiver and made me really angry too. I think you described this perfectly and I really appreciate how Hermione’s willpower and strength shined in that moment. I also liked the vulnerability that you showed in Draco there, something that I feel will likely be a focus throughout the entire fic, which I’m very excited about. I’m all for that, adding layers to characters :)
I think stylistically, it might be better to simply change the section that’s a flashback into italics. I think that’ll convey better that it’s in the past and in a different POV. Other than that, I loved it!
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Mum Friend (n.)- the one friend in the group who is always taking care of and looking out for everyone else; the responsible one
Unfortunately for designated mum friend Lyra Stebbins, she is about to find out that always taking care of everyone else comes with its own set of problems.
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Hi Claire! I'm here for BvB.
This fic has been on my TBR for a while and I'm glad I finally started reading it :) I really like the reference to The DUFF in the title and I think this is such a realistic concept, the mum friend (especially because among my friends, I'm 100% the mum friend).
So far, I really like Lyra--she's very witty and sweet and likable. I LOVE your characterization of Albus, Scorpius, Rose, Louis, and Roxy--I can already see their personalities sort of developing, which is pretty impressive considering I've only read ~2.5K. Usually it takes far longer for me to seethe wrsonalities of OCs or Next Gen characters.
I love that Lyra's working as a healer; I think it fits so well with her being the mum friend, feeling the compulsion to take care of everyone all the time. I'm wondering where she got this compulsion, and am generally very curious about Lyra as a whole. She's an intriguing and likable OC who I can really relate to, which is awesome!
Also, I ship her with Warrington... maybe because he seems sort of like a Mr. Darcy type character, and I have such a huge soft spot for Mr. Darcy type characters :D (And also because I'm the kind of person to ship two people after only one interaction hehe). :D
anyway, this was a great first chapter! :)
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Daphne finds Astoria in an abandoned corridor just before the Death Eaters storm Hogwarts.
“He’s on the wrong side." She raised her wand. "And so are you, little sister.”
Ohmygod this was heartwrenching.
OK, first off, I love Astoria. Your interpretation of her makes her so likable, and as always, I could hear her voice so perfectly, so clearly. I admire that she is guided by her curiosity; I think that's a very appropriate trait for a Ravenclaw and something that makes me relate to her and like her all the more. I also appreciated her logical moral compass; I think that's also a really Ravenclaw trait, letting her logic guide her rather than her emotions, and her logic naturally leads her to fighting on the side of the Order. I think the first scene where Celeste is running away but Astoria refuses to leave sort of drives that home. I also admire how brave that is of Astoria, even if she thinks that's the natural response. She's pretty amazing.
I'm really curious about Brendon! This is the first Greengrass story of yours that I've read (I think) so I don't know much about Daphne, Astoria, and Brendon's interactions—I'm definitely interested in learning more about Brendon and his motivations and why he gets along with Astoria more tha Daphne (even though, as far as I can tell, that might be because Daphne seems to me like a coward). I also had to comment on how well you established the difference between Daphne and Astoria, especially in their primary motivations. Daphne is self-concerned, a very Slytherin-trait. I think that Astoria literally said at some point in this fic that Daphne would do whatever necessary to get what she wanted. Astoria, on the other hand, is motivated by something more befitting of a Ravenclaw like her: curiosity. The way that that was shown was really neat IMO :)
Wonderful, as always! <3
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Some scars last a lifetime.
Winner of round one TidalDragon's 'Knockout' challenge at HPFF
Yay, I finally get to meet Brendon!
He is such an interesting character. As you've stated, he's really not a typical Slytherin—and that's interesting because his sisters seem to exemplify the other houses? Like Astoria is the quintessential Ravenclaw the way that we really should be seen, motivated primarily by curiosity, and Daphne is the quintessential Slytherin (ehh well, okay, this one's less clear; she's the quintessential /evil/ Slytherin). I appreciate Brendon's protectiveness—I think that he's motivated primarily by loyalty, which I think is an underappreciated trait of Slytherins and I'm glad that this is his main trait (as far as I can tell).
