*Transferred from a long time ago on HPFF*
This piece is great. I was drawn in because I love Doctor Who, and I'm not sure what I was expecting when I clicked on it, but it wasn't this. I've never read a story quite like this; it's unique. I like how each line is one thought, one sentence. It's a lot like poetry. I think it really showcases Malfoy's fragmented mind and thoughts as he deals with the repercussions of his actions in the war.
I think the vagueness of some of the lines makes it so much stronger, too - "he had seen. He had watched. He had beared witness. He had committed" like, it doesn't say anything, but it says everything. (If that makes sense.)
Also, congratulations on only using 501 words! You fit so much emotion and reflection into such a short number of words.
Lastly, I love the Ood as well. How cool are they?! :D
Welcome fellow Whovian and lover of the Ood. They are actually the best aliens around, I adore them so much!
I get a lot of people being pleasantly surprised by this piece, and I always feel very flattered. This was very experimental for me, so it's really nice hearing all of this positive feedback about it! And I find it so funny when people find it poetic - if anyone ever reads my legitimate attempts at poetry, they may cry, because it is that bad! Again, I'm really flattered that you got a poetic sense from it. It was completely unintentional, except for the rhythm.
Thanks again for this wonderful review! And the Ood 5eva!