Oh my goodness this was so stressful to read. I had to keep clicking out of the tab and doing something else so I could chill out enough to keep going :') The thing with this story is that there's a fair amount of tension, but there's also an explicit sense that the tension and apprehension is justified. We as readers have every reason to think that something is going to go horribly wrong.
But it didn't! While Lucius may not have had the best reaction in the world, there also wasn't some kind of terrilbe explosion of rage or disgust. He mostly seemed mad about Albus being Harry's kid too, so he didn't say anything homophobic (although I'm not convinced he's not a homophobe, lol). I'm really happy about it tbh. It was unexpected but it was a nice surprise. Thank god for Narcissa ahaha.
The two things I really want to comment on here are
1) How freakin' adorable Scorpius and Albus are. You've really done such a good job with their relationship. I don't read a lot of Scorbus, but you brought a lot of love into the pairing here, and I found it really believable that they'd been together for years just based on the way they interacted with each other and everything.
2) Astoria! I love her! And the warmth between her and Scorpius was just palpable, it was so clear how much they loved each other. (And I loved that he calls her Mama :') )
I really enjoyed this, great work!
Hi Emily! Im (finally) here for the November review swap, and sorry in advance for any typos as I'm writing this on my phone on the train. I know I said I was gonna read your novel next but then I found a scorbus and couldn't resist.
I loved this! Your characterization is once again superb, and in the case of Lucius and Narcissa, very consistent with how you wrote them in Permanence, which I appreciated :D I really like how you write Astoria and Draco, as well. Astoria is just as I would have imagined her, kind of a breath of fresh air and quite different from Draco, but in a way that clearly has made him change into a better person over time. I love seeing the way she interacts with her family. Draco's initial reaction to Albus was hilarious btw, him whining and suggesting any other guy for Scorpius to date, even though the guy was straight haha. It seems his reservations were less out of hatred for Harry than it was just annoyance at how the universe had to spite him. like "ughhhh reallllly? fine then". It shows how the animosity between Harry nd Draco at school is now nothing more than just a decades-old school thing.
Scorpius and Albus are such a sweet couple. I love hhow you show their relationship and how each fits in with the other's family through these little details - how Albus' sister bought Scorpius some nice robes, and Scorpius' mother suggests those robes for the tea. It says a lot about how much each of them is accepted into the other's family. And it was sweet how Albus knows how important this is to Scorpius because Scorpius actually offers to look at 'boring sports stuff' with Albus haha.
Lucius doesn't seem thrilled at first to say the least, but I assume that once he realized the rest of his family accepts Albus, that he begins to as well. And I love that what finally made a difference was Albus saying how honored he is to meet Narcissa. A little flattery goes a long way, especially to someone who enjoys being flattered :p And she did save Harry's life, so there's that. It was nice to see that they got along and I hope Lucius comes around in time!
This was a great story. lovely work on this.
Omg this is amazing. I loved it.
Their relationship is so sweet. I like their dynamic a lot - there's clearly so much love and affection there, and while you told us that with things like how long they've been together and their plans to imminently move in together, but you showed it, too. They know each other so well - Scorpius bribing Albus with promises to go look at Quidditch stuff made me smile - I've actually been in relationships where either bookstore trips or soccer matches were used to bribe me into things I didn't want to do. :P
I loved your headcanon for Astoria, and Narcissa being the one to help alleviate the tension worked so well for me, because it felt very consistent with her character as we saw it in the books. I think that Lucius bought into the pureblood superiority nonsense and really made it part of his identity, but I'm not sure that Narcissa was ever as invested in purebloodedness as she was in her family. Things like that, Draco's comment about Paul Nott (which made me laugh because my headcanon is that the next-gen!Notts are Scorpius's cousins), and the similarities between Draco and Albus really kept this fairly light-hearted, even with the high stakes on the table.
One tiny bit of CC - you characterize Al's eyes as brown here, but I'm pretty sure the epilogue specifically said that they were green, right? It's super minor, but I thought I'd mention it.
Overall, though, this was well-written and absolutely adorable. <3
I am so happy that you liked this story! Writing it got me hooked on Scorbus, so I'm really fond of it as well. I loved playing with their personalities and making them my own version of Albus and Scorpius than what I've usually read. And I'm so glad you liked Astoria and the elder Malfoys! As you know, I'm a Dramione shipper 'til the day I die, but if Draco has to be with his canon-wife, I want her to be awesome and balance him out. And I like to think that Narcissa would've gotten over herself a bit as she aged. Like you said: family above all.
The part where Draco asks about Paul Nott is one that I just had to put in. I just imagine all those conservative parents who are trying to figure out their LGBT+ kids and attempting to be helpful, like, "But what about so-and-so? The dentist's son? He's gay, right? I'll set you up!" I imagine Draco would be just as tactless.
And you're right about Al's eyes! I think I was just internally wishing I never had to hear "You have your mother's eyes!" again. Blehhh. Ah, well, I'll leave it for now.
Thank you so much for reviewing! I'm really glad you liked it!