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Actions Speak Louder than Words by Veritaserum27

Rated: Mature Audiences • 107 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Feature
Summary:


Bravery comes in many different forms, even for a Ravenclaw like Rose.


Reviewer: 800 words of heaven Signed
Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Broken

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Ooh! Chapter one and a mystery already! Considering all the clues we've had so far, it makes sense to introduce it in the first chapter, since it is such a big part of Rose's life. Right now, it's her defining characteristic, except that she obviously have a great deal of love for her friends and family.

 

I really liked the way you wrote about her panic attack. I hope that we get to see her dealing with her anxiety in an "ordinary" way as well. From experience, it can sneak up on you at the most inconvenient of times, but it's not always so bad. You can be fighting the battle on the inside whilst still maintaining a happy front to the rest of the world - which Rose has already mentioned, I believe.

 

And from the chapter titles, I assume that we're going to be getting different points of view! Woohoo! Nice start!



Less Than by MegGonagall

Rated: Mature Audiences • 4 Reviews starstarstarstar
Summary:

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She felt less than; she felt defective. 

 

 


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Hey Meg! I won't be around on your birthday, so I'm popping in now!

 

HAPPY BIRTHDAY!

 

This story, man. I just. Right in the feels. The symptoms you've described lead me to believe that this is a particular syndrome, and if it is that syndrome, I also have it. I'm nowhere near ready to think about having children, but I know infertility is a very real possibility. I'm so sorry to hear that you're going through this. I can't even imagine what it's been like for you. I'm a med student though, and I'm super passionate about removing the taboo around talking about "women's health issues" like infertility (and miscarriage and pregnancy in general). There's a part of me that's cheering that you wrote this story because it's so so important to talk about stuff like this.

 

I'm sorry that I don't have anything to say about the story itself in terms of characterisation and dialogue and all those story craft things. I read this story yesterday though and I needed a full day to process my feelings about this before writing something. So I guess that means a pretty good story. I understand that this is a deeply personal story for you, and I feel really privileged to have read this. Thanks for sharing, and happy birthday once again.



The Great Tale of Me, Lyra Malfoy by ImaRavenclaw

Rated: Mature Audiences • 12 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star
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Hi, I'm Lyra Saige Malfoy! You recognized the last name (I tried and failed to pretend I was adopted). As you can probably imagine, being a Malfoy is dreadfully hard work. From warding off weird stares to dealing with your brother and his boyfriend snogging at the breakfast table, things get tough. Which is why I resort to my Gryffindor spirit, and brave it out. Let's just hope things don't fall to pieces!


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Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: I.

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Heya! I'm dropping in for your review request :)

 

I really enjoyed this first chapter. Like you said, not much happens, but it was still fun.

 

Lyra seems like a fun character. She's sarcastic and a little weird. So far, she seems like a typical teenage girl. I'm looking forward to seeing her gain some depth in character. Not character growth since it's far too early in the story for that, but just some more fleshing out on who she actually is, beyond the sarcasm and tendency towards slapstick humour. I do like her use of lists. I approve of lists greatly.

 

Since we didn't get much on individual people, I'll just lump the rest of the Malfoy family together. I'm really looking forward to getting more Scorbus that doesn't just involve smooching - probably in the same boat as Lyra, there. I am not sure how likely this is going to be since this story is in Lyra's point of view, so of course we're going to see their relationship through her biases. I love this new and improved Draco Malfoy. I am all about the "father-of-the-year" Draco Malfoy trope. However, I'd love to see how he got there. I know this is also unlikely since sixteen-year-old daughters don't really care all that much about their parents' character development. But still, I think it will help this slightly out-of-character Draco make a little more sense if we got a little backstory on this miraculous transformation.

 

As to humour, I really enjoyed myself! I am a big fan of the humour genre, and this was a lot of fun. For me, most of the humour in this chapter came from the dialogue itself, rather than Lyra's internal monologue. I'm not sure how that's going to change over the chapters. On the note of dialogue, I really enjoyed it. It was fast and snappy and felt realistic. However, I would love a little more description of what's going on immediately around Lyra. I got enough background knowledge for an opening chapter, but not much on where Lyra actually was or how anything looked or felt our sounded. I had to fill in a lot of those gaps myself.

