Name: TheGoldenKneazle (Signed) · Date: 08 Jun 2018 10:10 AM · [Report This]
Story:Stand Tall Chapter: Chapter 2: Eyes Meet
Aww nooo. I felt so bad for Alba with the healing setback! and you portray the physical exertion of it all so well. I liked the weird interaction with Chandra, so much mystery. And loving Benjamin as well as the weird jealousy stuff with James - looking forward to seeing where it goes!
Name: justawillowtree (Signed) · Date: 10 May 2018 06:45 PM ·
[Report This]Story:Stand Tall Chapter: Chapter 2: Eyes Meet
*gasp* I should’ve known she’d be in Ravenclaw! She’s so smart! (Unless you mentioned this in the previous chapter, and I just wasn’t paying close enough attention haha.) I thought she was in Gryffindor with James this whole time, but Ravenclaw suits her better.
Your description of how Alba felt when she walked through the giant oak doors made me more envious than ever of all Hogwarts students, because um excuse me where is my letter. Anyway, haha your descriptions are so beautiful and adds the perfect extra flavor and pacing to this story, and I love them.
I’m feeling conflicted about James right now. On the one hand, he clearly really cares about Alba, which is why he told her Head of House about her injury. And with the pain medication that Alba’s been taking, who knows what would’ve happened if she just healed it quickly on her own and left it alone for too long? On the other hand, she obviously really didn’t want to leave the dinner early, and being made to do it hurt her pride. I think striking a balance between what Alba wants and what people who care for her want is obviously the most important thing, but it’s difficult.
(Very off-topic but I love that Alba refers to the little first years as “little things” lmao. But so true. Eleven-year-olds are tiny oh my goodness.)
I really liked the way you wrote the scene in the Hospital Wing. This line – “Examine the skin. Examine the muscle. Examine the wound. Forget the girl.” – is so memorable and powerful. And the analysis of how much her pain levels changed after just this one wound really shows how tedious a process this can be.
Ohh. I think I understand Chandra a little more now. Okay but now I’m even more conflicted about James, because if he likes Alba so much (also from the way he appeared to be jealous at the end of the chapter) then why is he dating Chandra? Why is he making Chandra look so sad? Also Alba, please don’t dislike Chandra so much for being James’s “lovely lady,” it’s not really something you should dislike someone for.
BENJAMIN HONEYPUCKER IS NOT ONLY AN ADORABLE NAME BUT IS ALSO AN ADORABLE HUMAN BEING AND I LIKE HIM VERY MUCH.
Also I would like for James to stop being jealous kthx. You have a girlfriend, mate.
SUCH A GOOD CHAPTER I’M CRYING THIS STORY IS SO GOOD HOW ARE YOU SO CONSISTENTLY AMAZING.
~Eva
Name: Stella Blue (Signed) · Date: 30 Mar 2018 08:05 PM · [Report This]
Story:Stand Tall Chapter: Chapter 2: Eyes Meet
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Hello :) I read the first chapter of this a few weeks ago, so now I'm back for another chapter!
This was just as good as your first chapter! I felt so badly for Alba in the beginning - of course James is just trying to do what's right, and Alba does need help for her leg, but poor thing to have to regress so far with her treatment. :( Her analysis of feeling like a number/a list of injuries instead of a person was really moving, too.
I loved the feast though, particularly the fact that Hagrid is still there, along with Grawp! Haahaha I can't even imagine Grawp 20 years later, like does he actually talk to people now, or just grunt and say 'Hermy'? haha /tangent
I'm also impressed with your writing of Chandra so far. I was really hoping she wouldn't be so one-dimensional as she appeared in the first chapter, so it was really nice to see that she does indeed have redeeming qualities - she might speak before she thinks sometimes (like in the first chapter) but she does care. A much more complex character that way ;)
The scene with Ben and Alba: adorable. Loved it so much. And ooh, James is jealous ;) Sidenote, what is he doing at the top of Ravenclaw tower with desserts? he went all the way up there just to see Alba? aw, that's cute.
Great chapter!
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