I love Molly so much. She's so sarcastic, I like her toughish kind of nature and how she won't take any bull from anyone. I was surprised that she would go out drinking with Heath though, I figured she'd be the sober friend hauling Heath home. And she's such a relatable character, the one thing that is constantly going through my head is same every time she does something.
I'm so excited to see what kind of shenanigans Molly and Heath get up to in Pisa (and I knew she was going to miss the train I was like girl who are you kidding here.)
I'm pleased that you're still liking Molly. I am worried that she might get a little irritating because she's so grumpy all the time, but I also hope that she remains relatable.
They were very obviously going to miss the train :P Thanks for reading and reviewing :)
Ah yes, more Heath and Molly banter, how I love me some Heath and Molly banter, heck yeah. One second the two of them are about to jump at each other's throats and the next second they're best friends. You can just see the fondness that's coming from Heath the longer he spends with Molly.
Speaking of Molly, you go girl! You show off those awesome math skills of yours and rub them in Heath's face why don't you! I love how he's so shocked about it as well. "People can do calculations that fast what is this!?"
But anyway, this was brilliant as usual and I can't wait to find out what Molly and Heath are going to do next and what shenanigans they're going to be up to.
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Heath and Molly banter is the best kind of banter, let's be real. I think Heath is far more open to liking other people than Molly. Molly isn't cut out to like other people that quickly!
I actually love writing Molly. There's nothing really smug or pretentious about her. She knows what she's good at and what she's not and she's very unapologetic about it.
I laugh every time I think about the Paris chapter! These two are in for quite the shock!
I love the difference between Heath and Molly. Molly is sort of strict and straight-forward and she's a no nonsense type of girl, he is just the complete opposite of that. I love how Heath's so confused around London. Molly is all "of course I know where all of these things are I visited them daily when I went to school" and she's just so I'm impressed with Heath and his plans for traveling. Her reaction to finding out that they're going to Stonehenge first is so hilarious because she's just so bored, she was expecting this great adventure and instead what she gets is Stonehenge as their first visit. Heath on the other hand is so excited for it because he's never traveled before you so he completely ignores Molly's "are you serious" attitude right now.
Molly is this sarcastic and almost a serious person, and Heath is this little boy in a candy store. The contrast between the two of them is really great and it just makes the story about 10 times more hilarious because of that.
That Beards and Sandals guy is one heck of a character though. I mean I have never come across a character like that in fanfiction before so it was nice to get some new personalities into the story. Molly however does not seem to agree with that because she was just so done the entire time. You could feel her disdain and how incredulous she found everything that he was saying through the chapter and I think that's really great because you don't always get the feeling of what the character is feeling in the story so well done on that.
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I love writing the dynamic between Heath and Molly. They're similar and different in just the right ways and that makes for a lot of fun. Heath at Kings Cross is like the best thing ever. He's sort of trying to get things done so as not to look like a complete noob in front of Molly, but he's just so confused about all things British! Molly's reaction to travel is a normal reaction, I think. Travelling is great and you come back with these great memories, but not every moment is filled with awesomeness and adventure.
Socks and Sandals is one of my fave characters of all time, I think. I adored writing him as this hippie surfer dude who is actually quite intelligent and a little clairvoyant because he can. Molly is like the teenager who is perpetually angry at the world. I love her so much for it!
Thanks so much for reading!
You definitely have a knack for writing comedy. I couldn't stop smiling throughout this entire chapter.
I absolutely love Heath, he sounds like the exact opposite of Molly and exactly what she needs. They're a little bit similar but they are more different than alike. The reason that I'm saying that is if I come back to this after a while, I won't be confused as to whose point of view the story is being told from because Heath and Molly have such different voices (and believe me, that's a great accomplishment considering some published authors can't achieve that).
I adore how unamused Molly was when Heath showed up. By the sounds of it, he's pretty used to girls just giving him whatever he wants as soon as he sends them that heart-stopping smile of his but Molly isn't one of those girls. I have a feeling that those two are going to have quite a lot of arguments while they travel together. I can just picture her in my head giving Heath this unimpressed look while he tries to convince her to do something.
I never pictured Dennis Creevey as turning into this mountain of a man as heath puts it, he always seemed like a small type of guy instead of big amd muscly. I guess puberty hit though. At some point, I start thinking of Dennis as a mountain instead of Dennis.
I never really thought that traveling the world would require a bodyguard but then again, Heath is traveling to new and strange places and he could get into trouble (for some reason I have a feeling that Heath is going to end up getting into trouble). He might accidentally end up insulting someone without meaning to and Molly would be forced to bust them out of the situation before they got attacked.
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I'm glad that you think I can write comedy. I don't really write much of anything else, so it's nice to hear that what I do write is well-received :)
Heath and Molly are more similar than either of them realise at the moment. But yes, in a lot of respects they're opposites. I'm so happy that the points of view read distinctly! That was really my biggest concern - that the two of them would sound the same!
