*splutters* Excuse me? How dare you all have a gift giving competition without ME?!?! Well, lucky I caught you all before it ends.
I love all the little details throughout, like Hermione understanding everything, so it was saying something when she didn't understand Quidditch, and how Harry could defeat Voldemort but not control a bunch of students. I love that she was there in a show of support for Ron. It was so great to see this scene from Hermione's point of view, I think you did a fantastic job of writing it, and writing Hermione's feelings of McLaggen!
I can't believe it's taken me so long to visit your AP and read some of your stories! All I can do is apologise for RL getting in the way. I have put "Saving Severus Snape" onto my must-read list for this month, so expect another visit from me soon :)
I absolutely love the opening couple of lines of this story, which include the essential words for any story with Hermione as the protagonist "because Hermione Granger understood everything." I wonder if she views the concept of organised sport as rather silly, mainly because she isn't very good at it? I understand her point that inter-house quidditch matches create yet more divisions within the school, but there are many admirable skills and qualities to be acquired and honed through participating in team sports. Look at what CTF did for us, for example!
Within the first couple of paragraphs of this story, you have really captured the essence of Hermione; an intelligent girl and loyal friend, who understands the power of unity and isn't afraid of voicing her opinion, but knows also when to keep her thoughts under wraps. We get a glimpse of her affection for Ron, and how she's willing to compromise her morals to protect his pride, in a game she neither understands nor cares for. I wonder if it's a bit of a turning point towards romance for both of them, especially when Hermione hugs Ron at the end?
I loved the comparisons drawn by Hermione between Harry's demonstration of leadership qualities in the fight against Voldemort and the rather hopeless management of his quidditch team. Thank goodness for Ginny Weasley's no-nonsense approach. TBH, she would have made a much better quidditch captain than Harry. I'm sure Dumbledore only chose him because he felt bad at not awarding him the Prefect badge.
Cormac McLaggen is so odiously portrayed here; I can feel my skin crawling at the thought of his "hungry eyes". When he licked his lips, I actually recoiled in disgust. Bleugh.
I really enjoyed this comical one-shot; it was really well-written and a lovely bit of insight into Hermione Granger's character. Great work!
Wow. I am here with your review. And Wow. Can I just say this is the best, most cohesive thing zI have read on ths site? I am not just saying that, either, I am a stickler when it comes to this stuff. I have had your name down because I wanted to read your stuff. The Severus Snape thing is on my list.
You put a lot of thought into this moment. I love how she's sitting there with a thermos of coffee, and I am sitting here on New Years Eve in my new house with no heat. That might have a lot to do with this review - Im kidding.
You may have just converted me to a Hermione fan. Outside of her name coming from Shakespeare, I didn't csre for her. It's nice that she sees this from the outside going in. The part that I find hilarious is that she finds McLaggen appalling and somewhat handsome. The part where I laughed out loud in HBP and spilled coffee over a copy? When she's at the Slug Club party and she turns to Harry and says, "I've only just escaped." There were literal tears the first time I read that!:)
That's probaby not a direct quote. Whatever. You keep this thing consistent the entire way through, which is REALLY impressive. It's not a flowery romance where she flips to pinning over Ron. You stay on point with staying on the scene. It's nice that she acknowledges Harry and Ginny working together. Hang on. I have to scroll back up because you said something. The hint about Harry's popularity is a nice touch.
I'm going out of order here because I'm jumping back up to the top. I read through twice before I review. The introduction talks about Hermione's adversion to sports? MegGonagall, can I give you a virtual handshake because that is spot on? It makes me wonder how Hermione was with skiing with her parents on the holidays. That's another think I love in Book 5. When she describes skiing to Ron and he finds the whole thing stupid and laughable? It isn't that she's a cliche nerd walking away from sports, and you make that distinction here. She's Hermione being classic Hermione🤗
Jesus, I could write a book on this. You want me to continue? Oh, correct me here if I'm wrong because I am too lazy to walk over to my bookshelf. (Yeah, my new house is in disarray but the Harry Potter collection is on the bookshelves. Don't judge.) Isn't "McGlaggen" supposed to be "McLaggen"? It is. I just looked it up. I am a research rat. Sorry.
The part that I LOVE? She wants to tell him he's brilliant without knowing if he's brilliant. She may even doubt if he's brilliant. That, Meg, is your stroke. There is so much to that.
Are you this strong of a writer on your other pieces? Damn. If you need reviews, I need reading material. Well done.