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Beside Yourself by sunshinedaisieswindmills

Rated: Mature Audiences • 1 Reviews starstarstarstarstar
Summary:

 

Gorgeous banner by clarity@TDA! 

Lily was dead. 


Reviewer: FredWeasleyIsMyKing Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28 Jun 2017 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hey.

 

Transferring from HPFF!

House Cup 2015 Review - Gryffindor

Wow, okay. Now I'm really in trouble. This was so hard to read in the sense it was so brilliant and killed all my feels.

I wasn't exactly sure what was going off to start with, but the confusion was good... I needed to keep going to understand. I thought Lily was dead to start with, and this would be her and James in the afterlife but then something wasn't right when Sirius started talking. 

But it was different - Lily somehow survived the attack. I was kind of sad there wasn't more detail how but that wasn't the point of this. I was so gutted James still had to die, but from the James I know from canon, dying to save his family would be right for him. Still. I'm so sad.

First things, your characterisation, even in this AU was perfect. Sirius and Remus. Sirius just shouting and trying to get a reaction and Remus trying to diffuse the situation. Lily, god. How do you even contemplate what she's going through? All of them say things they don't mean though and you just have to hope that they can get passed it in the future - they need each other now James has gone.

Lily. I don't know much about mental illness or anything but you wrote this so well and it was heart breaking to watch her fall apart. Even Harry wasn't reaching her. I was so heart broken for her and there was no happiness all the way through. You're a mean author! ha!

Overall this was truly a fantastically written piece, despite the sadness and heart shattering nature of it! You really have a gift and I hope you do well in the challenges!

Lauren



Waiting Room by cambangst

Rated: Mature Audiences • 4 Reviews starstarstarstarstar
Summary:

It all started with a blinding flash of green. At least that’s the last thing I remember. Everything was bathed in green light and then I blinked and it was all gone. Now everything is white...

 

WaitingRoomBanner

Simply gorgeous banner by Slytherinchica08 @ TDA


Reviewer: FredWeasleyIsMyKing Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28 Jun 2017 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Green Eyes Against Blinding White

Hey Dan

 

Transferring from HPFF!

 

Tagging you in the review thread in the CR!!

 

So... Lily and James... How have I not read this? All I can do is apologise and dive into this review. 

 

So, your start. Immediately it invokes a sadness in me as I can pinpoint where your starting this but I can't help but marvel at your descriptions.. Beautifully written Dan!!

 

When James is alone I really love how you let him work through all the possibilities that might have happened, particularly as he slowly pieces it together. The part with the pranks him and Sirius did to each other did make me smile though, I could imagine them both doing those things to each other!

 

As the truth finally hits him, I think his reaction is perfect. I actually wanted to cry for him because that realisation must be so hard for him. The way he breaks though, accepting he died but not being able to accept his wife and sons death is just so gutting. The way he thinks about them, it shows how selfless he really is and how much he loves them. It was so sad but so well written Dan. 

 

He allows the grief to pull him under understandably but when he comes back to himself I like how you take him through the stages of grief, the bargaining in particular. He isn't satisfied though and constantly tried to piece together what happened, from what I have in my head for James, that's perfectly in character. I also love the whole paragraph about him being James Potter and not losing, again very in character. 

 

Again his thoughts are with others as he realises that Sirius is going to take the fall for the betrayal which is of course what happens. Eugh, I can't bare it. Stupid Peter. 

 

I was so happy when Lily appeared! Well happy and sad because obviously she's died too now but at least they have each other. She seems a lot calmer than James and like she's thought things through more, but I'm guessing by her red eyes she pretty much cried herself out. 

 

Lily's very logical as she puzzles out what has/will happen. Cue more heartbreak as she guesses Harry will live with Frank and Alice (if only). It takes James a lot longer to come to terms with Peters betrayal but I like that you gave us some reasoning behind it. You showed us he was part if the marauders which of course he was. Too many people shy away from that fact and I'm glad you aren't one of them. 

 

So I get the feeling that, even though they don't know it, they're actually waiting to appear to Harry in the forest when he calls them using the resurrection stone? Does that mean Sirius and Remus will join afterwards? I'd be fascinated with the possibility of reading more about that!

 

So once again you've written a beautiful piece Dan. Your characterisation is really strong in this, I loved James. Just yeah, a fantastic piece of writing. 

 

" it's funny how she managed add just a touch of heaven to this insufferable hell. that line is perfect. 

 

Also the whole section where James loves the fact his 1 year old son beat Voldemort was perfect - it did make me giggle!!