Heath isn't exactly "used to" getting whatever he wants, be it from girls or anyone else. He's worked hard for everything so far, but you're right in saying that he's definitely used to people liking him when they meet him. He's quite friendly, and he's never quite met someone who doesn't respond to that.
The last time we see Dennis Creevey he's fourteen and probably scrawny. Puberty and Auror training can do wonders!
Travelling the world doesn't require a bodyguard, but Heath definitely does need someone to keep his head out of trouble! He's a magnet for trouble!
Thanks so much for the review :)
I can see that Molly hasn't been taking that nap that she's been needing to take since she has such great power.
By the sounds of it, Molly is over stressed and in serious need of a vacation (and a nap). I love the sarcasm and dry humor that is just pouring out of Molly. She sounds like someone I would get along with just because we're so alike.
I love how while her boyfriend is trying to break up with her she's not even thinking about what he's saying at all, instead she's pondering her life. I feel like Molly was done with her ex-boyfriend long before he actually broke up with her.
She just sits there as an obligation and endures his rant. Instead of being heartbroken, Molly is waiting for the break-up speech to finish so that she can leave. I'm sorry but I just really really love Molly. Molly is my spirit animal, you feel me? I'd probably be doing the exact same thing in her situation.
My goodness though, Audrey is certainly one for theatrics, I am actually wondering how on earth Percy got married to someone who seems to have a flair for theatre. But I think Audrey works for Percy. I'm wondering how she would've convinced Percy to elope with her, that seems almost impossible given the type of person that he is. I must applaud Audrey on that achievement though if she did get him to elope.
Agatha Painsley-Bumbershuffle, goodness what kind of a name is that. Did she get made fun for it while she attended school. I cannot think of a parent who would give their child such a name unless they were being cruel. Her character sounds like she fits the name perfectly by the description that you've given her however. I wonder if Agatha is going to show up any more in the story.
But anyway, great job and I look forward to the rest of this story!
Haha, she really does deserve a good nap, doesn't she? And a vacation, of course. They both sound like excellent things that Molly needs. I'm so pleased that you like Molly. She can be serious, but she has this really dry humour that only makes sense once you get to know her.
Oh, Molly was definitely done with her now-ex-boyfriend loooong before he broke up with her. She was just used to the status quo, in a sense.
Molly doesn't really have time for breakups, tbh :P
I like to think that Percy and Audrey balance each other out in that sense. And it was Percy's idea to elope ;P
Agatha Painsley-Bumbershuffle is one of my favourite names of all time, I think. I peaked creatively with that name.
Thanks so much for the wonderful review :)
I don't want to be the person who says I told you so, but didn't I warn Heath not to go on about 'what could possibly go wrong'? And he didn't listen to me. So in a way I'm unsurprised to see that he didn't respond well to the totally rad cosmic travel and instead emerged with a broken arm.
Molly makes a good point. I know the Boston Tea Party was all about freedom and rebellion and stuff but seriously, what an abominable waste of perfectly good tea.
“What’s worse than dying?” Heath asked. -- Being expelled?
Why did the Daily Prophet and/or Auror Office not supply Heath and Molly with international Apparating permits? That could have come in really handy. But, I guess this way it provides Heath with an interesting angle to his travel articles, in that most travel things in the Daily Prophet probably don't have Muggle travel involved.
When Molly makes plans she doesn't mess around. That's a lot of impromptu planning! I guess the question now is how many of her plans will get derailed because she has to go find Heath and get him out of whatever impromptu thing he's walked into willy-nilly. It will probably happen at least once. Maybe 26 times.
Also I don't often get to say that I learned something new by reading fanfiction but today I did, with your mentioning of the Carnac Stones. The place sounds really cool :D
I really love this fic so far! It's so imaginative and fun, and I'm so glad I came back to read more of it!
The best part about Heath's reaction is that Molly is totally fine! And surprisingly unruffled for being transported into another country.
There are better things to throw away than tea! Those Tea Party people were rebels, indeed!
Being expelled is definitely the answer to that question, haha!
More on those Apparating licenses later!
Plans being derailed ONLY 26 times? I think you underestimate the power of Heath!
I've always wanted to write an educational fanfic :P
Thanks so much for the wonderful review, once again :)
I love Raj even though I don't even think he's going to show up much in this story. He puts up with living with Heath, and he sings Celestina Warbeck in the shower. Another minor character I love who probably will never show up again is the woman wearing fluorescent green robes and walking her pet ferret on a matching leash. Even the unimportant details in this story really shine, which just makes it so much fun to read!
HAHAHA, of course wizards in the USA are using the metric system! I thought this tidbit was so funny as I usually consider the USA to be a bit backwards in not accepting the metric system, but turns out it's just the muggles. Wizards have been up to date with the times since the metric system was first invented! And that in itself is funny too because wizards are generally such a backwards society themselves, or at least just a little antiquated - you know, using quills and parchment, a wireless, etc. So great. Also, you will probably be amused to know that I just googled the origins of the metric system because after reading this I was curious if Napoleon really was the one who thought it up XD
As much as Heath is shown in a kind of silly way here for stashing away his chocolate frogs, I can kind of relate because I did the same thing stocking up on dark chocolate Bounty when I went to the UK.