 

Typos:

 

"Oh, so your Hufflepuff with muggles, but not with your own sister? Wow, Scorpius."

- "you" should be "you're"

 

(we share a dorm for christ sake!)

- "Christ" should be "Christ's"

 

This was a great opening chapter, though! Looking forward to more :)



The Gifts: Neville by BlackPixie

Rated: All Audiences • 4 Reviews starstarstarhalf-star
Summary:

Neville makes a big decision. To talk to the person he's been crushing on forever. But fate takes over.


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Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

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Heya! I am finally, FINALLY here to review your lovely Hanville story. Yay for Hanville!

 

Ah! This is just sooo cute! I am enamoured with their love story. Neville is very true to what we know of him from canon. He's still nervous and a little shy, but still quite the Gryffindor, deciding to approach Hannah about his feelings that way - and all of a sudden, too!

 

And Hannah! I would have liked a little bit more about her, but I understand that's a little difficult to achieve when writing in first person. But what we do get is just wonderful! She seems so capable - and that's just such a perfect match for Neville.

 

And OMG look at Madam Rosmerta playing matchmaker from beyond the grave! It's a little sad that she has passed away, but go figure she works out what's going on between the two of them before they ever do. What a sharp woman!

 

This is just such a lovely piece! Awesome stuff :)



Slytherin Career Day by cambangst

Rated: Mature Audiences • 6 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star
Summary:

The student of Slytherin House were born with everything: wealth, prestige and pure wizarding blood. Now it's Severus Snape's job to help them find the one thing they don't have: careers.

Written for ToujoursPadfoot’s Gift-It Challenge and dedicated to the incomparable Roots in Water!

 

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Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: A Long Day in the Dungeons

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Heya from review tag!

 

Hahahahahaha! This has to be one of the funniest stories I've read in a really long time. And it was just straight out humour - no romance, no intense plot twists - just some good ol' laughs! Thanks for that!

 

I think this must be the first time I'm ever saying this, but I actually liked Snape! He was so cynical, and angsty, and his beautiful sarcastic self! In quite a worrying twist, I saw much of him in me! And his notes concerning each student were the best! I think "Remora" might have been my favourite, simply because it was just so original and accurate a description!

 

I adored how well you wrote each of the students' sessions. It was such a well thought out caricature of each character and was just such a pleasure to read. Like, Crabbe's one creeped me out like you wouldn't believe, Pansy's was most amusing, Goyle's was just so... Goyle, and Daphne's was quite funny, too! I think Draco's took the cake, simply because I could almost imagine that being his actual passion in life - and Blaise's - OMG! I don't think I've laughed so hard since the student I read before!

 

But do you know who my favourite character was in all of this? McGonagall. Because she's right. It could be much, much worse!

 

I really hope you write something like this again - this was quite enjoyable!



Heading Out to the Highway by cambangst

Rated: Mature Audiences • 2 Reviews starstarstarstar
Summary:

You can try to be crazier than Sirius Black, but nine out of ten Healers do not recommend it. The tenth was just too old and deaf to understand the question.

 


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So it's been a really long time since I read something of yours, and I was casually browsing through your page when my eyes snag on one word: Sirius. Cue embarrassing fan girl moment.

 

Okay, so the first couple of paragraphs are amazing. Often, I think, we forget that Sirius was just a teenager when he left home, and whilst what he did was brave and everything, he was still, you know, young, and I think that reflects really well in your writing. I can literally hear the petulance and righteous anger in his internal voice, and it really makes him sound like he's sventeen years old. From his word choice to his actions, they all speak of his youth.

 

I thought it was rather mature of Sirius to make the decision not to go to the Potters in his state of mind. I think it showed a certain depth of character to him that is often not as prevalent. And I adored the fact that it was Remus' voice in his head telling him not to do something as stupid as have a duel with his parents. To me, both of these things showed the positive influence of his friends, and how they're almost saving him from what he could have become if he was left to his own devices.

 

The song keeps on making me think that Sirius is just going to pull his Wayfarers or Aviators out of the pocket of his grungy leather jacket, and go ride his bike down some lonely, dusty highway, into the red setting sun, with rock music playing in the background. Usually, I'm a bit sceptical of song fics, but I think with this one, you've used it really effectively, so it doesn't mess with the flow of the story, and adds a lot to its overall tone. The lyrics are almost part of the story itself, which is really clever!