 

 

Lauren :)




Goodbye Love by M C Crocker

Rated: Teen Audiences • 6 Reviews starstarstarstarstar
Summary:

Goodbye Love

Emotion gripped him as it had not done before, as his hand graced up her nearly cold arm. She was supposed to react to his touch, but there wasn’t a movement. His grip tightened around her as he choked back a sob.


Reviewer: FredWeasleyIsMyKing Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 26 Jun 2017 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Goodbye Love

Hi,

 

So this was a reallu great story. I love that you took some of the canon that we know and weaved in your own story to make this! I really enjoyed reading it.

 

I don't read much founders, but I've never read Salazar being in love with Helga before. I found the idea really lovely. Your descriptions of Helga through Salazars eyes were so sweet and lovely, you could really feel his love shining through.

 

The way she died though, eugh it breaks my heart. It felt very fitting with what i would expect from Helga though, and it very much made me thing of the protection Lily gave Harry with her magic. Something born out of love to protect something which you love. Beautifully done.

 

Now, even though Salazar insists Helga isn't the reason he and Godric are fighting, I liked that that must have played an big part in their friendship breaking up. Again, something I hadn't come across but really loved the concept of. And again, perfect characterisation of Helga trying to repair their friendship.

 

But the twist for me, gah I loved it. Salazar leaving the Basalisk at the school to one day get revenge on the muggle borns who he blamed for Helgas death. It makes his actions here much more understandable, though still so wrong. I think what saddens me most is how disappointed Helga would have been with his reaction to her death. Brilliantly played and fit together though.

 

Finally, I didn't know about that myth but again I love the way you've weaved things that actually are true into your story. Brilliant.

 

Overall I really enjoyed this! I think your characterisation was spot on and I loved the story as a whole.

 

Well done!

Lauren



The Final Goodbye by TreacleTart

Rated: All Audiences • 5 Reviews starstarstarstarstar
Summary:

Harry and ginny

Gorgeous banner by amoretti @ TDA

 

Companion piece to The Next Great Adventure

 

Ginny and Harry share a final goodbye.


Reviewer: FredWeasleyIsMyKing Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28 Jun 2017 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: The Final Goodbye

Hey Kaitlin!


 


So I thought I'd come and review more of you're awesome work and you reward me with tears and breaking my heart! 


 


Oh even the title warned me what was to come but I went with it anyway. While not my OTP Harry and Ginny are still one of my favourite pairings in the series and I love it when people write them just as you have here. They just understand each other and love each their so deeply, it's clear through their actions and words and so perfect. I loved that you created that between them in their final moments. 


 


I always imagine Harry to be a bit of an adorable sweet heart so again it was so cute to read you give the same characterisation. I loved the little bits of dialogue between them, when he tells her she's beautiful and as she's leaving that he's always loved her we're absolutely spot on perfect. Just beautiful writing. 


 


I'm glad you kept Ron and Hermione in this too, they would be right there beside his children and grandchildren to say goodbye. I also agree with Harry's sentiments on how hard it's going to be for Ron loosing his best friend, although I think Hermione would be feeling it too, they're all just so close. 


 


While this was obviously a really sad piece I did also like the calmness about it. I'm also glad, while mentioned, we didn't get to the rest of the family coming over. This was just a quiet moment between Harry and Ginny in his final moments and I think that's what makes it extra special. 


 


So yeah, sorry for just gushing at you for a while review but I really loved this story and it was just wonderful to read with perfect dialogue and great characterisation. 


 


 


Lauren



Unconfirmed Reports by TidalDragon

Rated: Mature Audiences • 4 Reviews starstarstarstarstar
Summary:


The Department of Mysteries' mission is not confined to its assigned space within the Ministry's walls. Unspeakables Samuel Hatch and Kellyn Landreth are responsible for investigating the lesser-known creatures and unexplained phenomena of the magical world.

 

Winner of the 2015 Golden Paw for Most Original Story

 

Sensation banner by zorya @ TDA.


Reviewer: FredWeasleyIsMyKing Signed
Date: 28 Jun 2017 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: [S1:E1] "Pilot" / "The Pluckley Anomaly"

Hey Kevin,

 

Transferred from HPFF!

 

So I've been pairing this story up for many months now and it's about time I finally came to read and review! I'm really glad I have. 

 

So first off I have to say I really love the format you've picked. From the chapter title I got the impression it was going to be like an episode of something and from the off it felt very much like that. The way you introduced the story and the characters is exactly like a pilot episode of a tv show so a huge kudos to you on that. You've really pulled it off. 