The guy welcoming everyone to Stonehenge is totally one of the people from the futuristic utopia in Bill and Ted's Excellent Adventure. As soon as everyone walks in I'm expecting some powerful music to play.
How lucky are all these wizards and witches who get to just camp at Stonehenge?
Ooh, I love the idea of Stonehenge as part of a network - like a prehistoric King's Cross, as Molly describes it :P Honestly, the idea of it transporting you to an unknown destination sounds absolutely awesome. Well, mostly awesome. The only thing that would kind of suck is that you may not be adequately prepared for the climate. What if it sent you to somewhere high in the Himalayas, and then the Sahara? Assuming that someone built structures out of rocks there. I mean, other than that, it would be totally amazing. But Heath is tempting fate by repeatedly asking what's the worst that could happen. You never ask that question, because it always does happen, haha.
Ahh! This just got so exciting. Great chapter :)
Unfortunately, you are correct. Raj will not be showing up much in this story. However, I have plans for a sequel, and he WILL feature as a main character there! So there is more Raj in the future, but the future is just very distant. Haha, the woman with the pet ferret is great. Perhaps, one day, she will also get a story...
The Wizarding kind of the United States are oddly forward-thinking in their use of the metric system :P Thanks to Fantastic Beasts and Where to Find Them, they seem pretty backward like the rest of Wizarding folk in other aspects, however. And I'm always pleased to inspire a google!
I find nothing odd in stockpiling chocolate. Nothing odd at all... *looks around shiftily*
Oh, powerful music definitely played. No one heard it except Socks and Sandals, that's all.
The witches and wizards are pretty lucky. I made myself jealous writing that.
Being transported to an unknown location is basically Molly's worst nightmare, and Heath's dreams come true :P I tend to agree with you and Molly. What if you're transported to the middle of the ocean?! Heath's head needs to be screwed on properly, for sure!
Thanks for the wonderful review! :)
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I read the first chapter of this a long time ago and loved it, so I'm really excited to be back and reading more of it.
Heath seems like a cool character. Please tell me though, how he managed to write a coherent article while intoxicated/hungover. I can't even even write a coherent fic review when I'm tired. Also, having just reread the first chapter so I could catch up (I reviewed it like, two years ago), part of me is wondering if Heath is Agatha's former fiance. Based solely on the fact that he's American and something about the family business. It's a long shot but that's my theory and I'm sticking to it.
Dennis Creevey growing up to be really tall and with a booming voice is basically the best thing that's happened so far in this story. XD
Adventuring around the world and writing about it sounds like literally the most amazing job ever. I'm so jealous. But more than that I'm really interested to see how these two work together on their globetrotting adventure!
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Heath is great. I'm looking forward to the readers getting to know him better. One of the things that makes him great is his super power of being able to write coherently after a night of inebriation. Lesser mortals can only hope to be such greatness. And IS Heath Agatha's former fiance? WHO KNOWS. (Obviously, I do.)
Writing Dennis Creevey this way gives me great joy.
Molly and Heath do have the best job ever, I agree. I am also exceptionally jealous. Thanks for reviewing :)
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I like this chapter a lot, it looks like the beginning to a great story! You are really great with internal monologues, and this is no exception. I like Molly so far, there is a lot of personality evident in just one chapter and it's great.
What a dull breakup speech, I don't blame her for letting her mind wander during it. Or for breaking up with the guy, haha. He sounds so boring. Good for you Molly, be empowered! Change your life! :D
Agatha Painsley-Bumbershuffle hahaha. She has a too-perfect life (blech) but I guess it makes up for her name. I love the name just because its so absurd hehe
also, the dinner conversation. Percy was hilariously awkward, Audrey hilariously dramatic. I don't blame Molly for being nervous about bringing it up! The part about her eloquent potions essays made me laugh. What a dinner... Her and her metaphors, while her Dad stabs his food silently and her Mum worries that she hasn't found her soulmate when she's twenty. So silly... yet still, not too silly to be unrealistic haha!
sorry, I think this review is just rambling - its kind of late - but I wanted to say that I loved it and your characters are fantastic - as always!
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Heya! So lovely to hear from you again :)
Molly is just so fantastic to write. Sometimes I wonder if it's a little worrying how easily she comes to me and translates onto the page, but that's half her charm.
Her boyfriend needs some lessons in excitement for sure! He didn't even try and make an effort into giving a meaningful and heartfelt break up speech - definitely not worth Molly's time!
Agatha has been one of my favourite characters to write! We only get to see her through the eyes of Molly but she's just so fantastic.
I loved writing the marital dynamic between Percy and Audrey. Marrying someone like Audrey would be the first and last reckless and exciting thing he does in his life because let's be real, marriage to a person like Audrey is excitement enough.
Thanks so much for this lovely review!