The bit at the beginning about how going back to Hogwarts was really hard for Astoria was honestly a little heartbreaking and I am so sad for her. I think you described it wonderfully though and so truely, really capturing the pain and the memories associated with certain places in Hogwarts. I really liked the bit about Celeste being the sort of Ravenclaw who only cares about her books (gives us Ravenclaws a bad name!). I like that Astoria is a brave Ravenclaw. Honestly, the two protagonists (that's what I consider Astoria and Brendon) somehow manage to stay completely purely true to their houses and yet, in doing that, blend other qualities of other houses (Astoria is definitely a Gryffindor-Ravenclaw hybrid and I'd consider Brendon to be a Hufflepuff-Ravenclaw hybrid) and that's such an interesting reflection on belonging to a House and how most people can't fit perfectly into one house over another.
OK, I'm rambling, but I also have to say that I really loved the last scene with Brendon and Astoria because it gave me some idea of perhaps a different sort of unforgivable? I think Astoria has been abandoned a little by both of her elder siblings (which is so sad), and Brendon's abandonment, to me, is more unforgivable than Daphne's because Astoria clearly looks up to Brendon and relies on him to protect her—and he failed to do that. I just love that level of nuance in their relationship.
Seriously in love with these characters ugh. So excited to read more; well done, as always! <3
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First off, I love the title and the tribute to one of my favorite poems. I think it fits this fic very well!
I feel a little guilty saying this (don't tell JKR) but I quite like Tristan and Isolda's names, better than Charles and Dorea. They seem to fit right with what I'd expect James' parents to be named. But what's in a name anyway?
what I found most impressive was your characterization of Tristan and Isolda. Their names are truly perfect fits to their personalities; Tristan is charming, a player, very much like James in that respect. Isolda is down to earth and spunky which I absolutely adore. Her quip about Tristan's blood was hilarious :D I was very entertained reading this fic because her voice bled through the words, which is really very difficult to do so bravo with that :)
i sort of saw elements of Jily in their relationship, which was really cute! Just the fact that Isolda is an expert potioneer and Tristan is a little arrogant (I wonder, has Isolda called him an arrogant toerag in her head? :D) Perhaps they're just superficial observations but considering that I love Jily, that made me enjoy the fic even more :)
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It's the harshest winter in a long, long time, and the war is taking its toll.
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Hello! I felt I was sort of obligated to leave you a review on this, considering the theme of the Winter Wonderland. I have to say that I loved your use of repetition in this. I think it helped to establish Marlene's mind-set; she's just going through this one day at a time, one step at a time. And that's a really interesting mindset because it doesn't seem to be the mindset of a hero, you know? But it seems really realistic because c'mon, they're in war—it's okay to be terrified and even upset when it seems like victory is nowhere near. And I really like that she's so concerned primarily with surviving; that's not very war-hero of her, but it's very human and realistic and I appreciated that addition to her character. It made her really relatable and all the more likable.
I also really liked the motif of the changing in the snowfall. That was a really clever way to show the change in Marlene's perception of the world and contributed to the simile of her being as "cold as ice". I honestly sympathize so much for Marlene, knowing everything she's been suffering through—her brother being gone, her father dead, her mother sick. She must feel really alone in the world, and that makes me understand and appreciate her perspective on fighting in the war much more. I have to commend you for creating such a realistic and likable character; even in the style of your writing—short, terse statements—I can hear her voice, her directness, which is really well-done!
Marlene and Gideon's relationship makes my heart ache so much. I love how in some ways, he seems to be a danger to her, and in other ways, she recognizes that he is her to protect her; she doesn't want to be with him because that would be "fanciful naive thinking" and there was no time for romance when they were in the middle of a war. At the same time, perhaps that's the exact time when people should be looking for romance because as she's said, she's living on borrowed time, and who knows if she'll have a tomorrow? I really loved that she considered Gideon almost pragmatically like, he's constant, steady, and he's a good duelist—he'll keep me safe. You really kept with the realistic arc of Marlene being primarily concerned with survival and I liked that a lot.
That last image is so sweet, so beautiful. Perfect way to end this.
Loved it, as always! Gotta say: you use these literary devices so masterfully. Like, wow. Learning so much reading your work. <3
In the interrogation chamber of MACUSA, Gellert has a revelation.
