Hi, here for the second review!
I like how you positioned it for the first letter of each section to spell Dragon. I think the moments choosen were done well, and I'm glad I'm not the only who shipped him with Tonks in high school, although I'm not sure if she'd ever even consider using a love potion. At least to me that's kinda like a date rape drug and I don't think that's something she'd even listen to, even though she didn't go through it.
Then again, Charlie is so enamered with dragons maybe nothing else would even get through regardless. I really liked the little snippets into his life and I really need to read more Charlie stories. Good job!
oh, you noticed DRAGON in each sentence? great, kat. I like writing the fandom, Charlie and his dragons plus Tonks.
We need to talk about the ship, Tonks and Charlie on the forums. Let's do it sometimes when you are tired of real life. :)
Thank you again for review swap!
Hi there Kenny! I wanted to come look at this one too.
The opening scene with seven-year-old Charlie doing magic for the first time is adorable. I love the image of Charlie creating a firework of a dragon.
The second scene with Charlie and Tonks secretly in love with each other is also adorable. I really liked when he protected her from Flint. As much as I like Tonks/Remus, I sort of wish that she had gone off with Charlie after reading this…
I like the glimpse you give us of Charlie working with and taking care of dragons. I hope that this will be part of a longer series. And I felt warm and fuzzy at the end when Charlie is planning a camping trip with Teddy to study Welsh dragons.
Thank you for writing!
Hi, Noelle. Thank you again for stopping by my story. It was written for alphabetical order challenge. I simply enjoyed writing with the words in alphabetical order and it was fun to imagine the ship, Tonks and Charlie. I like Dragons so it was a good chance to develop my imagination around Charlie in his childhood and their career like a dragon tamer and Auror Tonks.
I just wrote a short one for Charlie in another story challenge, Village Voice Out challenge like that after a long time. :)
I'm here from the staff review thread to complete your requested review. I really liked the opportunity to have a choice of your entire author's page, so I decided to review something that had no reviews. I had to scroll quite far down on the list to get to something that wasn't yet reviewed - and I was not disappointed in the least.
This story hit the trifecta for me. It had an "origin" story, a "missing moment" and not one, but two heartwarming parent/child scenes. (Well, to be fair, the last scene wasn't parent/child per se, but I definitely felt like Charile was working to fill the void left in little Teddy's life from his deceased mother. You write the raw emotions, accompanied by the continuous train of thought that comes with being a parent quite well. I can only guess that stems from your own personal experience, but being able to capture it so perfectly is a true talent.
Each of the characters in this has a distinct inner voice, and I think the decision to write as the omniscient narrator was a great one for this tale. There was a lot going on, and it wouldn't have had the same emotional roller coaster effect if the reader had to guess how Charlie or Tonks were feeling at any given moment. (And I really do hope that Charlie showed Marcus Flint a thing or two about how to play "Quidditch")
The ending was bittersweet, with Charile clearly having some regrets and "what-ifs" regarding him not ever revealing his true feelings for Nymphadora. However, I think that if anything had ever happened between them, he would've ultimately had to choose between her and his dragons. In a way, I think he actually had already decided that. It was clear from the very beginning that his first love was always going to be the dragons, and a significant other would always come in at a distant second. In that respect, both Charlie and Nymphadora were able to find true love - him with his beasts and her with Remus.
You mentioned in the review request that you would like any constructive feedback and the only thing I can think of is that there are a few typos here and there and some phrasings that seem odd. I know that's mostly because English is not your first language and nothing is too egregious to get in the way of the story itself, or your clever way with words.
I think we all fell in love with the Weasleys because of their unconditional love for each other and their passion to do the right thing and be true to themselves. You wrote a beautiful one-shot that encompasses all of those themes. Well done!
Hi, Beth. Thank you for sparing time for this. Your encouragement let me feel like I could write in just the way I am.
If it is lucky, I may find a beta read for and come back to this story. The words from the fellow author, 'why do you write in English?' have been in mind and I sometimes think I should quit everything. I can't find the answer yet.
The only thing I know is I want to write something that make readers think about a better world without wars. That is my final goal and writing fanfictions is just a fun thing. Charlie's episode was born from the situation. It was really fun to write his whole life with his dragons. The story challenge of this story was given by a fellow author from the previous forums and I could learn a lot there and now I can continue here. I cannot say thank you enough, Beth and the other staffers.