Hey Barbara, I'm back for chapter 3!
I definitely wasn't expecting to read about descendents from the Peverells, and it was a wonderful surprise! I love the build-up about the ring and the glimpse of their childhood which reveals that it's the resurrection stone. That the brothers are in search of the diadem, and essentially, this becomes the first encounter between a Hallow and a would-be Horcrux without them knowing it.
The bit with the arachnid attack was so well written, I had chills while reading it. And to know that Amherst had to leave his brother's body to escape was bone-chilling, and to think he kept it all a secret, even though he knew where the diadem was... essentially leading to Tom Riddle finding it in the same place later. I really love the connect here.
This was such a sad chapter and a great twist in the story of the Diadem! I'm looking forward to seeing what comes next. :)
[August BvB - Team Blue]
Thanks Nim for all the feedback!
Each story has at least 2 horcruxes in it. The goal was to weave their stories together before their fate was determined, so I tried to put a lot of connections throughout the story. My favorite are this chapter and #5. I'm not really happy with the ending. I feel it just doesn't have the impact some of the other chapters do, so if you have any feedback on it, I'd appreciate it.
Hey Barbara, I'm back again for the next chapter!
I love how bittersweet the beginning is, with Rowena's pride over her creation combined with her feeling the loss of the diadem and her daughter's betrayal. I also really like how you've subtly weaved in her need for admiration from others as well as her hiding her daughter's actions from her friends. With just a few lines, you managed to add a lot of depth to Rowena's character and that's brilliant!
The build-up with the argument leading on to the creation of the Sorting Hat was so good! I love how you incorporated the rhythmic verses into it!
Salazar's character is really interesting in this and the fallacious arguments he puts across only serves to show how deep his prejudices and delusions about muggle-borns truly are. I love how you've written about the way the word 'Mudblood' was formed as well. That it came from such a childish, hate-filled proclamation and then got carried on for years because of it - that's a really powerful angle you took. It's also incredibly sad that his relationship with the other Founders devolved from a meaningful friendship to bitter rivalry.
I absolutely love how you've written the ending, and the smooth flow into the next sequence of events. Looking forward to the next chapter!
[August BvB - Team Blue]
Hey Barbara! I thought I'd drop by and check out this fic since you told me about it! :)
I absolutely love the premise here. I've read a bunch of Founders era fics but never one that explores the history of the horcruxes and how it all began. It's so interesting that Rowena is the one who gifts each of the others their respective items - I never thought of it that way!
Her characterisation is brilliant. From judging the Great Hall to wanting to do something spectacular with the ceiling - just that small exchange with Godric says a lot about her. She's obviously someone who goes beyond the ordinary, and wants to stand out from the rest through her ideas and creativity. I also love the casual camaraderie between her and Godric and how he's so welcoming with each of them. Most of all, I love the various reasons you've come up with for Rowena's choice of gifts for the rest of the Founders, especially for Hufflepuff's cup. The angle that you've taken of Helga being an expert in the kitchen is wonderful, and it adds to the motherly, welcoming nature that is characteristic of Hufflepuff.
There was obviously a great deal of respect among the four Founders and the dynamic between them has been explored so wonderfully in just a single scene. This first chapter was an amazing start to your fic and I'm looking forward to reading the rest!
[August BvB - Team Blue]
Hey! I'm here from the review tag!
I don't read founders era fics very often, but this is really intriguing, and I like where you're taking it!
So the creation of the sorting hat was very clever. I can imagine the four founders having this discussion and trying to decide how someone would objectively sort their students after they were gone. I like that they were so concerned about what would become of their school once they passed, and that they knew the importance of Hogwarts even then. Sometimes I think that people let their house define them a bit too much, but it's good that the four of them knew the important of the sorting and that it needed to be addressed.
Salazar's characterisation is really quite chilling, he's so full of hatred - but he doesn't see it that way at all. He thinks that his house should be protected from the 'mud' and is protecting magic from these greedy and desparate muggles. It's good to know that he's alone in his ideology and that the other three don't share his beliefs. He mirrors a lot of the extremists of today who're worried about their race, but would rather let it die out than 'suffer' from multiculturalism. I really like how you made the link between 1000 years ago and today, because it shows that really - very little has changed.
I love how Godric Gryffindor really does represent his house, being so chivalrous and jumping in to defend Helga. I think he's my favourite character so far, the way you've described him I can picture him very clearly in my mind!
I can't wait to see what becomes of the founders after this!
Thanks for the review. This is my first founder's fiction and it's not really even that--only the first 2 chapters. I tried to have a bit of a "wrap up" connection at the end of each chapter. Some are better than others.
The entire story is done (8 chapters-last one is in the queu) I hope you enjoy the rest of it.
This sounded so interesting! I'm very intrigued where you take this story! The time span is truly epic, so I'm expecting this to go in directions I couldn't even think of!
I really like how you've decided to build a story around the Horcruxes, and each of their stories. I hope through these objects, what you really do is tell the story of all the people they connect through time and space. I think that's one of the true magics of such old things.
I think you've got a great start, here! The origin story of three of the horcruxes, already! And I like how you chose such a momentous occassion as the grand opening of Hogwarts - a fitting start to an undertaking of epic proportions. I also like how you've shown the four Founders to still be excellent friends at this moment. Your characterisation really shows that they're still all in this together, and have a great love and respect for each other. I am curious to know if the next chapter will explore their splintering, or whether it will take a huge leap in time.
Thanks for writing (and reading.) There are so many HP stories out there. I was trying to think of a character that not many people had written about. Then I wondered if an object could be a character which immediately led to the Horcruxes. Each chapter includes at least two of them so you see how they are connected throughout the centuries.