 

The description with the motorcycle was really cool! It was expressive, as well as emotive. The way you described the bike felt like it was the personification of Sirius; almost an extension, or an inanimate embodiment of his personality.

 

Oh, how I love the way you describe the Blacks! There's something darkly humorous about it, whilst still being scornful and derisive. It tells me a lot about Sirius' personality. He's probably a very sarcastic person, with a dry sense of humour!

 

It's wonderful to see that you've shown Sirius being sympathetic to Regulus, and feeling sorry and disappointed. Often, Sirius is portrayed as outright hating his brother, but here, he seems to have a more balanced view of him, and can see some of the reasons why he's the way he is.

 

The way Sirius describes the driver of the Jag showed another side of his character. He sounds hypocritical here, and we know that's the case in canon, and I just adore the way you've written it so much!

 

"Maybe I should start following football." I laughed so hard that I just woke up my dog from the other room! He's just trotted in and is watching me trying to catch my breath. I have no idea why I find this so funny, but it is!

 

Ah! I loved this so much! It was amusing, and deep, and full of teenage angst! So good! I can completely imagine Sirius acting this way, and thinking these things! Your writing was so quintessentially him, yet there were aspects of his personality that were brought to light which aren't often focussed on, and it was a pleasure to read! Thanks for the amazingness!



Detox by cambangst

Rated: Mature Audiences • 20 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star
Summary:

War is poison. For Dracy Malfoy, Astoria Greengrass is the antidote.

 

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Reviewer: 800 words of heaven Signed
Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 3: Regrets

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It’s been a really long time since I read this story, and I’ve missed it :( I really need to get better at regularly reviewing stories, because I know how much I love feedback and it sort of makes me a horrible author for not doing the same. But, anyway! I am here!

 

Draco’s worry about being recognised and his struggle to get readmitted to Hogwarts made me think of something. It must be so difficult for people who were on the “losing” side of a war. A lot of the time, these people were not directly involved in the conflict, but are still negatively associated with it. I love this aspect of the story, how it makes me think about the repercussions and aftermath of big calamities. The struggles and bigger themes are very applicable to daily life, and that’s a real pleasure to read.

 

I remember you mentioning in my last review that this wasn’t going to be a “Draco getting better” story, and with Draco’s symptoms of PTSD, I think I have a better understanding of where you might be taking this character. I love how you’re portraying him as more complex, blurring the lines between “good” and “evil” as they are, making him far more human. It’s obvious that he hasn’t given up in all his beliefs from before the war, be they good or bad, and I’m really looking forward to his ensuing struggle with those beliefs being challenged by others and himself. I think the biggest drawcard for me about this story is that I really want to know where he ends up at the end. What is he going to be like?

 

The extreme reaction of Minerva McGonagall really has me as surprised as Draco. They really don’t like him, do they? I can understand limiting his interaction with the student body in order to facilitate the recovery of the students, for which he is partially responsible, but McGonagall’s reaction… threw me. At first, I was like, “what? No! This isn’t the McGonagall I know and love” but then I was thought that she’d also lost people for which she cared, and after all, she is human. She’s allowed to grieve and be angry.

 

For some reason, I had an insane fit of giggling at the mental image of Isadore’s crazy cat lady aunt.

 

Oh, my goodness! I love the way you write Slughorn! He’s a little self-absorbed and very materialistic, and I’m just fangirling over the way you show these characteristics in his speech and mannerisms. So awesome!Ooh! Clandestine meetings between Astoria and Draco! I’m sort of excited and anticipating awkward teenage communication, but also at the same time dreading the possible second-hand embarrassment. Especially now that we know that Astoria fancies Draco… And Draco is also quite the awkward turtle. Lots of chances for second-hand embarrassment to look forward to!



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Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 2: Getting Clean

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I read the first chapter of this story quite a while ago, so my review is a little late because I went back to reacquaint myself with Draco.

 

I actually like Draco a lot more in this chapter than I did in the first. I don't know if that's because more of his personality is revealed, but it feels as if there's been a lot of character growth between chapters one and two. It was as if Astoria really kick-started his life, and it feels like he's become a lot more aware of what he is in a very short amount of time. He's not exactly "getting better" and the scene in the restaurant really illustrated that he has a long road ahead of him to get what he wants.

