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Name: Felpata_Lupin (Signed) · Date: 08 Jul 2018 05:57 PM · starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Story:The Art of Being Nonchalant (Or Not) Chapter: Chapter Three

Okay, well... I don't like Logan? Maybe it's just because I want Quinn and James together already so I don't like anyone interfering? And really, Quinn did it all, so I really have no reason not to like him, but I still don't like him... apologies...

Also, Al, get over it already! You are cute and precious but pining over your ex girlfriend is not going to help you, I'm talking for your own sake, sweety.

I forgot to mention on the previous chapter that the story of how Quinn's parents got together was so amusing and kind of cute, it was really nice to include. :D But still, what a screwed up family... *rolls eyes*

Related to that, I love how the pets are just as screwed up as the humans... ahahah! Both Ziggy and Odin are so funny to read about. :P

Okay, so what is it with the Teddy/Victoire/Dominique triangle? It kind of worries me? Looks like every relationship in this story is a huge mess... except maybe Fred and Ash? They look just so cute, even if they aren't in a relationship... not officially, anyway... and I obviously forgot, what's Ashley's last name? Because I think you mentioned her being related to Scorpius? Which is kind of easy since all Pureblood families are related one way or another, but I'm still wondering... :P

Anyway, this is a really fun story so far. Maybe not the genre I most enjoy reading, but I think you are doing a great job at writing it. There's just the perfect balance of dialogue and description, all your characters are so well defined and believable and your writing style is enjoyable with just the right dose of humour to it. Lovely work, really! ;)

Thank you so much for your request!

Lots of love and snowball hug,

Chiara



Author's Response:

but logan anderson is so cool hahah (okay, he ended up actually being a bit tragic in my oneshot, though this was unplanned but i do have some feels for him)! :P nobody wants quinn to end up with logan. quinn doesn't want quinn to end up with him. but she can appreciate some of his charms hhaha ;D

 

poor al, i know :/ but he's still hoping (and tbh quinn snogging him didn't help)

 

screwed up family with screwed up pets - great description! though the pets can be cute. sometimes. and the family, too. also sometimes. not very often haha.

 

idk what to tell you, relationships are messy  (at least that's the way it's been in my experience up until now :/) - and it's fun to write them like that. drama all the way! fred and ash aren't together. who knows if they ever will be? :O ashley's last name is thompson, but her mother is daphne greengrass (obviously, she has her father's last name :D )

 

aww, your comments are so sweet! thank you for taking the time to read this even if it's not the type of story you usually read, it means a lot to me to hear some feedback (said every writer) *hugs*

 

kris



Name: beyond the rain (Signed) · Date: 27 Jun 2018 05:17 PM · starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Story:The Art of Being Nonchalant (Or Not) Chapter: Chapter Three

Hey Kristina, here from the review tag!! 

 

First of all, someone needs to tell Quinn to stop being with people that aren't James. I'm offended and I'm sure everyone else who reads this is too ;) I get that she was drunk when she kissed Al but honestly, I can't believe she did it. She's leading him on! Drunk or not, you can't tell a guy you have no desire to get back with them and then kiss them!!! I feel a little sorry for Al actually, and I hope that this kiss hasn't motivated him to get her back properly...and if it has - I still want him to fail! 

 

I have problems with Logan Anderson too - my biggest one being that he only has cereal and tequila?!  Who's stocking his fridge!? I can totally understand why Quinn would be tempted by someone like him if he's as muscly and toned as you're suggesting! But still...HES NOT JAMES, QUINN! 

 

Speaking of James - don't dance with another girl when Quinn's right there!? God I'm so mad at the bost of them, I'm ready to bash their heads together. I'm glad that James was worried though, I'm a little less mad at him! A little.

 

Last little thing, I don't know if you're aware but in the UK there's a smoking ban in public places like bars, clubs, everywhere that isn't your house and outside essentially. I just noticed that Logan was smoking at the bar, and maybe wizarding laws are different? I just thought I'd let you know for future reference? Feel free to tell me to shut up! 

 

All round this was another good read! 

 

Bex



Author's Response:

hhaha, well, quinn does like to hook up :D

 

and it was al who made the first move, she mostly just went with the flow (as usual). i like cocky al who, er, slithers in (much like logan anderson (why does his name sound so good said together?! just logan doesn't have the same ring to it :O ), and kind of takes what he wants.

 

if you read my upcoming oneshot about ethan, you'll learn why logan anderson has pretty much lived on alcohol and the occasional food item for the past year or so :/

 

and james - great response after seeing quinn and al snogging, right?!

 

yes, i know smoking is banned almost everywhere in the UK (my mother was raging about this when we were in london :D), it's similar in croatia (there's a loophole saying that if you have a proper ventilation system you can allow guests to smoke (no one actually does have a proper ventilation system but it's practically enough to say that you do)) but i went with wizards not really caring about smoking all that much (they love their pipes!), especially in night clubs (or pubs) :)

 

thanks for the lovely review!



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