Hello! Thought I’d drop by with a review for one of your stories :) I hope you don’t mind.
So Seamus has woken up, presumably at St Mungo’s, after the Battle of Hogwarts, and the first person he asked for was Dean, closely followed by Ginny. And oh! He’d been dating Ginny during seventh year? I wonder how Dean had taken that development. I’m glad Seamus had at least one persistent visitor to his bedside, because that would have been sad indeed for no-one to have been there. I’m surprised his mother and Ginny hadn’t paid him a visit, though. Although, it seems that Seamus is ready to forgive Ginny, given that he remembers she lost her brother, Fred, during the battle.
It seems as though there’s significant conflict between Seamus and his father, and I was intrigued to know why. When the Healer mentions Seamus’s parents, he’s clearly uncomfortable at the thought of facing his Dad. Is it because his father is a muggle and unlikely to comprehend his son being injured as a result of a war? Or is it the thought of him turning up at a magical place such as St Mungo’s?
The flashback to Seamus’s earlier childhood was both shocking and interesting. I felt desperately sorry for Seamus being punished for something he likely had very little control over. I cannot condone his father’s actions AT ALL, given that he withheld Seamus’s school right from him and the black eye? Was there physical violence involved? Just … words fail me. I’m no longer surprised at Seamus’s apparent dislike for his father, and the fact that he’s not sure he wants to see him.
Typical of Dean and Seamus to throw a bit of humour into the situation with a wager. I wonder who will win it?
From the second flashback, Seamus’s need to make his father proud is heart-breaking. Despite how he’d been treated in the past, he still sought his Dad’s approval? :(
The last scene was perfect, but I’m still aching for Seamus that it took a battle and his near-death for his father to admit that he was proud of his son. Seamus is a far better person than I am to accept his father’s hug so readily, that’s for sure. I’m still so hurt and angry on his behalf!
I’d love to read more on this story! Plus, I really, really want to know where Seamus stands with Ginny? Has she run to Harry? Or is there a Senny future?
Great story! I enjoyed this immensely :)
Hey, Brax! Of course I don't mind you stopping by :)
If you're curious about Ginny and Seamus, I actually have a few stories with them and how their relationship develops during and after the war. I always sort of felt like his mother wanted to come, but she didn't really know how to handle the situation, especially given everything with his father. You're actually the first person to point that out, though :) And yeah, Seamus sort of recognizes that there was a lot of loss, even though he's a bit heartbroken over it.
I was sort of impyling that physical abuse was involved. This whole piece was inspired by the line, "Bit of a nasty shock when he found out" when Seamus describes his parents in book 1, so I sort of ran with it. I'm glad the flashback explains Seamus' anxiety. <3
Haha, I couldn't not have Dean make a joke. I just couldn't.
I feel like... there's still a lot of things for them to go through and work out, but this one-shot was kind of the first step in the healing process.
Feel free to poke around my AP to find out answers to those questions ;)
Thank you so much for this wonderful and thoughtful review! <3
Hey Jill, Ysh here!
Another Seamus from you! I remember reading your Ginny/Seamus one shot for my challenge! I see that you have maintained that pairing here as well. And you’ve made it close to canon by mentioned that she might have gone back to Harry after Fred’s death.
The flashback was an interesting insight into the Seamus we know. You have included his penchant for blowing things up, right from pre-Hogwarts days! That brought a smile to my face :D His father seemed controlling and quite mean to hide his letter. True he was a muggle and might have had a hard time accepting his son’s magical heritage, but that’s no excuse for treating his son that way…
Dean/Seamus friendship was quite… easy-going. I liked the conversation between them – it contained all the dynamics of their relationship – friendship, candidness and a hint of jealousy too when Dean spoke about Ginny writing to him, and then a twinge of guilt. I especially liked that detail, because we see Seamus being jealous of Dean in book 6 when he was overlooked for the position in the Quidditch team. That must have brought about a bit of tension between the two best friends.
And then the scene with him and his dad. It was refreshing to see the father in the flashback as opposed to the one who came to visit him. He was so hesitant, and wanting to bond and so proud of his son.. it was so touching especially knowing how difficult it must have been for him. I especially liked the Irish accent touches throughout the fic.
This has been a wonderful one-shot, and I wish you all the best in the chellnge!
I should have known that this was probably going to be the piece that you chose ;)
I felt like I just HAD to include that, because if he's blowing things up now, he's definitely blowing things up as an eleven year old who has no control over his magical ability.
I'm glad you liked the Dean/Seamus conversation. I was struggling a bit to find the right balance between all of that, so I'm glad that seemed to work :)
As far as his father, I think deep down he really does love Seamus, but it was such a struggle for him because of everything.
Thank you so much for the great review!!
“You are my son,” my father whispered. “And I’m proud of you.”
