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Name: dreamgazer220 (Signed) · Date: 15 Mar 2018 01:46 PM · [Report This]
Story:Burdens Chapter: heavy

Hiya, Hayden! I'm here for judging the Say Goodbye challenge ♥

I knew this was going to be an emotionally heavy piece, so I was a little prepared going in, but I still wasn't prepared for the middle section.  Wow.  I think you did a great job handling a difficult subject; in less than 1000 words, you definitely made me sympathize with Teddy.  It was interesting that his struggle started when he was a child, being bounced around to different homes and never understanding why he was different from the others, but it all made so much sense.

I feel so badly that he could never really move past it. Even when he had his own future, his own family to take care of; but that's just the thing about depression.  Even the happiest people with so much promise could be depressed, and I think you did a good job showcasing that here.

I hated that Harry had to walk in and find him like that, though. I would almost love to see a follow-up piece on how Harry deals with that, but you certainly don't have to write it :P  

But in the end, you gave Teddy what he wanted: he finally got to be with his family again, and it was sweet that he sat with James and Lily as he watched the Potters come to say goodbye.  There were a few layers here that I really appreciated, and I think you did a great job with this piece, especially given the heavy emotional subject.

Thanks for entering the challenge! ♥



Name: RoxiMalfoy (Signed) · Date: 01 Mar 2018 03:13 PM · starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Story:Burdens Chapter: heavy

Hayden!! ♥

OMGosh, I totally forgot that February was a shorter month, so I guess this is a tad bit late, lol... Sorry about that, love. As your lovely Beta though, I felt that it was only appropriate for me to come and review this story for the Hot Seat round! =P


OMG, this is such a heartbreaking piece though!!! You really know how play with my emotions. I am NOT okay with this right now!! =(


Your opener was so fantastic: The foyer begins to feel like overcrowded pigs in a blanket, - Seriously, I LOVED that line!!

I love how poetic your writing always is. You have this way of making so few words tell such a big story. Seriously, HOW do you do that?!? Teach me your ways, lol!! =P


Poor Victoire. Everything starts out so great for them in the beginning; so full of promise. I'm sure it could not have been easy for her to watch her husband go through all of that. It’s no wonder so left in the end… And poor, poor, Teddy!! I just wanted to hug him and tell him that everything was going to be okay. It had to have been really hard for him as a boy; but he did have Harry though, at least. I just wish that he could have seen what he DID have, rather than only focusing on that which he did not. I guess in the end, it was just too much for him to handle… Much like that ending was almost too much for ME to handle, lol! (Not to make light of such a tragic situation AT ALL!!) I just wish that Teddy could have had a happy ending, that’s all. =(


Oh gosh, I can’t even begin to imagine what Harry must be feeling after all this. He really did everything that he could to raise Teddy. And then he had to be the one to find him… I really do have to commend you for writing such a heavy topic in such a powerful way, Hayden. The words that you chose are always so articulate and so well written!! Your style is the most unique thing ever, and I just LOVE reading your pieces!!! ♥ ♥

 

~Deana



Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 21 Feb 2018 02:33 AM · [Report This]
Story:Burdens Chapter: heavy

Hey, I'm here for the Hot Seat!

 

You handled this extremely well for something so sinisterly dark. The amount of confusion Teddy must have felt as a child is glaringly evident as he is shifted from one house to another without really being able to feel a.sense of belonging or true family (parents, siblings) despite how hard everyone tried to make him feel included must have been so difficult to bear, especially after he'd learnt the truth of what had happened and why he was in such a situation to begin with.

 

It's so sad to see how he is unable to make his marriage work (his family, his children) despite how much he really wanted to because he could not overcome the anguish he felt over what he lacked as a child (because of his parents' deaths). It's like they couldn't truly be "The Lupins" because, to Teddy, the Lupins were dead. Of course, in the wake of his descent into darkness, his family leaving him, unable to cope with his path of self-destructive behavior that was simultaneously destroying him and everyone around him, it only sent him further over the edge.

 

And the way things turned out, with Teddy truly unable to accept the help available to him, was tragically sad. It's so difficult to see someone with so much ahead of them do something like this, leaving behind a slew of people who love him and who will never be able to teulu understand what made him go that far over the edge. They will be forever left wondering the same thing that that most everyone does when something like this happens (what could I have done? Where did I go wrong? Is this my fault? Could I have done something more?).

 

A very dark and sad piece. 

 

-Rumpels



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