Hi! Here with the second of your prize reviews. <3
So this story made me want to laugh and cry at the same time, and I don’t know how you accomplished that, but you did. The more ridiculous elements of the story paired with the unrequited love aspects makes for such an entertaining read. I definitely felt sadder than I expected at the end of the story haha but that’s not a bad thing! Though Sirius does have quite the flair for dramatics.
My favorite thing in the beginning was when Sirius was writing out all the variations of Remus’s name. I actually laughed out loud at this line – “even Sirius Orion Lupin once or twice, even though it (unfortunately) sounds nowhere near as snappy as your actual name.”
And then the twist! I honestly wasn’t sure what I was expecting going into this; like the beginning seemed fairly standard as far as non-parodies go (humorous, but standard) so I had no idea what you were going to do with it. But it was better than anything I ever could have imagined lmao. I was just as baffled as the rest of the Marauders when Remus said that he was only gay during the full moon; I thought he was lying or bluffing or trying to worm his way out of talking about his lycanthropy, but no omg, he was telling the truth. And that was amazing hahaha.
I’m glad that Sirius got to spend time with Remus once a month, even if it didn’t feel like nearly enough for him. And I’m really sorry that he has to suffer through unrequited love, because that can’t be fun at all.
THIS WAS SO FUN. My heart goes out to Sirius a bit at the end there, but everything else was perfect haha. <3
So I just loved the very idea of this! It was amazes me how you can take same/similar issues but you always come up with new interesting ways to tell their story. This take on wolfstar is really fun, engaging and such a unique little idea!
I loved the beginning with Sirius' day dreaming about Remus, I think my favourite line in right at the beginning 'even Sirius Orion Lupin once or twice, even though it (unfortunately) sounds nowhere near as snappy as your actual name.'. I laughed at this mainly because it's true, you know Remus should probably take Sirius' name instead haha.
I love that dialogue between the marauders is so casual too and James' 'what the shit?' then you go full on angsty with Sirius here too like it wouldn't be wolfstar without the terrible over-dramatic angst, you capture the longing and the pining so well. you play everything in this piece so beautifully. I basically love you for parodying your own favourite ship. you make it work, the humour and the angst together.
Well done <3
- Abbi xo
I SWEAR one of these days I'm going to write a different pairing! Different characters, even! LOL. But I'm glad that you find I'm able to keep it interesting and I'm not just boring and repetitive ;)
I don't think "Remus John Black" is much better than "Sirius Orion Lupin", personally, so I guess they just have to keep their own last names. Or hyphenate! Sirius Orion Lupin-Black?
Oooh, I'm glad you liked the dialogue because I always feel like that's one of my weak points, especially with James!
Thank you so much for the wonderful review!
Hi, I'm here for the winter wonderland event.
So what I deduced from the story description is that this is a parody and that there's humour involved. And for a good chunk of the story, it was humourous. Initially, when Sirius is pining after Remus, it's adorable and reminiscent of how most of us feel about someone at some point at that age. And when Sirius mentions that no one could rival Remus's beauty except Sirius himself, I snorted out a laugh in a most unladylike manner while on the bus. But it was worth it.
The thing is that this is such a beautifully written story. I just didn't prepare myself for so much angst and heartbreak. I mean, it's cute and romantic and there is hope up until Remus, for lack of a better term, comes out. Then there was the very relatable bit where Sirius was talking about how not confessing about his feelings meant that he gets to at least hold onto the fantasies of Remus in his head. I suppose we all do that. Or at least I know I do. The writing kept getting bleaker and bleaker until that final paragraph which, and I'm not exaggerating, actually made my chest hurt. It's was so eloquently written that it actually gave me physics pain.
I've been reading stories for the event all day, and I can honestly say that nothing has touched me the way this has. I mean, it's supposed to be a parody but it's just so poetic and artistic and even sad, leaving me here clutching my heart. I'm not sure if I've read anything else by you, but now I'm sure I'll have to dip more into your author page.
And before disappearing, I'd like to stress once more on how beautiful and amazing and every nice adjective out there this piece is. Okay, I'm done raving now.
Thanks for stopping by! This story was indeed meant to be a parody, but mostly a parody of myself. I'm kind of known for writing a lot of wolfstar angst, so I wanted to write a really over-the-top wolfstar angst based on a ridiculous premise. However, I may have made it a bit genuinely sad by accident. Oops? :'D
But I'm really glad that you enjoyed this so much and that it genuinely touched you! That's actually really cool to hear. And I'm glad it made you laugh in places as well!
Thank you so much for the lovely review!
Hi, Kayla! The fourth review for 1st place at Auror’s Tale Challenge!
Perilune… I looked up the word in a dictionary. It says “the point in a lunar orbit when a spacecraft launched from the moon is nearest the moon.” I wondered what the title means for Sirius and Remus. I vaguely imagined it would be about Lupin’s lycanthropy. I just imagined you would write the comedy how the other Marauders face Remus on a full moon.
In the first half, you wrote how much Sirius had been infatuated with Remus. I couldn’t imagine how you would develop this into a comedy as you twittered the other day around the end of July. Okay, you wrote about Lupin’s lycanthropy: he was like clockwork; once a month, he disappeared from the dorm for a night…
Agh, “the tides” and the title, “Perilune”! I think I can understand what you wanted to express. Unusual and unique love between Sirius and Remus. But, but, Kayla, how does Sirius confirm that Remus loves him on a full moon? It’s dangerous for each other, even if Sirius transformes into Padfoot. It must be stressful for Sirius that Remus really loves him only on a full moon. It’s a black comedy, isn’t it?
So the concept for this story actually came from a conversation I had with Lizzie, Kaitlin, Sian, and Lizzie's little sister, where we were all joking around and saying it would be funny if, instead of being a werewolf, Remus was gay but only at the full moon. So he's actually not a werewolf at all in this story. Which is a very big change to the Marauders's story, but luckily this was just a short and funny one-shot, so I didn't have to go into it in too much detail.
Yes, this is definitely a pretty dark comedy, because I wrote Sirius as so angsty. But the idea was so silly that I still think it falls into the humour category :)
Thanks for reading and for the review!
Just dropping by to leave you a quick review on this amazing story! I am so, so glad you decided to write this. To think a random conversation in NYC could inspire a story. :)
Where do I even start with this? I suppose at the beginning. I love how you made Remus so casual about the tides. Like he just shrugs and says it, offering zero explanation to any of his buddies. I was dying.
I also adore just how angsty Sirius is in this. I mean I know you almost always write angsty Sirius, but this is on a different level. He's so in love and heartbroken over Remus. It was a nice switch from the usually pining Remus. :)
What an awful predicament for Sirius though! It would be pretty terrible to be in love with someone who could only love you once a month. Particularly towards the final paragraphs, we really see the depths of Sirius' despair. It's a pretty dark ending. :(
Good work! So glad I got to see this vision come to life. :)
I know right! But that conversation in NYC was so funny that I just couldn't resist. I hope Rubidium knows this ended up happening, hahaha.
"The tides". What else is there to say? Hahaha he couldn't explain because I have no idea how the mechanics of this full-moon transformation work. Maybe I'll figure it out one day?
Huh, I suppose I usually do write pining Remus. Pining Sirius was actually a lot trickier than I expected. Maybe that means I need to write some more to get the hang of it ;)
Thanks for stopping by, Kaitlin!