This was such a great start and I'm dying to know more! Clara is such a quiet mystery throughout the chapter and I was drawn to her straight away, and even more so once I learned who she was! Lupin's wife?! I can't wait to find out how that came to be! The head-hopping was confusing at first, but I actually quite enjoyed it, and liked having such a complete view of all the characters involved. I can't wait to read more!
First, Naww you thanked me at the end <33
Okay, so now I’m gonna come leave you a review telling you how much I love this! When I beta things I realize I take more the stance of being like “well, change this this and this and it’ll be good” without also giving all the glowing praise that I feel. So, prepare for all the glowing praise!
Okay! So, I mean you already know that I’ve completely invested in this whole story. I’ve been in love with Clara’s character since before you even started writing her and the fic. I mean, I think my favorite thing about her is that she’s a pacifist. This is just kinda something that I relate strongly to – and being a pacifist is hard, especially when you believe in something strongly. And, of course, the other great thing is that she’s a muggleborns in Slytherin! That’s like always so interesting to read, and I’m lowkey (read: high-key) glad that you went with that idea.
I also love her personality. She comes across as like curt and short (probably something she picked up from being friends with Sev), but I love that. I think it fits the whole Mediwitch role really well, like she’s more concerned with helping people and healing them than participating in small talk.
And I love how you have Harry characterized in this. I’m definitely looking forward to more interactions with Clara and Harry, especially when Remus is around. I’m already kind of imagining Harry’s sort of through process with that. Like is he going to be somewhat hurt that Remus kept something like this from him? Or is he going to be understanding?
I know I didn’t tell you this when I was betaing this for you, but I do really love your writing. I definitely think you don’t give yourself enough credit because you’re writing is so nice <3 and the style you chose to write this in fits perfectly (from what we’ve seen, of course, but I’ve no doubt that the rest of it will be perfect as well).
Anyway, I’m so glad I didn’t talk you out of writing this, because (I selfishly) love this. :D
I'm very grateful for your beta-ing, the tougher you are the better!!! You really helped me fix this first chapter, and I'm super grateful. I'm trying to be more concious of my flow and making sure everything makes sense in this second chapter that I'm writing....but you may have to look over it for me first!
I love that Clara's passionate about peace. Like people generally assume that pacifists are peaceful and timid - but Clara's the total opposite. She would march and protest for war to end. Like the anti-vietnam war protest at Trafalgar Square in the 60s, if she'd been old enough - she'd have been there I'm sure. In her mind, people can disagree, but they shouldn't have to die for thinking differently, or for trying to fight for something that isn't theirs in the first place.
I'm glad you encouraged her to be in Slytherin! If not, she'd have been a ravenclaw for certain. I don't believe she's a gryffindor or hufflepuff in the slightest, but then - it's very rare that my OCs/ RP characters are gryffinpuffs....maybe I should change that (although one of my favourite characters I ever RP'd was a hufflepuff who had trouble talking and suffered from extreme anxiety - he was so cute and I miss him terribly....I'm rambling, sorry!)
Clara's behaviour is similar to Severus, she's curt and short with strangers and people she doesn't know. She's a bit more relaxed around those she's closest to, but can be extremely sarcastic and slightly condescending if she's not careful. She's quite intelligent, but she put herself down a lot in her teens - and sometimes it still affects her. "what do you mean you don't know that? " isn't her being mean, it's her genuinely being worried that this person wasn't given a good education and needs to be tutored - because if she knows, then surely everyone aged 11+ knows too.
I think Harry's just going to be very....harry about the situation. Somewhere between anger and understanding is confusion - and Harry's very good at that. As well, I think Hermione's had it sussed since he taught them in their third year, and she'll just be like "obviously he's married, I thought you knew" . I'm not sure how their relationship will blossom, and whether that will even be shown in this fic yet - but we'll see!
Thank you for enabling me, for reading this - again, and for reviewing!! I hope you enjoy this uneccesarily rambly, lengthy response!
This is a really interesting start! As much as I love Remus x Tonks, I gotta admit, I love Remus/OC fics as well and it's interesting that you've started from the end. I definitely want to know more about Clara - she claims she's a pacifist, a hard position to take when people are hurt or dying, but it makes sense for a healer! tldr; I'm looking forward to reading more :)
Hey! Thanks so much for reviewing!
I ship remus x tonks too, but I have a soft spot for Remus x OC, hence the birth of this fic! I started at the end, because it's the only thing I was absolutely certain of, although - it's technically not an end of sorts. I won't reveal too much for now! The fic is going to explore Clara's feelings about war and what role she may have to play in it - if she chooses to. I've always wanted to write about a healer, I've RP'd a few - but now I'm excited to put them in fanfic form!
Again, thanks so much for reading this!!