Here to review your entry in The Take It Seriously Challenge! Again, apologies that it's taken me ages. Just like the other entry, I'll break this review down into the categories I used to judge each entry.
Rarity - I don't think I can recall having read a Dean/Luna pairing before, so I gave you full marks here.
Editing - The editing was pretty solid on this. I did notice a typo or two, but nothing major.
Flow - The first half of this flowed very nicely. I really liked the progression between Dean and Luna, however the last half seemed to move a bit quickly in my opinion.
Emotional Impact- So I am a diehard Seamus/Dean shipper, so it broke my poor little heart when Seamus was dead and Dean was trying to convince himself that he was still alive. Ugh. I also thought his convo with Luna was effective.
Plot - I thought the plot was well thought out and set up the story nicely. I'd love to see you build on it a bit more and expand how Dean fell for Luna. As it currently is, it seems very sudden. Like one minute he's angry and demanding she go away and the next he's kissing her. I guess I sort of missed the transformation in there.
Characterization - I thought you did a good job characterizing both Dean and Luna in this. Luna was very soft, floaty, and whimsycal and Dean was a bit more grounded. You also did a good job of characterizing how he'd be after losing his best friend.
Overall, I thought this was a strong piece (even if it broke my Dean/Seamus shipping heart) Good work! I should have the results up pretty soon!
Thanks for your entries!
I'm stopping by from the Ravenclaw Common Room to leave you a review for the BvB. I'm SO glad I picked this one. I really like Luna, and until recently I never really thought about Dean (but I've been watching HTGAWM, so it's kinda got me thinking about Dean Thomas).
I think you've got a totally believable story line going here. If Seamus had died at the Battle of Hogwarts, it would've totatly devastared Dean. You did a fabulous job describing that grief and the pure isolation that comes along with it. Of course it would seem to him that everyone else had moved on, while he was still feeling very much saddened by the loss of his friend.
You also did a beautiful job characterizing Luna. I think you perfectly served up her two most prominent traits: her ability to state the simple truth and her slighntly unnerving talent for telling people how they feel. In both the flashback scene and the library encounter, I could really feel her presence. She isn't mean or brash. She's not clueless, either - she's just... real. And I think it's what Dean needs at that moment in the story.
Great job overall! I'm excited to see where this goes!
I'm so glad you think the storyline is okay, and you liked Luna. She's my favourite HP character, and I tried SO hard to keep her like she is in the books, so I'm happy that that paid off ;)
This is just supposed to just be a one-shot, actually, but I'm thinking of writing a prequel and/or sequel. This story seems somewhat vague and unsatisfying on its own :/
But anyway, I'm so glad you liked it! Thanks so much for reviewing :D