For the 'HPFT Archive Grand Opening Drabble Challenge'.
I have to say first and foremost that I really love the almost lyrical nature of your prose; it reads with such nice flow. I can tell that each word is chosen with deliberation and it made my experience reading this fic all the more enjoyable.
I really loved the characterization of Gellert here. The way I see it, you’ve paired a picture of him as the original Dark Lord and with all the characteristics of such a man; he is cruel, he is vengeful, he is really dark and unforgiving. He has a hint of romanticism, perhaps, with the whole idea of his heart only beating for Albus, but that’s sort of corrupted by his desire to get revenge. I like how realistic his portrayal is, and how unique it is—most other Grindeldore fics that I’ve read humanize Gellert but you’ve shown the side of him that isn’t really human at all.
I loved most how your tone really showed his characterization. Calling Newt nondescript, right from the start, established Gellert’s character as someone who was holier than thou in some ways, which is a really nice nuance and an excellent use of word choice :)
Like everyone else, I too marvel at how you can show me so much about Gellert’s character through so few words. That’s amazing; you’ve got read talent!
The story of the first meeting between Ginny and Harry after the war, the way I see it.
This was so sweet--sugary, lovely fluff. I love Harry's patience and kind consideration of Ginny's feelings; I think if anyone can understand what he's going through, it would 100% be Harry, and you've depicted this perfectly. You reminded me why I like Hinny :) Nicely done!
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OK, so I just love Molly's character! I loved her from the first paragraph too, when she was being all irritated with her soon-to-be-ex for not getting to the break-up part of his speech yet. I could already tell she was going to be hilarious, witty, perhaps a little uninterested in love? As I read on, I liked her character more and more—she's clearly very intelligent, a definite perfectionist. I like that she's seriously thinking about her life now, reconsidering things—she seems so confident and self-aware. I already really like her and am rooting for her! (And wondering what sort of guy can handle someone like her haha).
I love that the precipitating event in this is Molly meeting up with Agatha Painsley-Bumbershuffle (can we just pause for a moment and appreciate how ridiculously awful that last name is? It made me laugh haha!). I also really liked the subtle descriptions of Molly's childhood, how she's pretty much always been the perfect daughter, following her father's directions—but now she's doing what she wants? Percy's reaction to her outburst in the end was actually sort of curious to me; I didn't expect him to be so okay with it? But I like that, it reflects better on Percy. I definitely want to learn more about Percy and Molly's relationship.
And finally, I just had to comment that Molly's voice in this is so strong and so compelling and I have to commend you for that because it's really difficult to get a character's voice across so perfectly that I can hear her voice in my head. Bravo! :)
Yay! I'm glad you love Molly! She holds a very special place in my heart. And by uninterested in love, do you mean romance? I think Molly is looking for meaningful relationship, for sure. She feels a certain distance from her parents, and she's definitely grown apart from her ex-boyfriend. She's not specifically looking romance, though, that's for sure. And it's interesting you think of Molly as confident. Perhaps, as the writer, I see where she so clearly lacks confidence - but more on that later in the story ;) Self-aware, she most certainly is!
The best part about Agatha Painsley-Bumbershuffle is her name :P Molly's grown up with a lot of parental expectations, and so far, she's fulfilled them. Now, she's feeling that her expectations of herself no longer align as well with her parents'. A lot of her angst stems from there. Hopefully, I'll get to explore more of Percy and Molly's relationship!
Thanks for the wonderful review. I'm glad you enjoyed chapter one :D
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You’re intimidated by the new music, and you don’t know if you should tread any further from what’s familiar.
Written for SunshineDaisies' 'Short and Sweet Challenge' and Moonbaby11's 'Up for Grabs Challenge'.
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This fic immediately caught my eye because I'm a huge lover of Ted/Andromeda, and I'm a sucker for fics that have large built-in metaphors. I'm really very glad that I stopped by because this fic took my breath away, quite literally.
