Uh oh. I have a huge crush on David--this is definitely not good! Hahaha. You did a really great job showing David's choice; I can immediately see him being awkward, enthusiastic, and very likable. (I also like that he's a POC!!). I love that Lily's interested in astronomy and I really liked that David found her pretty only when she smiled; too often, the love interests are described as always perfect and it's nice to see a dose of realism :) This is creative and interesting, and I can't wait to read more!