Hey there, I thought this story looked like it could do with some love!
I love reading about people's interpretations of how they get introduced to the wizarding world and this was no different! It's nice to see how people put there own spin on it, obviously not everyone has Hagrid showing them around.
The initial reactions from your OC's are really believable, from the 'faint' tone in the mother, to Naomi being confused as to why Magic can't fix everything. If I found out Magic was real I'd probably be hoping it could be used for that too!
The interaction between Aurora and Naomi was so cute, it reminded me of going to university. Everyone's so nice and trying to make friends because you're all in the same boat, like the relief she felt when Aurora looked confused as to why there was stars too. I suppose she was relieved to see not everyone was going to be miles ahead of her like Harry thought, just because she's a muggleborn.
I really like your OC's here, I think I'll have to check out The Shadows Within before I read anymore of this though, as I don't want to accidentally spoil it for myself!
This was a really cute little missing moments piece, great job! :)