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Name: TidalDragon (Signed) · Date: 12 May 2018 12:51 PM · starstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Breath of Fresh Air Chapter: Breath of Fresh Air

Howdy Abbi!

I am always intrigued by rare pairs and what with you being the reigning rare pair champion, I had to pop over here to see your latest.

Katie/Alicia isn't a pairing I've ever read before, but it's definitely one I can see evolving out of their friendship as Katie grows to acknowledge her sexual identity. Perhaps what I enjoyed most about the story was the relatively mundane moment that she realized how she really felt about Alicia. For me anyway, it feels very true to life. You can very much go through the same pattern or activity with a person over and over and over and then one day, something's slightly different or you notice something different about them and you start to feel differently. Or realize what an underlying feeling really was. I actually think it's especially this way with friends because there's more of a tendency to deny that you're interested in them romantically.

Though I'm left a little wondering exactly which part of the moment made Katie finally take notice, by the excellent description of something as simple and everyday as a ponytail, I'm assuming it was the sway while Alicia ran in front of her. I'm also assuming the ending was their first kiss. If I'm picky at all, I would've liked to see some of the post-realization progression to that point, but I really enjoyed the story!

Thanks for sharing!

 



Name: Pixileanin (Signed) · Date: 09 May 2018 12:34 PM · [Report This]
Story:Breath of Fresh Air Chapter: Breath of Fresh Air

 

I like to see captured moments where the characters realize something that they hadn't realized before. I think you did this really well, the snapshot of the exact point where things change for the character.

 

I like how you describe her moments of questioning their relationship through the past. It would be something anyone would do, to reassess everything to know about a person after the relationship changes from one thing to the other. The only thing I am still wondering about, is that very first moment of the scene, where she's running behind Alicia. At the end of the piece, I really wanted to know if that was after the kiss, or right before the kiss. I'm kind of hoping that it was after the kiss, and she's reminiscing about everything, because if they're in the middle of practice, Oliver would probably have both of their heads for interrupting his drills. LOL

 

Pix

 



Name: Unwritten Curse (Signed) · Date: 07 May 2018 03:47 PM · [Report This]
Story:Breath of Fresh Air Chapter: Breath of Fresh Air

Here for the Review Tag!

*squee*

Ah, I needed a piece of fluff today. Mondays are hard, but this made it a little easier. 

I immediately clicked on this piece because I had never read this pairing before, and I was intrigued. I'm so glad I clicked on it. I really like these two together. It fits so well. Best friends turned lovers. 

I love the full-circle feeling of this fic, too. Starting and ending with the realization, and then the kiss. It felt inevitable, almost. So when it happened, it felt like the last piece of a puzzle falling into place. And the final image of the "breath of fresh air" was totally perfect, especially after the scene of her running at Quidditch practice and trying to catch her breath. You clever writing, you!

Thank you for writing this. I'm so happy I got to read it!



Name: Felpata_Lupin (Signed) · Date: 15 Apr 2018 02:42 PM · starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Story:Breath of Fresh Air Chapter: Breath of Fresh Air

One of the many things that she admired about your best friend.Hey, Abbi! Here with the first prize review for my Peter challenge! :)

Okay, so, this was just so cute!

I love the way you describe Katie's feelings here, the way she interrogates herself over her feelings and the way she slowly comes to understand them. I think it's adorable how she's always felt that her friendship with Alicia was special, different from the other friendships she had, and that little detail of her inviting her to take the bed next to hers and calling her Kat. I love how she always blushed when she was with her.

I was a bit confused about the timing at first, but I guess I was just not very focused because it's very clear now. I did catch a typo, though, I think:

One of the many things that she admired about your best friend. I suppose you wanted to say that you admired

I really loved your use of second person, btw. It was very effective. And I loved all your description. Great job on this!

Maybe, if I really wanted to give you CC, is that I would have loved this to be a bit longer, more expanded? But it's really lovely the way it is, don't mind me... :P

Lots of love, my dear! And thank you again for participating in my challenge and congratulations for winning it! :)

Chiara



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