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Name: Felpata_Lupin (Signed) · Date: 17 Apr 2018 02:28 PM · starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Story:Albus Potter and Slytherin's Office Chapter: The Extraordinary Arrival

Oh, come on, are you really breaking the chapter here? I don't like cliffhangers, you know? :P

Poor little Al, so worried that he will be a Slytherin and that he won't be up to people's expectations... I bet being a son to the great Harry Potter is hard, especially for him who looks so much like him.

James is a little troublemaker, isn't he? Honestly, I can't believe Albus believed him when he said the Sorting Hat had been damaged and the would have to pass a test *rolls eyes* Bet it's quite hard to be James' little sibling, too... :P

Guess I'll go take a peek at Al's sorting, now... :P See you in a minute!



Name: justawillowtree (Signed) · Date: 11 Apr 2018 11:03 PM · [Report This]
Story:Albus Potter and Slytherin's Office Chapter: The Extraordinary Arrival

I’m back for the second chapter! Prepare for a good number of reviews for Claudia Appreciation Month haha.

 

Okay, I have to admit to you, since I read your interview first, I’m assuming you’re going to put Albus in Gryffindor, though not before a lengthy struggle with the Sorting Hat. Though, my gut instinct is that he’s going to be put in Slytherin (especially considering the title of this story), so I’m still a little unsure. Anyway, I don’t know why I started this review talking about literally the last thing that happens. I do that a lot.

 

First-year train ride scenes are so nostalgic for me. I feel like it’s been such a long time since I’ve seen one, so I read through this quite happily haha. All of Albus’s concerns are valid, though I think the poor boy is too stressed out about what’s going to happen to him. After all, there are a lot of heroes in our world where we don’t expect anything from the children. However, I can completely understand why Albus thinks this way; the pressure must be so daunting.

 

James seems like such the typical older sibling, constantly taunting and teasing his little brother. Sometimes I just wanted to reach over and smack James, because he needs to get ahold of himself. When he lied to Albus about the Sorting Hat not being used this year?? HOW MEAN. If James were my older brother, I would probably not want to share a room with him (I remember the epilogue having that scene when James and Albus are practically begging to share a bedroom haha).

 

I like Rose a lot! Even though she didn’t talk much this chapter, I was super excited to see her. <3

 

I’m really wondering whether Albus will be friends with Scoripus in this story or not. Based on Albus’s first impression of Scorpius (“jerk” lmao) I don’t think they’re going to hit it off, but I wonder if there’ll be a friendship arc?? Hmmm.

 

~Eva



Author's Response:

Aw thanks! *blushes*

 

You will see what house Albus gets put into... *grins* It'll be fun to see. Yeah, I wasn't too subtle about where Albus ended up in my interview, was I? In fairness, the only spoiler I mentioned was only for the third chapter, so I didn't reveal too much.

 

James teases Albus a lot like Fred and George did to Ron- remember how Ron said that his brothers claimed that they were sorted based on a test that "hurt a lot"? James sort of does the same thing, but I'm sure he'll outgrow it. He's only 12.

 

I love Rose too! I'm glad you like her.

 

It's always interesting to see what next gen writers do with Scorpius. More often than not, Scorpius is Albus's best friend. I've also read stories where they are enemies. I guess you'll have to wait and see what I do!

 

Thanks so much for reviewing Eva! I love all the puff love. *hugs*



Name: Patrick Chang (Anonymous) · Date: 16 Feb 2018 05:00 PM · starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Story:Albus Potter and Slytherin's Office Chapter: The Extraordinary Arrival

Moyer sounds cool. Then, professor Fuchs,  I wonder how to pronounce the name. I imagine how you enjoyed writing the process, trip to Hogwarts castle via Hogwarts Express and a boat with Hagrid. Each scene is well written. As James said, we know how it is like very much, we recognize how the first years feel excited and worry about their new life there from Albus Potter's POV. 

 

All he worried at that time was being sorted there since he departed from the platform, from his father. You focused on the point, it is good, 'cause it's really likely children at the age think of. 

 

Rose seems to have been his good consultant. I wonder who will be his best friend, I mean who will join as a member of the new golden trio. Or not? Or more members as his team? I'm curious!

 

Patrick



Author's Response:

Professor Fuchs rhymes with the word "puke" (with an s on the end). It rhyming with puke is completely unintentional, it was simply the best way to explain its pronunciation to you.

 

I wrote most of this story about three to five years ago, so it's been a while, but I do remember enjoying writing these scenes very much. If I didn't enjoy it, I wouldn't be writing it, now would I?

 

Well, I guess you will have to wait and find out to see who becomes a part of his group of friends! The story summary kind of spoils it though... oops.

 

Glad you're enjoying it! Thanks for everything!



Name: Stella Blue (Signed) · Date: 02 Feb 2018 01:20 AM · [Report This]
Story:Albus Potter and Slytherin's Office Chapter: The Extraordinary Arrival

*Transferred review*


 Ok, one thing I have noticed so far that is really awesome: you have the same format of opening your story as JK does (at least GoF- on.). The chapter about mysterious things elsewhere to start off, and then beginning with the second one, a focus on the main character, and you remind the reader things like that there are four houses, Albus is a wizard... I really like that. Yes they are things we all know as readers of HP fanfiction, but it's like a little nod to the books and I definitely appreciate that.

I love the details of characterisation in here, like the fact that Albus doesn't like new foods. It's very realistic for an eleven year old! James is perfect as the annoying, older brother.. "see you in a million years. Your underpants are showing." He acts a little like my cousin was at that age :p so, I found him realistic as well!

Props to you for putting in a Sorting Hat song. It's easy to just brush over it and not include one, but I'm always impressed when people are willing to try their hand at poetry and add a song. Nice job :)

Ooh, you cut that off in a very sneaky place! Without any further ado, I'm going to find out what house Albus is in...



Author's Response:

Once again, thanks for transferring the review! Glad you're enjoying it.



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