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Name: Patrick Chang (Anonymous) · Date: 22 Feb 2018 06:16 AM · starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Story:Albus Potter and Slytherin's Office Chapter: Flying

I always smile at the scenes how Hagrid cares Hogwarts kids. It's great to see he is always a guardin for them.

Ah, Madam Hooch. I remember the film, the first HP movie, Flying Lesson. Though there is no rival against Albus, such as Draco Malfoy for Harry, you set Albus Potter's inner emotional struggle very well. His desire is to be a man his dad will be proud of, which will be his eternal goal at Hogwarts. It's very stressful sometimes, but I guess he can get over the hurdle eventually.

 

I am getting to like your narrative description from Albus's POV (third person's). He is very modest and not confident around himself but his ambition is surely there, I feel his burning desire to be brave and accomplish something big like his father. It's partly Slythrin's trait and at the same time Gryffindor's. 

 

I wish he will do something great not only for his family fame but also for himself. :)

 

I'll be back again. 

 

Patrick 

 



Author's Response:

Hagrid will always care for the Hogwarts kids. He is an integral part of the school and I honestly cannot imagine Hogwarts without him.

 

Yeah, poor Albus will always try to meet the expectations that he feels are set for him because of his family name. Luckily for him, he isn't a bad flier, and I'm sure his dad will be proud of him. He does have a bit of ambition; you're right; which is partly why the hat wanted to put him in Slytherin.

 

Thanks for all the reviews! I really appreciate them, Patrick.



Name: Stella Blue (Signed) · Date: 09 Feb 2018 08:32 PM · [Report This]
Story:Albus Potter and Slytherin's Office Chapter: Flying

More transfers ;)

 

Aw! I love that they're having tea with Hagrid :D

Wow, Fang is a super ancient dog at this point.

I love the friendship you've established between the four so far - they get on really well, and seem like a good mix of traits to balance each other out as well.

Al's desire to be good at Quidditch is really understandable given the pressures from his parents' successes in it. Likewise I really understand his desire to not be the same as them, to be his own person and not just famous for his father's fame. I think that's a very natural feeling the Potter kids would have.

Oh my goodness, how dare you leave the end of the chapter there ;) Did he get on? Aah! :p



Author's Response:

Thanks for transfering the review, and glad you're enjoying it!



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