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Name: Stella Blue (Signed) · Date: 10 Dec 2017 11:02 PM · [Report This]
Story:Entwined Chapter: A Promise

Awwww! This is really sweet.

Personally I like to read this as a friendship scene, but I think it'd be cute either way. I just think there's something really special about their friendship and this story encapsulates it perfectly. Harry could be kind of emotionally clueless sometimes, but I think this is one of the things he would be good at, considering he also knows what it's like to not have parents and to want to see them again (albeit the circumstances are different). This story also echoes back to the scene when Hermione provides emotional support for Harry at the graves of his parents - this time the tables are turned and Hermione needs support as she's wondering how to fix what she had to do to save her parents during the war. It's such a beautiful, tender scene. And I absolutely love your first line, it's so descriptive and alive. Great story.

Name: Dojh167 (Signed) · Date: 02 Dec 2017 11:29 PM · [Report This]
Story:Entwined Chapter: A Promise

Wow, this is really sweet (?)


I always imagined Hermione returning to her parents on her own (she erased their memories on her own after all, and does have that fiercely independent streak), but I am glad to see her getting some emotional support.


At the opening line I thought for a moment that this was Harry and Hermione standing in front of Godric’s Hollow, but I liked that things were reversed. Hermione was there to support Harry when he went to see where he lost his parents, and now he more or less gets to return the favor.


Oh man, I had it backwards! I thought they were about to return the Grangers’ memories. I guess not yet. =,( I hadn’t thought that Hermione would waste any time in going straight back to them, but I do see the pragmatism there. Whatever her reasons, I’m glad she has Harry’s support.


I like that you didn’t make it clear whether Harry and Hermione were together in a shippy sense or not. Either way, their relationship to each other is important and I likethat.



Name: ShazaLupin (Signed) · Date: 18 Sep 2017 10:24 PM · [Report This]
Story:Entwined Chapter: A Promise

Hey there, so I figured I’d come check out this piece since it seemed short and sweet! And that it was, as well as sad! Poor Hermione, that must have been the hardest thing for her to do, knowing that it was safer or them but they wouldn’t even know she existed.  I think you’ve got across that really well, and I love how it fitted in with the prompt. They know each other so well that even just a touch of their hands is enough for hermione to feel a little bit, reassured that everything will be okay.

The fic was sad enough without that last line, that just made it even worse. We never get to see how Hermione’s parents react to being put under the spell and sent away, but it seems realistic to me that her mum would still feel something. Like when you know you’ve got to do something but just can not remember it.


This was a great little fic! :)

Author's Response:

Hi there! :) Oh I'm glad you came to check this out! n_n


Yes, it is sad for Hermione to make that choice, and she's such a brave and strong character for caring it through for the sake of her parents despite the pain - and I'm glad you said I expressed that well. And yes, that is what I definitely treasure about Harry and Hermione - aside from shipping them - I just love their connection through their friendship.


Ah yes, Hermione's mom sensed something is missing but she couldn't quite put her finger on it - no matter what she try.


Thank you! Thanks so much for reading and leaving this really nice review! :D


I'm happy you enjoyed it!



- LA

Name: Rhaenyra (Signed) · Date: 10 Dec 2016 04:21 PM · [Report This]
Story:Entwined Chapter: A Promise

This was beautifully written.  The bond between Harry and Hermione as he promises her that he will help her bring her parents back is so in character.  After all Hermione did and gave up to help him, he must now be the strong one and help her with her mission.


The last line was very poetic.  Even though Hermione's parents do not remember her, her mother still has a sense that something is missing.  Since Hermione did the memory charm herself we know it is strong, so that just shows the unbreakable bond between parents and kids that we have seen repeated throughout HP with Harry & Lily, Draco & Narcissa, and Molly & her brood.

Author's Response:

Thank you, thank you! Yes Hermione has done a lot for him, and has been by Harry's side through thick and thin. So, I thought it was about time Harry returned the favor.


Thank you! I'm glad you said that. And you're right. I really wanted the theme of love or the bond between parents, especially mothers, are unbreakable. Very good examples with mentioning the characters.


Thank you for reading and leaving a review!



Name: TidalDragon (Signed) · Date: 04 Dec 2016 11:22 AM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Entwined Chapter: A Promise

Howdy Alishya!

I am adapting myself to drabbles as I leave reviews for my favorites in the Grand Opening Challenge and I definitely had to leave one here. I think my favorite part of this story is that you've used the length restriction to create this beautiful sense of ambiguity - both about Harry and Hermione's relationship at the time (as you mention in your Author's Note) and about the time this story is set in. With the snow you can imagine it being somewhat similar to Harry's trip to Godric's Hollow when they're down in the dumps of winter, or you can imagine it being several months post-war...or more darkly, you could even imagine it MANY years later, STILL trying to find the answer that will bring the Grangers' memories back. Any way you go it's still delightful - a mix of hopeful and haunting that is challenging to capture so well in so few words!

Thanks for helping christen the Archive and for sharing this with us!

Author's Response:

Hi Kevin! I'm sure it is a strange yet enlighting transition from reading long stories to completely short stories. I know I've felt that way. Even when writing it. I never thought it'd be possible for me. I had a dislike towards drabbles until a while ago. Reading (especially good ones) and writing drabbles has really changed my view on them for the better. 


Aw, I'm so glad! I thought this scene I wrote would have been perfect for just a drabble. Though it was still hard to condense.


You make a good point! It does leave room for any time setting. I didn't see it that way, but thanks for mentioning it!



Aw, no problem! thank you and the rest of the staff making this challenge happen! I really had fun participating! Maybe there'll be more challenges like this somewhere in the future I hope? (Though I am liking the weekly prompts that are put up on the archive!)


Thanks for reading and reviewing!



Name: abhorsen (Signed) · Date: 01 Dec 2016 10:15 PM · starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Story:Entwined Chapter: A Promise

Oooh this was perfect. Hermione's emotions weren't really at the forefront in DH (and when they were, it was generally in regards to Ron, not her parents), but it's clear that she was hurting. The scene in the movie where she wipes their memories legit made me cry, and this is such a wonderful continuation of that. Great job.

Author's Response:

Ah, thank you! You're right. I wish that there were more regards of her parents, but sadly no. I'm glad you enjoyed this! Thanks for reading and reviewing! -LA

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