Hola! I am here for Nargles reading (we shall see how far I get ahha) and loving the first chappie. Lovely introduction to Alba - her challenges, pride, vulnerabilities. Your portrayal of CP is fab as well. And I like James, can't wait to see where their development goes! Also - 'stand tall' is a lovely meaningful phrase aww.
Thank you! I was afraid it was getting too repetative later on, but in the beginning it was quite nice.
Hi hi hi! I’m here to review this absolutely stunning Story of the Month winner (congratulations, by the way! I can’t imagine a story more deserving than this one).
It’s only the first chapter and I’m already in love. In love with Alba, in love with James, in love with your writing, in love with it all. This story is going to be a huge punch in the gut, I can feel it, especially because it definitely makes you consider the social standards we have in our world and how damaging they can be. Like just the opening, when Alba was eleven, made me question myself. Because would I have been like James? Or would I have been like Harry and Ginny?
Which is why this sort of representation is so, so important. I think the world is making some progress in terms of racial representation and LGBTQA+ representation (obviously it’s not at all perfect, and in some instances are moving backwards, but there’s a collective awareness about it), but there’s still not enough representation for people with disabilities. The fact that this is perhaps the first story I’ve seen centered around a girl with cerebral palsy, in both published works and fanfiction, says a lot, and I really love that you chose to write about Alba.
(Also, she’s so funny?? I can’t get enough of her omg.)
Anyway I’m wondering a lot about Chandra right now. Why is James dating her, if she’s so blatantly awful? When she was rude to Alba, I was honestly so surprised that James didn’t say anything about it, because Chandra just insulted one of his best friends. I wonder if this has been an ongoing conflict, or if this is the first time James has seen it. And I have a feeling that this is going to be cause more problems down the road. Still, it makes me wonder why James, who clearly adores Alba, is letting Chandra be so rude. Maybe she’s rude to everybody, and he just finds it charming?
I laughed a lot when Alba just cleaned herself off with her wand though lmao. Smart girl.
ONTO THE NEXT CHAPTER.
(Beautiful story, by the way. ‘Stand tall’ already has so much meaning as a phrase, and I love that you have it as your story title. <3)
I knew it had some heavy themes, but I didn't mean to make you question yourself in the introduction!
That my friend, is pretty much the point. =D
Thank you so much for deciding to tackle all of this, I know that it's quite a bit.
I saw on the forums that you'd finished transferring what you had of this story so I thought I'd come check it out!
This is a really interesting concept for a story and I'm so intrigued. (And the STAIRS! Poor Alba! You'd think magic would be able to help somehow - maybe she can zoom up bannisters like Mary Poppins?) I can already see she's a strong character, and I'm excited to begin this journey with her.
I love this: His perfect hand was warm in hers, unlike the cool metal bar of the crutch. The support of another human being can't compare to the support of a crutch. The whole interaction with James is very sweet! I like how we see the Potters straight away.
Also this must be the first story I've ever read where James isn't on a Quidditch team :P I love the easy banter between Alba and James. Their dialogue comes naturally and believably. I'm really excited to see what happens with the Triwizard Tournament too. This is fantastic, I'm really enjoying this story!!!
I’m glad you like it! I really wanted to characters to be down to earth and relatable.
Hey, welcome to HPFT! It's great to see you and this story showing up here! (I was marauderfan on the old site). I'm transferring a few reviews over to this story's new home ;)
Sorry about the delay! Omg your review for me was amazing, thank you. I hope mine will be that good (but, really, I just ramble a lot in my reviews, so sorry in advance)
Oh wow I love this already, from the very beginning description of Alba's disability. (Ps - there are so many staircases at Hogwarts, how on earth is that disability-accessible? I hope for her sake that she is either a Puff or a Slytherin because seriously the amount of stairs to the towers would be so cruel.)
Aw, and that's so true about kids versus adults. Kids are just curious and ask uncomfortable questions because they're curious, they don't know they're rude. Adults try to pretend they don't see. Alba's perspective is so refreshing here - I haven't seen another character like her in fanfiction like ever. And I think you treat the condition with a lot of care and respect - I feel like you either did your research very well or have some knowledge of it.
Bahahaa I love the idea of James showing of his prefect/head boy badge like Percy haha. Not the mischief maker but the arrogant goody two shoes, I kind of love your interpretation of James :D
Oh wait. Alba is the woman behind the curtain pulling all the strings, haha - James is a mischief maker and still made Head Boy. Alba must have had a hard time of it!
Eeep she is in Ravenclaw. Poor thing. Isn't that the tallest tower? O_o You'd think Hogwarts would have installed elevators. What would be really cool is elevators like the one in the book Charlie and the Chocolate Factory, you know the elevator that can go up and down and sideways. It'd fit right in at Hogwarts.
Ooh, Alba is so sassy to Chandra :p When you were describing Chandra before, she sounded fine, but when we actually meet her there in the carriage she didn't impress me. I hope the comment Chandra made about her being disgusting was about the mud and not some insult about her disability - that'd be the lowest of the low and I would hate her. I am already not a big fan of her. Alba is way cooler.
Awesome start to this story and I will definitely be reading more!!