 

It's quite interesting that Draco still wants a standing in society and respect from his peers. I would think that considering his current headspace, society and what others think of him would be the last thing on his mind, but in a sense, it makes sense. It's the way he's been brought up, and he feels if he achieves those things again, his life may begin to take on some semblance of normality. It does feel as if the kind of respect that he wants is different to the one his family had previously. Even this early in the story, it feels as if he wants his family name to be remembered for its own merit rather than its blood purity. I'm not sure if I'm reading too much into this, but I think it shows that Draco is quite mature in those terms already.

 

What I find so intriguing about this story so far is the turmoil Wizarding society is in. Right now it feels as if it's beginning to lean towards a very extreme hatred for purebloods, rather than acceptance of people regardless of their blood status. I think that's quite realistic portrayal of the situation. The society as a whole suffered a great trauma, and like the individuals that make it up, it's going to take some time to heal.

 

Your portrayal of the Greengrasses is also so fascinating. They are blood purists, but their views are more restrained and mainstream, I think. They actually make me think that if the Weasleys weren't poor, and Arthur wasn't obsessed with Muggle technology, their views on blood status could be very similar to those of the Greengrasses. I just love how they hate the pureblood families that supported Voldemort, not because of the idealisms that they advocated through him, but because it besmirches the good name of old pureblood families as a whole. I always forget that the Wizarding society of Britain is just so small. They function more like a small town, where everyone knows everyone else, and families that have been around for generations actually means something. I just love how the Greengrasses are a window into life on the other side of the glass, so to speak. I don't really know how Astoria is going to be as a character as yet, but I definitely hope to see some more of that tension in the old families.

 

I just really adored this chapter for the world building that you did, as well as further character development of Draco. It has me very interested to see where Draco, as well as the people that surround him in general will all go over the course of this story.



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Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Sobering Up

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I don't usually read stories like this, but I was in an adventurous mood, and your writing is always so excellent, that I thought I might give this a go. I love me a good Draco-gets-better story, so I couldn't resist!

 

I must say that I'm not even a little bit disappointed that I read this. I will forever be envious of your mad descriptive skillz. You manage to paint the scene and the characters without using unnecessary words, which is totally awesome. There seems to be some direction to this as well, and it's great that it's so evident in the first chapter.

 

I really enjoy your characterisation of Draco. Whilst it's not how I imagined him after the War, it's still very believable and rings true of what we know about him. It's going to be a long and painful journey for him, and I'm glad that I can tag along for the ride!

 

Obviously, you don't need to be told how good a chapter this was. First chapters always give me grief, so I stand in awe of your superior first chapter skills. Looking forward to seeing what happens next!



And Then There Were Three by cambangst

Rated: Mature Audiences • 2 Reviews starstarstarstarstar
Summary:

James Sirius, you’re the luckiest kid in the world

 

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Written for Toujours Padfoot's Gift-It Challenge and dedicated to my wonderful beta reader sophie_hatter.

 


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Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: A New Beginning and a Promise

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GAH!!! THIS IS SO CUTE! It's almost two in the morning in my neck of the global woods, and I have more than half an essay to write, which is due in tomorrow, but WHO CARES BECAUSE HARRY AND GINNY HAD A BABY!

 

Sorry about that - I think I got a little carried away, there. But really, this story is such a wonderful read!

 

First off, let me start with Ron and Hermione. I thought your take on Hermione was a bit more uptight than what I had expected, but it worked well within the story. I guess when they have kids of their own, she might loosen up a little! Ron was typically Ron. He was pretty ignorant of the magnitude of what having a baby entails, but was still very loyal towards Harry and Ginny when all those crazy people came out of nowhere. To be fair though, Hermione didn't seem to get how big of a deal a baby was, either!

 

Molly and Arthur were adorable! I guess it wasn't much of a surprise that two pretty decent parents would make two pretty decent grandparents, as well, and it showed. Molly acted like the maternity ward was her second home, and Arthur was a very calm and wise force in the room.

 

Harry and Ginny's reactions to becoming parents seemed really in character and very realistic in the setting. Even heroes don't know what to do when it comes to parenting! I liked how you showed their insecurities, fears, and general noobness in such a light and humorous way!