I have to commend you for the level of thought and complexity that was clearly put into this fic. The metaphor of dancing works perfectly and was a very insightful association to make that illustrated Andromeda's life in a new light. I really liked the idea of the "ratio of soul to the ratio of precision" part at the beginning, which I feel illustrates the expectations of pureblood society in such a clever way. I also really liked this idea of taking something so abstract, passionate, and undefinable as dance and trying to quantify it--I think that functions as its own sort of metaphor, for the way Andromeda's family tries to control her passion and soul. So essentially you've got a metaphor inside a metaphor, which is just, wow. See what I mean with the level of thought? Very impressive.
I really liked the symbology of the feathers and I think that's a very realistic interpretation of Andromeda's feelings about herself. She is generally referred to as the odd one out among the three Black sisters, but I rarely see her portrayed as ashamed of that or confused by that or blaming herself because of that--I think that's a reaction that makes perfect sense, considering how she's been conditioned to behave a certain way and be a certain person.
I loved how Ted is set up as sort of a complete contrast to everything she's ever known in her life--I love the idea of him dancing to his own beat, of him being filled with vivaciousness and light and soul. I even noticed the mood of the fic change subtly when Ted was introduced, into something much more positive and happy than it was when Andromeda was repeating the steps of her dance.
I love how your portrayed her inner conflict--it was so heartbreakingly real and intense, like that whole last moment between Andromeda and Ted. I felt Andromeda's pain--this is when the fic stole my breath!--and I could feel myself getting pulled in two different directions, feeling the same confusion as Andromeda. To be able to recreate such an intense feeling... kudos to you!
I loved how tender that last moment between Andromeda and Ted was too, loved how you showcased the comfort that Ted provides, something that Andromeda really needs. I also like that you portrayed Andromeda to be brave, because yeah, she's leaving everything she's ever known for a man who is the complete opposite of everything she's ever known, so essentially for a world that is so intensely different from everything she knows. And yet, she faces this headon with the faith that Ted would catch her when she falls--that just speaks to me about the strength of her love for him.
I also just have to marvel at the beauty of this line: "You are twirling your way between the bars that once were the pillars that held your world together." Oh, wow. I could probably rave about this single line for another 200 words, that's how beautiful it is.
I also wanted to say, as a closing note, that I really liked the decision to use 2nd person here. No one else had commented on it, which surprised me! I think it was really fitting for a story like this which revolves around the character's emotions. 2nd person really did allow me to feel Andromeda's emotions at a level I would not have felt otherwise.
In your author's note you said that you're quite proud of this--as you should be. This was a stunning and honest and emotional portrayal of Andromeda. So we'll-crafted. Well done!
'Women must fight,' she tells her. 'Nobody is going to do it for us.'
Emmeline Vance will fight to the very end.
I loved the feminist bent to this story, and I love that you chose Emmeline as the central character for this story. It makes perfect sense to me that she, as a war hero who fought in both the first and second wars, would be seen a central feminist symbol for a strong woman and I really appreciate that you highlighted this characteristic of hers in this fic.
I've noticed that a lot of your fics have a nice historical bent to them, which I also appreciate a lot—it brings a new level of, I dunno, complexity and allusions into your fics that make them even more of a delight to read. Also, as always, I really loved the imagery in this fic, especially of the three colors being the colors of release and power, and likening the two—there was sort of a freeing quality in this fic, which I think is befitting considering the feminist theme.
Wonderful fic, as always!
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In small town USA where no one bothers to keep magic a secret, Friday night Quidditch reigns supreme. For the Fort Mill Eagles, finally having a winning season means having to balance school, practice, and personal lives while keeping secrets no one wants to come out.
It's more than just a game.
Hi Claire! You know how I excited I am about this fic and honestly it's embarrassing that it's taken me so long to get here and leave a proper review but I am here to shower you with praise, at last! :)
I think that starting out with a newspaper clipping was a smart move, established a lot of mystery! I was already curious about Coach Sterner (found her name to be rather funny and very apt!) and was making predictions about whether she would help the team or not, etc. I was also curious about the characters who left, like Nicola (who I'm really curious about, seeing that Thea obviously likes her—and um, I already ship it? #Thecola!).