 

Now I also have to say that I love how you've delved into the department of mysteries here and the unspeakables. I found your take on the place and what they do really fascinating. I was drawn in from the start and didn't want the chapter to end. To say how long it is in terms of word count in most certainly didn't feel like it at all. It literally flew by because I was so engrossed. 

 

I found your two main characters really interesting. I'll definitely be interested in how the dynamic between them changes. They're clearly very different people but as the chapter went on you could feel them start to accept each other more and their competence. Especially Sam being more accepting of Kellyn. I thought it was an interesting remark you made in your AN about it being unlikely there will be romance between them, as that's something you generally see in a series. However, I like their relationship as it stands currently but if it did build into more, I could believe that too. I guess what I'm trying to say is you can easily do it either way and I think it will work. I just look forward to seeing it build either way. 

 

I also have to comment on the magic you brought into this. You really focused on the runes more than I've ever seen anyone else do and I found it all fascinating. I love that you picked out the specific words to use for them, details like that is exactly why I love HP and what JK Rowling did, so when authors replicate that, it makes me very excited! The seven stones were another interesting detail. Seriously, kevin, the planning you've clearly put into this is astounding and it really shows through and has paid off in this first chapter. 

 

So, overall I really loved this! It's really different in terms of content and format but it works and I really can't wait to read more! Your description and story telling is fantastic, I felt like I could watch the whole thing in my mind as I read it. And I've already mentioned I like your characters too! 

 

Now, can we have a second episode/chapter please! ;)

 

 

Lauren



Author's Response:

Thanks for transferring this over, Lauren! It was great to see you in the CR again and you will (maybe) be pleased to know I'm looking at this story again and hopefully will have a new episode ready soon!



Flaming Quilltips by FlamingQuilltips

Rated: Teen Audiences • 6 Reviews starstarstarstarstar
Summary:

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Some obsessions are productive, some are destructive... some are just plain toxic...

The story of Dorcas Meadowes, and an obsession that cost her everything.

FIRST PLACE IN ScorpiusRose17s Twisted Zodiac Challenge

Theia's Minor Character One-Shot Challenge || Teh tarik's Epistolary Fic Challenge

Awesome banner by Lauralei @TDA


Reviewer: FredWeasleyIsMyKing Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28 Jun 2017 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Pensive to Parchment

Hey Ysh! 

 

I figured it was about time I came and reviewed some of your work!!

 

I really loved this story, I actually can't believe you wrote it for so many challenges and still pulled off a great story, it didn't feel like you were trying to shoehorn anything in at any point at all. 

 

I was also so impressed that you managed to tell a story so fluently through a series of letters, diary entries and a newspaper article. And you also got so much characterisation through too! Honestly; I was so impressed reading the whole thing! 

 

Dorcas was such a mixed character here for me. I couldn't help but like her but at the same time I was just so angry at her for shutting her friends and loved ones out, despite the reasons she had. And benjy! Poor, poor benjy. I just wanted to give him a hug so badly! I mean despite everything he loves her and waits for her and he never gets the chance to live his life with her. In all honesty, his letter was the saddest one of all for me!

 

Going back to your plot, I was really impressed by the fact you tied in things and people we know from canon and weaved them so beautifully into this plot. Dorcas and benjy as characters for one, then Dorcas being killed by Voldemort himself l, hokey the house elf was a brilliant little detail, and even the picture of the order meeting (cute idea for that to be Alice by the way). You then add to it this wonderful storyline of Dorcas father being murdered and her obsession with bringing him to justice. There's just so much going on here and yet you seemed to pull it all together so effortlessly without the reader getting lost at all. I was very impressed!

 

I liked the bit of blood magic you used for the documents, I did wonder if that's where that was going but it was a nice touch all the same. 

 

I guess I should finally mention the ending. From the start I could see that this was leading ultimately to dorcas' death but it was still sad to read when we finally got to that point. The newspaper clipping and the little information we actually got about the circumstances of her death I think we're more powerful than if you would have given us explicit detail. 

 

I really enjoyed this Ysh! Great piece of writing! I'll be back again soon!

 

 

Lauren



Keeping Vigil by poppunkpadfoot

Rated: Teen Audiences • 3 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star
Summary:


(banner by me)

The first month in James and Lily Potter's heaven feels more like a month in hell.