 

Actually, the entire piece was so light and funny - it was a delight! In my opinion, you handled a very monumental occasion with the right amount of humour, so that the entire piece came off as being very poignant and sweet!

 

I don't think I can say this enough, but this really was a really nice read!



The Joker and Her by Illuminate

Rated: Teen Audiences • 27 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star
Summary:

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Since her mother was killed, grief and pain have become the biggest part of Brienne's world. Unable to come to terms with her death, Brienne blindly jumps into the world of Hogwarts School, where she encounters matchmakers, red-headed pranksters, very disturbing dreams and - hopefully - the answer to the ultimate question: Who killed her beloved mother?


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Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 2: Sorting

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Hello from review tag!

 

I don't remember if I said this in my review for your first chapter, but I really like your author's voice. It's clean and crisp, yet very descriptive and vivid! Well done!

 

We still haven't learnt a lot about Brienne, except for the fact that she and I agree that Sorting a new student who does not start Hogwarts in their first year, is something that should be done in private. It's already so daunting starting in a new school, and in a brand new country to boot, without adding the pressure of the entire student population knowing who you are into the mix. I think she handled herself very well, and I guess I can see why she may have been placed in Gryffindor!

 

Looking forward to the next chapter!



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Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: The Dementors on the Train

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So, I've seen this story floating around the forums, and I thought it was about time I gave this a shot!

 

It's been a really long time since I read some good ol' drama. From your summary, the plot sounds very promising!

 

Our introduction to Brienne is interesting. We know bits and pieces about her; enough to form an opinion on her, but without knowing who she really is. It's a really subtle and well-done way of characterisation and I commend you on it!

 

I, too, think it's a really inelegant way to be introduced the school. For first years, the boat trip across the lake is the best thing ever, but for a new kid starting not in first year, it's not so crash hot. I'm looking forward to reading about Brienne's reactions!

 

Wonderful first chapter (you probably get this a lot), and I'm looking forward to meeting more characters and getting to know Brienne better in the next chapter!



Fear and Loathing in Branson by cambangst

Rated: Mature Audiences • 2 Reviews starstarstarstarstar
Summary:

That was the great thing about Branson, as far as Rick was concerned. Everything always went according to plan.

 


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Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Around the World, Wizarding Style

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This was... very amusing! I found myself laughing and smiling all the way through. It actually reminded me a lot of the prequel that JK Rowling wrote a few years ago for World Book Day, where we get to see the wizarding world from muggle eyes.

 

I actually adored Neville here. It was a lot like Neville... but not at the same time. It's difficult to explain, but whatever he was, he was adorable and I loved reading about him and his adventures with Luna!

 

I must commend Rick for putting up with a "nutter" for as long as he did! That takes some fortitude. Whilst the miscommunications due to magic were amusing, the culture clashes took the biscuit!

 

I really enjoyed this! Awesome stuff!



A Man Named Newt Scamander by Pixileanin

Rated: All Audiences • 1 Reviews
Summary:

There once was a man named Newt Scamander.  Set after the Epilogue of Harry Potter.  Written before the release of Fantastic Beasts, but miraculously, still canon to date,


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Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 of 1

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You cannot believe how happy I am to have read this and understood all the words... okay, most of the words, but technically all the words because I didn't have to pause and consciously think about context. It feels like I've unlocked some sort life achievement. Woohoo!

I was actually going to read Just Rose which I started reading ages ago, but then this is a bit newer, and I have soft spot for stiff upper-lipped old men (oh, how Downton Abbey has spoilt me) and an even softer spot for Newt Scamander. Since the announcement of the FBaWtFT film, there's been a bit of an influx of Newt stories, but they all feature him as young, and not old and crotchety at all like you portray him here! I loved that! He was just so fantastic!

 

You wrote the characters with such clarity that even in so relatively few words, each of the three men were well-formed and distinct. HOW DO YOU DO THIS? WHAT IS YOUR SECRET, OH GREAT ONE? Rolf was also delightfully relateable and had me itching to find out more about him, even though we never meet him. His so-far colourful career and war of attrition with his father make for an incredibly compelling character (can you tell that I'm just not-so-subtly begging for a sequel about Rolf?).