You know there was a part of me that was sincerely hoping he would show up but then there was another part of me that was saying screw it. I didn't get emotional until the very end because I know exactly how Seamus felt. Hearing his father say those words to him after everything they had been through really struck a chord. I have a lot of issues with my own and I unfortunately had that storybook moment and then later on he shattered it once again. I don't want to think about the afterwards. After Seamus gets out of the hospital. After Seamus is better again because the unknown and the reality hurts. I just want to focus on the now and that happiness I felt beaming out of him when his father hugged him. That was really a lovely moment. Does it make up for the past? No. But you don't understand how much closure that can give you. Even if just for a little while.
Hello there, thanks for the surprise review! <3
I'm sorry that you can understand how Seamus is feeling. I can't imagine what that must be like. *hugs*
That was kind of what I hoped people would take away from this; that there was a slice of happiness and potential for a brighter future, but things aren't going to get patched up right away; these things take time, but at least there's a start now. I'm glad that you enjoyed this though and thanks again for the review!
Howdy Jill! I'm here to leave you a review for your holiday wishlist! Because I've left it all WAY too late, I can't leave more - a fact I really am sorry about - but hopefully one (1) will be enough (for now).
The way you characterize Seamus always floors me because every time you give him so much gravity and dimension. In the books he obviously doesn't feature as prominently and from Harry it's easy to get a very limited sense of who he is, but you flesh out the very basic skeleton of his identity with not just flesh, but genuine scars and an incredibly believable identity. Right down to how you characterize his worries about Ginny. In a normal fic, without the background you provide, I think his jealousy and worry (after knowing she's alive) would come across as rather petty, but because of what you give us they come off better - a flaw still, but one that is less offensive and more a genuine vulnerability. I imagine it being born of the same feelings he has about his father - that he isn't used to being good enough.
I thought you also nailed the friendship with Dean. Though you hit on the playful side and Seamus's tendency to cause explosions, you also lent it the seriousness and devotion that is truly consistent with a "best friend" connection. Put together with the rest, it made the story something truly special.
Thanks for sharing! Keep up the good work!
One review is always enough! Don't even worry about it :)
I'm so glad that this characterization is believable. I usually try to work with what we know from canon and expand from it, and this one-shot is no different. This has been my headcanon for him for a few years now so I was happy to have the chance to finally write it down. It took a few drafts to get it right, but it was worth the effort. And you're right: Seamus' inferiority complex absolutely comes from years of living with his father under his roof; so it doesn't help when the girl he loves is half in love with Harry.
I'm very happy that you enjoyed this! This review had me grinning from ear to ear.
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Hi Jill! I'm here for the Hufflepuff March Review Exchange!
This was a great story. I love minor characters, and I certainly haven't read anything about Seamus' family before, which made this a really interesting read. I don't know how much you got from what JKR has said about Seamus, or how much of it was your own invention, but either way it's told really well and you did a great job bringing your characters to life.
As a Seamus/Dean shipper I was really hopeful after the first few lines when you said how Dean was the only person to visit, but then you surprised me with the fact that Seamus is dating Ginny instead. And the fact that they got together while hiding in the Room of Requirement is certainly believable. What really stands out though, because of Dean's constant presence in the story, is that even though they're not a couple here, they have such a close friendship that has stood through so much, and basically I just love the way you portrayed their friendship. So as much as I love Dean/Seamus, I'm also a sucker for good friendship stories and you did a remarkable job of showing this friendship here and how well they know each other. Love it.
I also have a thing for non-linear stories and I liked how you went back into Seamus' memory a couple of times. I thought it fit really well as he's kind of in and out of consciousness in the hospital and while he's worrying about what this meeting with his dad will be like, he's remembering all the reasons why it makes him nervous. Basically the structure of the story was great and I like that you took that approach.
Okay but let's talk about how touching that last scene was after all the memories Seamus had dredged up about his father not accepting him or being proud of him, or trying to prevent him from going to school. After all this, he shows up at St. Mungos, because as stated several times in the story, blood is thicker than water and no matter what hatred he might have for the magical world, his son just fought in a war and got critically injured and he cares. The emotion in that scene was just perfect. They're both kind of hesitant because they know it hasn't been easy in the past, but it's a step forward. The hug was really well written too, like Seamus doesn't know what to do because this is so out of the ordinary for him, and maybe it's a small step towards forgiveness. I don't know, but it definitely ends the story on such a hopeful note, like things are bound to improve from here, even if Seamus' dad never does approve of magic, when it comes down to it he does love his son.
Also I love the line just before the end, how even in all of this - ugh, now he owes his best friend 15 Galleons! XD
I'm so glad I got paired with you this month and that I got to read this! Well done and good luck in the minor character challenge :)
I really love the Dean/Seamus friendship, so I'm glad that you liked his constant presence in the story - it just seemed fitting to have him there, you know?
Ahh, thank you! I was a little worried about that scene, so I'm glad that it came across the way that I intended :) As much as he's afraid of magic and doesn't understand anything, Seamus is his son who was just in a war, so of course he's coming to come ♥
Thank you so much for the wonderful review!