Gryffindor Story of the Month - May 2015


Reviewer: FredWeasleyIsMyKing Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28 Jun 2017 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Keeping Vigil

Hey Kayla!

 

Transferring from HPFF!

You start off so innocently. I know I know they're dead and that's really sad but it could be worse. They're in their cottage, they have family.

Then. You ruin it *lip trembles* The nursery is also their and so the poor couple are reminded constantly of what happened and what they've lost. Kayla! Yes, it's good Harry survived but poor James and Lily :(

It's so painful to read Lily sitting in the nursery every day. I just want to reach into the screen and give her a hug.

The pond. That's a clever idea so they can see what's going on in life. But oh, the pain James goes through because of Sirius! Arh, this story is too much to take.

Okay, the argument is heartbreaking but very realistic. With what they're going through it's not surprising in the slightest that this is what it's going to boil down to. I think it was almost needed to get the two of them talking and understanding. To clear the tension. It was well written and you kept them in character - James defending Peter to the end. Poor Harry. Stuck with the Dursleys. James has a point and Lily knows it.

The ending. Eugh. Yes they will be alright. They have to be alright? I have to believe that. They have each other and Harry will be alright in the end.

You really shouldn't feel insecure about this - it's brilliant! I loved it!

Lauren



Author's Response:

(transferred from hpff)

 

"Hey Lauren! Thank you so much for the lovely review - even though you caught the flag ;) I'm glad you liked this!"

 

hahah that's kind of a sad review response, so here's more!

 

muahaha i love to start of innocent and then ruin things. >:D

 

i'm honestly still not quite sure how i managed to come up with the pond, but i'm glad i did - this story wouldn't be the same at all without it, and besides, the whole story came about through the idea of james witnessing sirius's arrest.

 

i'm really glad you thought james and lily were in character. i hadn't written them in years and years when i wrote this story.

 

really glad you enjoyed this story, lauren <3

 

-kayla



Reviewer: FredWeasleyIsMyKing Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28 Jun 2017 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Keeping Vigil

Hey Kayla!

 

Transferring from HPFF!

You start off so innocently. I know I know they're dead and that's really sad but it could be worse. They're in their cottage, they have family.

Then. You ruin it *lip trembles* The nursery is also their and so the poor couple are reminded constantly of what happened and what they've lost. Kayla! Yes, it's good Harry survived but poor James and Lily :(

It's so painful to read Lily sitting in the nursery every day. I just want to reach into the screen and give her a hug.

The pond. That's a clever idea so they can see what's going on in life. But oh, the pain James goes through because of Sirius! Arh, this story is too much to take.

Okay, the argument is heartbreaking but very realistic. With what they're going through it's not surprising in the slightest that this is what it's going to boil down to. I think it was almost needed to get the two of them talking and understanding. To clear the tension. It was well written and you kept them in character - James defending Peter to the end. Poor Harry. Stuck with the Dursleys. James has a point and Lily knows it.

The ending. Eugh. Yes they will be alright. They have to be alright? I have to believe that. They have each other and Harry will be alright in the end.

You really shouldn't feel insecure about this - it's brilliant! I loved it!

Lauren



Author's Response:

(i think your review posted twice ;) )



Death on the First by nott theodore

Rated: Mature Audiences • 9 Reviews starstarstarstarstar
Summary:

Perfect banner by quixotic @TDA



 


There's a murderer on the loose.


 


Nobody knows that it's me.


Reviewer: FredWeasleyIsMyKing Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28 Jun 2017 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Chapter One

Hey Sian!

 

Transferring from HPFF!

 

I've finally made it here to review :D I'm so excited about this story! I can't wait to read it all. For now though I'm desperately trying to work out who this can be... I'll leave my thoughts as we go along...

 

So nine people... well, eight. Poor Parvati! In with the action straight away and I can't help but feel for her. What reason has the murderer got to kill Parvati? And want to kill more of them? Oh this has me thinking so much!

 

Now, occasionally the murderer thinks about other people, meaning I should be able to cross people off my list of people, as technically the murderer wouldn't think of themselves that way. But I don't know if this a trick by you! Just to throw us off the scent! I'll make notes though and see if it narrows it down...

 

I love the murderers thoughts. If it wasn't kind of creepy they would be really funny! You've also really thought of everything... like the fact they're all trapped together, giving the murderer chance to kill the rest of them. Brilliant. All though, not for the rest of them!

 

I like that Pansy already has a history following her that hints at past murder. I don't think it would be her though... it seems to obvious. Plus the murderer thinks about her so I don't know. Also Theo seems to have his mums past trailing him.