 

This was just so lovely, and I actually wish that it were longer! I really wanted to see poor Beauregard's reaction to his son's act of rebellion and father's decision of support. I have a strange sort of respect for Beauregard as well, because he forged his own path, albeit it be one of corporate wealth and tyranny. It's not often that I come across a one-shot that has closure but also leaves me wanting to know so much more, which is a hallmark of your wonderful writing! So wonderful :)



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I am so happy that none of the words bogged you down. I tried really hard to use them in a context that would push the reader through the multi-syllables instead of slow them down, you know? It was a great challenge, and brought forth this colorful man, Newt. 

I actually have a long-standing idea for a Luna/Rolf story. It's been in my head for years, but the one thing holding me back is ?Luna. She's tricky, and I have more *thinking* to do before I decide how I'm going to present her.

Anyway, thanks so much for the compliments! I am always amazed when people pick this fic over my others to read in a tag. A few people have mentioned that they wish this was longer, but quite frankly, I think the relentless verbosity would start eating away at my soul. :p



Control by BlackPixie

Rated: All Audiences • 3 Reviews starstarstarhalf-star
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"I am the one thing in life I can control" - Aaron Burr, Wait For It - Hamilton the Musical


Reviewer: 800 words of heaven Signed
Date: 25 Feb 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Heya! Here for the Feb 2018 Hot Seat!

 

I love the Hamilton soundtrack, so I thought I'd branch out a little, and give a Hamilton fic a go, since the musical is still so FAR AWAY here in Australia!

 

This was very short, but quite too the point. I really enjoyed that about this little piece. It definitely requires familiarity with the musical and its characters! Aaron Burr isn't one of my favourite characters from the show, but this song does resonate with me in many ways. I could really see things from his perspective in this piece. It was almost as if he'd been struggling with  how he couldn't control everyone and everything in his life, but at this point in time, he's come to accept that the only thing he can control is himself - and that's okay.

 

A lovely little piece, Hayden! Looking forward to you writing more Hamilton stuff in the future!



Constant Vigilance by merlins beard

Rated: Mature Audiences • 2 Reviews starstarstarstar
Summary:

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Nymphadora Tonks has a new assignment.
 
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Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Nymphadora

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Hello! I am here for a birthday review! HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!

 

So this is great. I love love love Tonks! In such few words you've written this lovely slice of life piece. I really enjoyed getting an insight into what it's like being a junior Auror, especially on her first assignment as a fully qualified one! You captured the first-day-on-the-job jitters perfectly, and also how, unfortunately, things can go oh so wrong no matter how hard you try.

 

And that love story tho. I must admit that I am not a huge fan of such big age gaps between a couple. I am trying to push my boundaries and challenge myself to read out of my comfort zone, and this was actually delightful. It's not a ship I've ever really considered, but here, you've crafted the story so well that I can see the dynamic working. Excellent job!

 

Thanks so much for this little gem of a story, and happy birthday once again *hugs*



Game Over by Pixileanin

Rated: Teen Audiences • 11 Reviews
Summary:

James Sirius Potter is in trouble.  This time, it's not just a game.

A series of six sequential chapters of exactly 500 words each. 


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Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: One

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REVIEW TAG!

 

I'm a bit of a fangirl of your writing so I couldn't resist the chance to tag you. And a new story? Yayayayayay! I love reading entries for the Every Word Counts challenge, and I've never read one with more than one chapter. SOO EXCITED!!!

 

This is such a fantastic start! We've been thrown right into the deep end here - I love it :D AND IS JAMES A SPY?!?!?! Because that is totally cool.

 

Less than five hundred words in and poor James has already landed himself into trouble with his new identity. Totally a set-up. But since the pill came from his superiors (I'm assuming) IS THIS A CONSPIRACY? I love a good conspiracy (along with SPIES).

 

If you haven't gathered already, this story is making me a little exciteable. Catcha next chapter!



Author's Response:

Oh, hey!!

What? Fangirl over MY writing?? Wow. I think you're the first. ;) I feel honored here. 

James is a... with a... and is in deep... with his... which... and therefore leads to...

There. Got that? Yeah, me too. That's kind of what it's like to be limited to 500 words. :)

So glad you enjoyed the shortest chapter allowed on the archives! See you around, and thanks for fangirling. Seriously. I'm grinning like an idiot.