I really love how you integrated the setting of American high schools with a Quidditch infusion; it was really clever! I also liked the scene where they were discussing the rumors about Coach Sterner; it had a funny Mean-Girls sort of vibe which I liked! Honestly, this entire first chapter was hilarious and you did a great job establishing the characters' dynamics. I love Thea and Mason, they're literally me and my sister every morning haha, and the camraderie between the players on the team is honestly so adorable, they are squad goals.
I think I've said this before in previous reviews but I have to commend you again: your characters are so likable! I already like Hannah and felt irrationally angry when Coach Sterner sort of picked her out and feel really bad for Hannah and want to give her hugs—and that attachment is sort of crazy considering I barely know her. I think that a lot of this can be chalked up to how realistic your dialogue is; it sounds exactly like teenagers having a conversation and really makes the characters pop off the page. I also noticed that you rarely use verbs other than 'said' and instead allow the dialogue itself to speak the way it should be heard--which is clever and difficult (so I'm a little jealous).
Loved it! <3
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Mother had always said that I was different. She believed that I was capable of doing the right thing. Whatever that meant...
Hi Deana! Here with your requested review <3
So this was a really great read! I love the character you've created in Draco. In other fics where Draco joins the Good Guys, there's not always a good rationalization of his reasoning nor is he kept in character (suddenly, he loses all of his sarcasm and arrogance and teenage angst, and that just feels so unbelievable), but I was really impressed to see how in-character Draco was throughout this fic.
The exposition was really interesting to me because Draco's motivations in joining the Lestranges' mission, to me, reflected his internal conflict. On the one hand, he wants to keep his mother safe (which is definitely in-character with him, considering he is SUCH a mama's boy hahaha!). On the other hand, he wants to prove to the Dark Lord that he's not a coward—and that also feels really in-character, considering his general pridefulness and arrogance.
I really liked that Draco kept repeating to himself the three steps, the three instructions to himself—like it was supposed to be that simple (hah!). I also loved that he thought that killing Scrimegour in his sleep had no honor—that is also so in-character and a really profound insight into Draco's ideas about heroism and honor, since I think that's another one of his motivations for wanting to join the mission in the first place: so he can uphold his personal honor and his family's honor.
I liked his intenal conflict when he was trying to decide whether to "make the right choice" or not. I loved that Draco didn't really know what the right choice was; that felt really in-character for him, given that he's only eighteen years old and still developing his moral compass and the adults around him always give him really cryptic advice. In other fics that I've read where Draco joins the Good Guys, he always seems to know exactly what the right choice is and have secretly supported the Order all his life; I love that this fic stays true to his character. His motivation for warning the Minister is not his father or the Dark Lord, but his mother—and that is honestly a) so in character and b) so sweet. I love that this fic highlights one of Draco's most positive character traits: his love for his mother.
I'm really excited to start reading Love, Not War—you did such a wonderful job characterizing Draco, and I really want to read more of your fantastic characterization of him! :) Loved it <3
I'm drowning in this starry serenade
Where ecstacy becomes cavalier
A love story about a muggle, a witch, and flirting at the Smithsonian
Title and Lyrics from 'Alligator Sky' by Owl City | Banner by ameixas. @tda
Uh oh. I have a huge crush on David--this is definitely not good! Hahaha. You did a really great job showing David's choice; I can immediately see him being awkward, enthusiastic, and very likable. (I also like that he's a POC!!). I love that Lily's interested in astronomy and I really liked that David found her pretty only when she smiled; too often, the love interests are described as always perfect and it's nice to see a dose of realism :) This is creative and interesting, and I can't wait to read more!
Haha! It's okay if you have a crush on David! He's pretty neat! I'm happy that you like him so far! Thanks for the wonderful review :)
Fred says goodbye to his family
And asks them to remember
Written for TidalDragon's The Knockout Challenge @HPFF | Banner by Enigma @tda
ohmygod this made me cry and smile and laugh all at the same time—why do you do this to me?! My heart can't handle this level of love. Ahhhh. There's just too much I love about this, but if I had to choose my favorite part of this fic was how Fred's love and voice shone through. He's still so Fred, which is spectacular and impressive.
Major applause. I'll be rereading this, for sure.
So many emotions! I am very happy with this outcome! The love can be a little too much to handle - which is the aim of the game :P I'm very happy that you enjoyed it! Thanks for dropping by :)
To live in a time of war is to accept – however unwillingly – that you will know loss.