 

The murderer was very clever in seeming to put suspicion on Seamus to me with the conversation they "overheard". I'm interested to see how that develops!

 

So I've narrowed my list of suspects down... but I'm still not sure who it is yet... I eagerly await the next chapter!

 

Sian, this was a great opening and I can tell it's going to be a great story. I can't wait to find out where you're going to take it. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar mistakes. The story just flowed so well and sucked me in completely! Please update quickly ;)

 

 

Lauren :)



The Nightingale's Lament by nott theodore

Rated: Mature Audiences • 2 Reviews starstarstarstarstar
Summary:

Incredible banner by easterlies @TDA // Golden Paw 2014 Awards for Best One-Shot and Best Descriptions



 


After the battle of Hogwarts, Vicky Frobisher's life is played to the nightingale's lament.


Reviewer: FredWeasleyIsMyKing Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28 Jun 2017 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: The Nightingale's Lament

Hey lovely, 

 

Transferring from HPFF!

 

I had to come and read this and oh my goodness I'm so glad I did! But first let me pick up the shattered pieces of my broken heart! Eugh the feels. 

 

The first section is really beautifully written Sian. Seriously beautiful. Your descriptions of the place Vicky's in are perfect and I can see the place in vivid detail. It doesn't take long to pick up that the war has just happened although I love that you don't just force the information on us. You let us get to that conclusion in our own sweet time which is great. 

 

I really enjoyed the flash backs to the charms club. It gives us a good starting point into the Colin/Vicky relationship. They're clearly not that close - is the charms club a way of Colin getting some time with Vicky I can't help but wonder? I also love the personality you gave Susanna in such a short space of time. I smiled at her reluctance to let the gryffies in! 

 

The way you write Vicky's pain is again perfect. I'm throwing that word around a lot I know but I can't describe your work any other way. You don't go over the top but as I read I can literally feel her pain completely. I can feel my heart breaking as I consider the war and all the horrible things that happened and how it affected people before I'm even a little way into your story. 

 

I get to read some more little cute scenes first though! The flashbacks Vicky has about her and Colin's time together are all perfectly placed and each one has made me smile. 

 

I loved the patronus scene, I feel live knowing peoples patronus and I think it can be a really intimate thing to share with someone, almost like baring a piece of your soul. It's really awesome Colin teaches her that. I also liked that even though it's clear Colin likes her, he still didn't tell her about harry and the DA. He almost did but I feel it signals a big change in him, it shows him more mature that he still keeps it to himself as yet. 

 

Then we get on to Colin actually asking Vicky out on a date and I can tell you that I've got such a goofy smile on my face right now. I love these two as a couple and it's breaking my heart that it's not going to last! Also, perfectly timed interruption from the fat lady there, I loved it!! That felt like such a "book moment" as in, I could have easily been reading that about the trio from JK. 

 

Seriously Sian, my hearts going to burst if I keep reading these moments. The idea of using the room of requirement for a picnic is lovely and so thoughtful of Colin. Your making me love him more and more with each section I read. The present is also a really lovely idea and from the way you have portrayed Colin thus far I can see him thinking about such a thoughtful gift for her. And then he tells her he loves her! I honestly want to stop reading here and add my own 'and they all lived happily ever after' but I can't, I need to keep going. 

 

I thought it was great that, even though this story isn't about Colin when he was younger, you still managed to get a little reference in there. It only emphasises my earlier point though that your showing a much older and mature Colin and doing it very well!

 

You then manage to turn the flashbacks into a much darker presence in the story. The muggle born registration commission was obviously coming and we know Colin has to go on the run. I think you dealt with her parents reaction in the best way possible, it's hard but I can imagine parents acting any other way. Her brother is her one escape though and again I think it's true to your characters that Vicky played the fiancée card to her brother. 

 

The scene with ginny was very well placed. The girls have somehow in common and being able to do something Colin would have must be a source of comfort for Vicky and ginny knows it. It's also kind of nice to have some reference to harry and ginny in there. 

 

The more I read the tougher it's getting. The reunion in the great hall between the two of them is so lovely and all I want to do is wish it could last. The build up to her seeing Colin in Oliver's arms is really hard to read Sian but you've done an amazing job of hooking us completely no matter how much it pulls at our heart strings. 

 

The last section is hard. Having never gone through something like this it's almost impossible to imagine the pain but the hallow feeling you give Vicky just seems fitting. 