Reviewer: 800 words of heaven Signed
Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 2: Two

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REVIEW TAG!

 

I still can't decide if someone here is a spy or not. I feel like there should be one lurking around somewhere... they're the ones who are always up to dodgy things :P

 

Anyway, more insight into James'... er, job? A heist! Ooh! Exciting! The suspense builds! And the girl - who doesn't have a name yet - is involved in the same occupation as James? Yes? No? Maybe?

 

And who is Matt?

 

Basically, this story is awesome because you've done so wonderfully writing each chapter in just five hundred words, and I'm left asking all these questions. Obviously, my review skills need some work since all I did was ask questions rather than review - sorry about that. I'm just very excited!



Reviewer: 800 words of heaven Signed
Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 3: Three

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REVIEW TAG!

 

I'm sitting in a lecture right now, so obviously, this was the perfect time to play review tag! It was so lovely to get the chance to tag you again :)

 

And the plot thickens! So apparently James is working for the Ministry? Maybe? Probably? I still don't really know - that's half the charm. I feel like I'm reading a Jason Bourne film plot - James even looks like Matt Damon for some reason.

 

Ooh! Matt! What nefarious things have you been up to? Guess I'll have to read the next chapter (or the next... or possibly even the one after that) to find out!

 

Awesome stuff as always!



Reviewer: 800 words of heaven Signed
Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 4: Four

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Twice in one day! Woohoo! I'm on a roll.

 

Okay, so I had to read this chapter twice just because it messed with my head so much. It actually took me two goes to understand what was going on - like you had to watch Pirates of the Caribbean 2 and Inception again just to understand what was going on. Don't take that as a criticism. My absolute favourite thing about this story is because it leaves so much unsaid, yet still has all the important bits that make a story - like description and dialogue and everything. I think it's just great how you've used the 500 word limit per chapter as almost a character itself in this story and not let it encumber you. It adds such a unique flavour to your story - very film noir.

 

And poor James! I'm finally understanding (I think? I say this every time and I'm still wrong) what might be going on - namely, what on earth James actually does for a living.

 

Only two more chapters to go!



Reviewer: 800 words of heaven Signed
Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 5: Five

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I love this story so much! I never have any idea what's going on and it's the penultimate chapter. The plot keeps thickening. I sort of want things to solve themselves, but then I think, nah. I'm having too much fun.

 

I'm sort of scared of reading the last chapter. I don't want this to end! Where will I get my fix of "what on earth is going on?" (in the best possible way) when this is over? *runs away from possibility of things ending*

 

Fantastic chapter, as always. You shall be seeing me soon for the final chapter. Or maybe not. But I will be back!



Valour by blackballet

Rated: Mature Audiences • 4 Reviews starstarstarstar
Summary:

banner by me

 





Life goes on


But so does death

          Innocence and arrogance combine in a story about eight newly-graduated revolutionaries.


Reviewer: 800 words of heaven Signed
Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: The Doubt in the Strength

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REVIEW TAG!

 

It's been simply ages since I read a Marauders fic about all the Marauders, and even longer since I read a serious one. I am so excited!

 

This is a super interesting start! Everything is appropriately mysterious and cryptic, as is fitting for a first chapter, I think. Dumbledore really doesn't like telling people the whole picture, does he? I wonder if that aspect of his personality will come in later on in the story as well.

 

The character I'm most excited about is Mary. She's the only Ravenclaw, the only one who has no idea what's going on, and she's the only one who seems to be showing the correct emotions in this situation - I'd be terrified and confused, too! Boo all the Gryffindors for pitying her!

 

Hopefully, I'll be back soon for chapter two! Fantastic start, once again :)



Broken by Lost Muse

Rated: Mature Audiences • 1 Reviews
Summary:


Banner by heartfelt @ TDA!


One night, locked in the dungeon, Hermione wonders why the man she loved broke her heart so brutally.


Reviewer: 800 words of heaven Signed
Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Broken

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REVIEW TAG.

 

I visit your author page so infrequently, so I am always so pleasantly surprised when I see that I have so many wonderful new stories to choose from!

