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Name: toomanycurls (Signed) · Date: 21 Sep 2017 03:57 AM · [Report This]
Story:Brown Eyed Girl Chapter: one

Hello!!

 

I'm here from the staff review thread. I'm not familiar with the 100 so I hope my review is still meaningful. I think the whole alienation from everyone else is really well conveyed here. I like how you describe the PTSD-ish feelings Perri has and that it's really hard not to fear even if there's not a current danger. 

 

I like how you describe Perri being able to go into places she wouldn't be able to if she weren't a doctor. The combination of role based privledge and being a social outcast is super interesting to me. 

 

From the reaction Perri got from Raven... it sounds like they have a history or a future history (I... made that term up). 

 

*popcorn*

 

Your description of them picking up together in that lovely awkward but kind of romantically tense silence is awesome. It's not too much action but not too much describing -- just a good balance of filling in the scene, capturing the mood, and conveying the unspoken stuff between them. 

 

I love that you ended with a little teaser for more to come between them 

 

-Rose



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