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Name: Stella Blue (Signed) · Date: 27 Jan 2018 07:02 PM · [Report This]
Story:When Spring Doesn't Return Chapter: I.

HEy Rumpels! I'm here for the FROGS, congrats on your nomination!

Wooowww this was so cool! I don't think I realized it was going to be poetry before I clicked on it (didn't read the summary - oops) Anyway, I'm really impressed by how these are all individual poems that combine into a larger work, and the way each half of the poem can either stand on its own or fit in with the other half. The style is immediately compelling.

 

And I love the seasonal theme and the way it fits in with the timeline of the two main characters' relationship - it's such a perfect analogy with how the relationship heats up and then eventually goes cold. Your imagery is so wonderfully vivid, in the particular details you chose to focus in on, and I love that it's kind of abstract and metaphorical in terms of the relationship - it makes it sound so beautiful even though it's about a relationship growing cold and falling apart. I honestly loved this so much. You have a real talent at writing poetry!

 

Good luck in the FROGS!



Author's Response:

O/ Hello!

 

This is the first poem I've written since High School! I love reading poetry and explicating poetry, so I saw the challenge for it and thought I'd give it a go. I'm glad you've enjoyed the style and the different ways that it can be read.  I'm really glad that the premise of a blossoming relationship that eventually falls apart came through :) to you. 

 

Thank you so, so much!

 

-Rumpels



Name: StarFeather (Signed) · Date: 24 Dec 2017 08:42 AM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:When Spring Doesn't Return Chapter: I.

Hi, Rumpel! Thank you for participating in my tanka story challenge.

  It’s terrific, I’d like to say from my heart.

 

  At first, we notice you separated each person’s POV beautifully on the right and the left.

 

   Some of the words are sexually stimulating. The others are horrifying. You tried expressing the ship between Karkaroff and the original female character using all seasons. I like all stanzas inlayed with brilliant descriptions of seasonal phenomena and their emotion. Especially winter parts are very impressive.

 

   I wonder if she might be killed or involved in the case and accidentally died. The female character seemed to have longed for spring time would come back to them. It’s very intriguing.

 

   Have you written about the ship in the other works? If you did, I’m eager to stop by them as the 1st place prize! I’ll twitter at my status on the forums how you did great as well. Now I’ll start making the 1 prize graphic. Thank you again for a wonderful piece of your works.

 

K



Author's Response:

Hey, Kenny!!

 

Thank you so much (it was a lot of hard work to get myself to write a poem)! And, yes, you're right, something does happen to Grace, but spoilers! I have a WIP with Grace x Karkaroff called "What We Become" (First-Wizarding War|Marauder's Era).  Thanks so much again and thank you for the beautiful graphic (I still need to add it to my profile).

 

-Rumpels



Name: M C Crocker (Signed) · Date: 10 Dec 2017 03:02 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:When Spring Doesn't Return Chapter: I.

Oh-my-Rumple! Yes, that is a new thing and I'm using it.  This - this was just I am beyond word.  The heat, the fire, the passion, the loss the cold the parting.  I picked this poem because 1. I love your writing and 2 I love seasonal poetry

 

This, however, took me beyond what I expected to read.  I am also astounded by your skills to craft this as two separate poems that can read as one!  Brilliance a level I could not achieve!  I am awe of your powers and I bow.  Also while this is about two characters from the HP world, this can read as original character and poetry and I'm just  - I am making heart eyes at you and your poem here.  Like I am failing at the making of words and want just ramble on and on about how much I am in love right now.  Seriously Rumple do more!  I am tempted to stop my quest to explore other's poems and see if you have other poems because seriously this was amazingly good and I wanna read more!

 

However, I will stop now becuase I am sure my rambles will become incoherent.  But seriously - just Guh!  I am slain.



Author's Response:

Carrie! <3

 

:D This review is so kind and squee-tastic! Yes, the only reason this is tied to the HP-verse is because I based it around two characters existing in the HP-verse, following a plot I've been working on, but otherwise stands alone as OF. Yes! I wanted to separate their perspectives and, while I was doing that, realized that I could play around with it some more and wound up making two poems that can be interwoven or read whichever way you wanted (that was one of the most fun parts about writing this). . 

 

<333 Every time I read this review I can't stop smiling :P!!!

 

-Rumpels



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