Hello there! I'm here for the BvB Tag :)
First, I'm going to apologize, I haven't written a review in months and I'm a little rusty. But here goes!
Right off the bat, you have me hooked. I know this is a one-shot, but if you ever turned it into a full length story, I'd eat it right up. You have a ton of characters set up that I'd love to know more about. You have the dynamic between Lorcan and Lysander set up really well and I'd be really interested to see it played out more and in different senarios. The same with Lily and Lysander, I like how you've established that while they're twins, Lysander and Lorcan react entirely differently to people.
I am curious about this Hufflepuff that likes Lyansder. If you were going to expand this (she says hopefully), that would definitely be a route that I'd like to see the story go. You have such good characterizations of everyone and the setup here for even just a short story is perfect. I'll stop writing your story for you now, but seriously. This works really well as a one-shot, but it'd also be a kiler chapter one.
All in all, I really enjoyed reading this. The twins aren't characters that get a lot of screentime so to speak, but I always love seeing how people characterize them. Awesome job!
Hel-lo, Claire, and thank you for stopping by! I'm super excited you liked this story and it was topped by discovering that it won 2nd place in the challenge it was written for! Would you believe that this was supposed to be a rom-com? Yeah, that, um... Didn't pan out for me...
To be completely honest, I am only a new fan of the next-gen and, well, I love twins and Luna was my favorite female character... I have heard a lot of people (mostly my friend Jill who is incessant about it) that this should be a longer story and while I am NOT going to do that, I may have some plunnies for one or two one-shot sequels. I'm glad you mentioned the Hufflepuff because I forgot about that person! Perhaps more than one or two one-shots. One for sure! It was almost my plunny for the Christmassy Love challenge...
Please excuse my rambling as I ramble through this reply... ANYWAY. Thank you so much for your review and I'll see you in BvB!