 

Wow. I'm completely blown away by the beauty of this piece. It's fantastically written and has made me both giggle and cry. Vicky Frobisher isn't well known but the few facts we do know you've stuck too. You've written Colin in a light that not many do and I love it more than anything. The relationship between Vicky and Colin is perfection and this will forever be my head canon now! You've written a better love story in this one shot than some published authors can do over many books. Sian this is a fantastic one shot, you should be seriously proud. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar so good job on your editing!

 

 

Lauren :)



The girl whose name means happiness by Rhaenyra

Rated: Teen Audiences • 6 Reviews starstarstarstarstar
Summary:

Her mother wanted her to marry the Baron, desperate for the Ravenclaw bloodline to continue.  But she didn't know about the girl from the green grass meadow whose very name meant happy and carefree.

 

Winner of FireOpal's "Some Chicks Marry Chicks" Challenge.


Reviewer: FredWeasleyIsMyKing Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 26 Jun 2017 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: The girl whose name means happiness

Hey

 

So this was the first founders fic I've ever read but I really enjoyed it and I loved the concept of the story. It was brilliant.

 

The first thing I have to compliment you on is the language you used. Without going so overboard that I was unsure what you meant in places you really made it feel like era when the founders would be around. Things like four and ten were really nice touches so huge kudos to you.

 

I really liked what you did with both Rowena and Helena's characters. I can really imagine Rowena being a hard woman to please and Helena not feeling good enough, especially when we hear her story told to Harry years later. I also liked the fact you alluded to the fact she more than likely knows what's happening - someone as clever as Rowena Ravenclaw will have had it worked out I'm sure. Helena on the other hand knows exactly what she wants but the way she has to play this game with her mother to do it. She really is feisty - especially at the end when she promises to tell her mother the truth if necessary.

 

But the story with Blythe is just so heart warming, in just a one shot you completely have me routing for them as a couple. I love the back story you gave each of them and the fact that for Helena, Blythe really is happiness and freedom from being married off and producing an heir. Honestly, you got so much across in just a few paragraphs, I really was in awe.

 

I also have to compliment the background you gave on the Baron. I thought it was very fitting of what we know of his character. To be honest, I could easily accept this whole thing as complete canon. I thought it was such a good story.

 

Well done on a great story and good luck with the challenge!

 

Lauren



Secret Keeper by poppunkpadfoot

Rated: Teen Audiences • 7 Reviews starstarstarstarstar
Summary:

Sirius Black was a womanizer.


Well, that was one way to put it, anyway. There were others, but they weren't so polite. The point was, Sirius had been with a lot of girls. Peter wasn't really keeping track - really, he wasn't, it wasn't like he was keeping a list or something - but he knew that it was an impressive number. A number that put the rest of the Marauders to shame.


Reviewer: FredWeasleyIsMyKing Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 15 Jun 2017 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Secret Keeper

Hey Kayla :)

 

This is my first review on the hpfanfictalk archives so woo! And what a great story to be leaving it on!

 

So first of all I love your characterisation of Peter. I have to start with this because it's one of my biggest bug bears when people write him as not fully part of the group or that everyone is horrible to him. I feel like they're trying to make excuses for him doing what he did later in life and that just doesn't sit right with me. You however, I loved what you did. The way he observes the group and interacts with them all is exactly how I picture him to be. He seems to see exactly what is going off with them all. He's an important part of the group and you didn't shy away from that.

 

Funnily enough, when I read the title of this story I totally thought it was going to be about Peter being the Potters secret keeper so it threw me for a minute when it wasn't. I enjoyed the irony of Peter being so good and determined at keeping Sirius' secret here, while gently encouraging him to share with his friends of course, when we know how good he isn't at that later in life. Nicely played.

 

For the story at a whole, it was just so adorable. Poor Sirius going through what he is, I just wanted to hug him tight and tell him it was okay to feel what he was feeling. My heart truely broke for him thinking he was going to loose his friends if his secret came out. But of course James and Remus proved him wrong, I love that they both were like "If he actually is a death eater we'll be miffed" but in the end they managed to push away all his self doubt by telling him there's nothing he could do to make them stop being friends with him. Genius idea on the two way mirrors by the way. Oh, and as James is one of my favourite characters I particularly loved his response! It was perfectly in line with my head canon of him.

 

Overall this was a great story that dealt with real issues people face with their sexuality brilliantly and still managed to have a lot of light hearted moments in there that made me both smile and squee!

 

Wonderful work Kayla, I really enjoyed this story!

 

Lauren