Quodpot - match 3
Okay, so I was already interested when I saw that this was stream of consciousness, but it’s also a POEM? How do you do that. I can’t even write poetry when I plan it, I can’t imagine being able to write poetry stream of consciousness.
Possibly of topic, but the first lines of your stanzas, especially the two that start “When I was a girl” strongly reminded me of the lyrics to Que será, será.
There is a lot that is sad in here. The bullying, of course. But what really got me, was the change in Apollines mother’s message - how when she was a child, she was told to listen to er inner music, but when Apolline got older, that changed to being told to find a husband. Apolline stuck to what she wanted though, and pursued her music first, and then her family. Both are things her mother told her to do, which suggests that she has a strong bond of respect for her mother, and she was ultimately happy with her choices.
I’d have loved to see ways that music continued to be a part of her life. Did she sing around the house? Teach her children to sing? It sounds like the music is still part of her, just not the career, and I’d like to see a bit more of that.
This was a really interesting piece, and not a backstory I would have imagined for Apolline. Thanks for sharing it!
I just kinda let the world take me where it was going to during the writing of this, and that's where it went. Not really how I imagine Apolline either, at least in my conscious, but sub-consciously, I must have pictured her as an artist. As for the poetry, since it's blank verse, I took a lot of...poetic licence with it (ha-ha).
Thank you for the review of this, and I appreciate it.