As you probably know I love stories set in different countries, so after I read your China story that was submitted to my challenge, I thought I’d check out this one on France.
I have to say I love the “around the world” theme combined with mythology is an absolutely excellent combination! I have not yet heard about Vila, from Slavic mythology, but it’s resemblance with the Veela in the Harry Potter universe is astonishing, and you capitalized on the differences and similarities really well. I also love that you choose a moment from canon (when Fleur’s wand is made – that we know contains her grandmother’s hair as a core) and you build your story around this. It’s such a simple thing, and work so powerfully.
I also like how you make a parallel to Muggle schools, I’m guessing education is a problem world-wide – we have mass edication, we have teachers working against creativity, etc so your story tells us something important about real world through a fanfiction universe.
I love your characterization – we know so little about Fleur’s family and it’s nice to see them here. Also the fact that you have some French phrases in there makes the story all the more authentic. The relationship between Fleur and Gabrielle is really greatly presented, from what happened in the triwizard tournament, I can only imagine that they were loving sisters like this.
Overall I’m very impressed by this story! Thank you for letting me travel to France for a short while!
Oooh, I don’t think I’ve ever seen a young Fleur fic before!
Wow, Fleur lives in an absolute palace! What do you even do with that many bedrooms? She does seem like she comes from money though and is used to living with a lot of luxury, so it’s not unbelievable.
I think Fleur’s family tree and the fact that she has her grandmother’s hair in her wand is very interesting, but not something I’ve seen explored a lot, and I like how you handle it. Really interesting exploration of the differences between veela and vila
I actually find it kind of impressive that Apolline has never seen her mother anger enough to transform XD I can imagine it coming out in spurts during arguments and irritations.
Oh, vila are real in this story! I thought that they might be a diluted muggle version of veelas, but it’s interesting that both creatures exist. I wonder what Apolline’s experience with them was.
Omg, Fleur has to do algebra and chemistry before age 11? Yikes!
Aw, Fleur’s affection for her sister is to precious.
I find it interesting that Fleur is starting to understand what her grandmother being a veela means, and I find myself curious for a story when she’ a bit older of her starting to understand what her being part veela means.
I really really enjoyed this! It was refreshing to read about characters and perspectives we don’t see a lot of, and you did a great job of the characterization.
Okay, so I got excited when I saw this story, because Fleur is probably one of my favourite characters and also she's French, and this is set in France, and you've included some French in your story <3 (I'm a complete Francophile, if you couldn't tell).
First of all, the French was not random at all. I loved the way you just used a couple of words here and there which flowed naturally as part of the sentences, but they really helped to build up a sense of the setting and the fact that this was a young French family.
I liked the idea that Fleur goes to a Muggle primary school, too - it's so interesting to see that, because I rarely come across that in fic and I'm always wondering how young witches and wizards even learn to read and write and all the skills they need for school.
This was a really sweet story! I think you captured Fleur's childlike nature really well - I always find it so difficult to write children so I'm impressed by the way you did it here. I also love seeing stories which combine myth with the Harry Potter world, and I think Fleur's concerns were so believable, because if a child learned that and thought it was their grandma, of course they'd worry! You wrote Fleur so well here, and it was really interesting to learn more about the Vila myth (which I didn't know well before) and the differences between Vila and Veela.
The ending was really cute - very in character, as I think she's always been a loving and caring person, and she's relieved not to have been right about her grandma. This was a really lovely story and I enjoyed reading it!
Hi there! I'm stopping by to leave you a review from the BvB thread.
I really liked this story. It was sweet and heart-warming. I love reading the back story to any of the Harry Potter characters, and this one did not disappoint. You have a real knack for descritpions and also the ability to weave together both dialog and actions. You walked the reader through a lovely afternoon with Fleur and her mother, while keeping characterizaiton at the forefront. Fleur is exactly as I would expect: sharp, curious, and sweet all rolled into one. I think you did a great job with the challenge prompt too!
The pacing felt nice, and you you resloved little Fleurs confilct and left us feeling warm and fulfilled. It was the perfect ending.
I don't think the french was too random at all!
I'm glad you liked Fleur's character- her ending was one of the few things I was pleased with. Writing about young children was harder than I thought :P And aw, thank you for saying I have a knack for descriptions, it makes me feel really happy :)
Thank you for such a wonderful review :D