So this is quite a unique way to go about telling the Second Wizarding War, by having the Next Generation look back on it. I really liked the mood-setting with Melinda looking at all the headstones--those who died in 1998 in battle. And then, the next month, watching the man who didn't die in battle, but is disconnected from the world around him, who had died long before the Battle of Hogwarts began.
The perspective change is quite nice, to the man fleeing from Voldemort once the Ministry had been overthrown. Funnily enough, he blamed the Snatcher's arrival on the weight of Voldemort's name, and I love the connection given to the reader of being able to hold his baby girl for the first time but being unable to give birth to his granddaughter. It's rather sad. And then of course the final skirmish with the Snatcher before succumbing to his death--it's quite brutal.
This was such a dark piece, I loved it! Your use of imagery was extremely well done, my favorite, of course, is the nod to thunder during a snowstorm to represent the Snatchers. The level of hopelessness and despair that the man was feeling screamed through the writing and I love the way it was presented!
Author's Response: Hi there Rumpels, You were able to take away much from what I'd written that it almost felt foreign to me because I didn't think it was written well enough. I'm glad the intent of the story came through as despite me saying it's not well-written, Say a Prayer is by far my personal favorite of my fanfics and reading your wonderful review means a lot. Thank you for reading and leaving a review! June