Elphias Doge writes a series of letters to the friends he has left behind.
Hi Sian! I think this may be the first, or maybe the second, piece of yours I've read—and after this fic, I'll certainly be stopping by more often. i have to say this first and foremost: I'm honestly in love with your prose. You write such a beautiful cadence and incorporate such lovely, tragic, poignant images—this fic in particular is full of imagery that really tugged at my heartstrings and that I will remember for a long time.
For instance, the first image of Death picking out the young specifically—that, to me, captures the tragedy of war so perfectly; I actually physically shivered when I read that. And then the fatalistic line that followed: "So it is, so it was, and so it will be." Not only do I love the poeticness of that line, but it's such a tragically true sentiment. I love it.
The image of the gravestone, first the Muggle gravestones and the Doge family gravestones specifically, was also heartbreaking, and for me, reflected some of the universality of war and its tragicness—a universality that this fic seemed to capture perfectly, especially in the sort of montage in the beginning as Elphias showed us all the wars he has seen in his lifetime. So many of his wishes for a world where the young can grow to old age were really heartbreaking to read—perhaps because I've been thinking about the unfairness that prevails in peacetime too, not just during war.
The most powerful image for me was the image of Fabian and Gideon as two lights extinguished too early. That metaphor works so perfectly especially with your description of the war as "a war fought in the shadows". I loved that they were characterized as bringing positivity and smiles and brightness to such dark times, and that they were also characterized sort of like Fred and George (loved the allusion to Fred and George towards the end of the fic). At the same time, even though Elphias's descriptions of Fabian and Gideon made me smile, it was a bittersweet smile because the fact that they brought such brightness made their deaths all the more tragic.
But I think that the ending sort of put a positive twist on everything; for me, Elphias's statement that he won't let them be forgotten is uplifting, because in writing about them, they will be memorialized forever—and in that way, I suppose their light will never truly be extinguished. I really liked that sort of hopefulness at the end; it seemed befitting.
Generally, a beautifully written and poignant fic. I loved it <3
Becoming Mrs. Astoria Malfoy.
Hi! I will say honestly that I'm not really a Draco/Astoria shipper but this fic migjht have converted me a little hahaha. I loved the humor--especially Astoria's dad. I guess we'll know where to look it Draco ever disappears mysteriously? :D
Both Draco and Astoria's personalities shined. I can tell that Astoria is confident, sassy, and clever, all fantastic qualities in a main character. I can also tell that she's decisive and a little spoiled, which is very realistic for a character of her upbringing. I think you considered her background and Draco's personality and built a character that is really perfect for him. Draco was freaking adorable in this fic; I loved his flustering awkwardness and his obvious love for Astoria. I also think that you captured his insecurities after the war very well; it makes sense that Draco would feel guilty and undeserving after all that he did during the war, and I liked that this played a factor in this fic.
My favorite line: "...You know my girls are my world and you were just some boy trying to snake his way into my daughter's...garments.” He cringed at the thought and Draco did as well. Of all the ways for him to put it.
Very funny and sweet!
Harry indulges Albus in his first quidditch game
Hi! This fic was actually on my TBR labeled as "the fluffy fic that'll probably make you cry and grin and a loser"... and my expectations were completely met and even surpassed. This was so freaking adorable. I completely absolutely 100% agree with you that Harry would treat his kid like this and not like the neglectful jerk he was in CC--especially because of how he was treated by the Dursleys.
So many things to love about this fic. Harry's resignation over Albus's traitorous love for the Cannons. Fierce Rose--I think this portrayal of her as protective and love is much more true to her nature than what was portrayed in CC. Albus's tiny fists (I LOVE BABIES ❤️). Harry being proud of Albus's natural seeking ability. The front row seats. Gosh, everything about it was so sweet and loving.
The entire time I was imagining James doing something similar for Harry and crying a little (okay a lot). I loved that you focused on Harry's love for his son and his desire to make his son feel loved and never neglected--absolutely in character.
The only thing I didn't like about this was that it was so short! I wanted more fluffy sweetness haha!