 

I think I say this every time I write a review for you, but I am just SO IMPRESSED by how much your writing has improved over the years I've been reading it. You were always fantastic, but with every new thing I read, you become EVEN MORE FANTASTIC. HOW DO YOU DO THIS? WHAT IS YOUR SECRET?

 

This was just so creepy to read. Draco was a horrible horrible person. It's been a while since I read an evil Draco story, and I love the way you turned the usual Dramione love story on its head. I'm not much for the ship, so this was so realistic for me. I felt so sad and sorry for Hermione, and her pain felt so so real. Love can be a terrible, terrible curse sometimes. It was so nice to see that she was still loyal to Harry though. She knows she's going to die soon, but still she keeps his secrets. Go Hermione! More power to you!

 

This was just a wonderful read, and good luck with the challenge :)



Hermione Granger by Veritaserum27

Rated: Mature Audiences • 11 Reviews starstarstarstarstar
Summary:

banner by Asphodelic@tda

 

Voldemort is defeated, but your work is not done.

 


You are needed more than ever.  You are stronger than you feel.

You are Hermione Granger.


Reviewer: 800 words of heaven Signed
Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Harry Needed Her

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REVIEW SWAP.

 

Hey, Beth! I'm sososo sorry about the incredibly late review, but it's midterm break for me finally, and therefore, after an eternity, I have the time to review! Yayayayay!

 

So I'm still basically waiting for the next chapter of Hurricane Luna (not that I'm obsessed or anything...), but this story caught my eye because PRETTY BANNER. Also, not many fics are just named after their main characters. I can't recall ever reading a story just called "Ron Weasley". So cool banner and cool title, but also Hermione is a cool lady!

 

I really loved the way you started this story off! I expected it to open from Hermione's point of view, but it starts with Ron! It's just so sweet to see how much he loves and misses her and OMG I misread the line when he first sees her, so I thought that she'd lost her skin, and that was why cartilage and sinew was visible in her neck. I just went "COOL. ZOMBIE VIRUS." and then moved on without another thought. I actually got to the end of the second paragraph before realising that no one was nearly as excited about a zombie virus as they should be, so I went back and fixed my mistake :P

 

(Either way, it was a great beginning and I loved it. Although, think about it: LIVING ZOMBIES).

 

And then it was a flashback! The thing with Bellatrix's Cruciatus curse being particularly nasty was a really nice (and by nice I mean horrible WAT HOW CAN SOMEONE BE SO HORRIBLE) touch. And although I'm cringing at Hermione's physical and psychological pain, it's all tied in with her feelings for Ron and how he was there the entire time. And then we jump into the action of hunting Horcruxes (excellent band name), but that too is tied up with the relationship between Hermione and Harry, looking specifically at how she views her value to him.

 

This was just such a wonderful start and I'm super excited to see where you take Hermione. I'm sorry for both the super late review, as well as the rambling sentences (just finished an assignment - still in fusty academic mode).

 

PS: Congratulations on your Dobby nomination! *hugs*



Queen of Quills by Lost Muse

Rated: Teen Audiences • 2 Reviews starstarstarstarstar
Summary:

Lovely banner by beyond the rain @ TDA!

Rita Skeeter reflects on the life she has led.


Reviewer: 800 words of heaven Signed
Date: 31 Mar 2018 Story: Chapter: Chapter 1: Memory Lane

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SLYTHERIN REVIEW TAG.

 

I really liked this story! This was a deviation from your usual style and choice of mood and tone, but it's still fantastic. I love visiting your author's page because I'm always going to find something new that will challenge the way I look at a character. This piece was no exception.

 

I am just in awe of how you wrote so empathetically about a character that you dislike. To me, it seemed that you used that dislike to feed Rita's own self-loathing. Whilst I am of the opinion that Rita would have been unrepentant until the very end, I liked your take on things. I think Rita mentions it herself, but she has rarely thought about her actions and their consequences. It is interesting to note that now, as a doddering old woman, she is finally doing so.

 

I love the little touch of gallows humour at the end, there. Rita Skeeter: Queen of Quills or Rejected Outcast? is a book I'd definitely want to read. I can just imagine her penning it as she's dying, her way of leaving one final mark on the world. It would be a particularly "Rita Skeeter" way to go!

 

This was a lovely read, and I thoroughly enjoyed myself! Until next time :)