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Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 18 Dec 2017 01:58 PM · [Report This]
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I have so much love for second-person perspective, I really think it adds a whole new level of personalization for the target character. I love how Luna is concerned with her N.E.W.T.s, like a diligent little Ravenclaw, and not so much with going ons and unnameable things in classrooms and snogging. Yeah, I can imagine it was difficult for those that returned to Hogwarts after the war--a bittersweet and tragic mix of nostalgia upon finally graduating, leaving behind happy memories and probably some of their worst, too. Luna's struggle to understand her asexuality is a wonderful thing to have explored, because Luna genuinley seems fulfilled and happy without any romatic relationship. She built relationships as friendships and studied and worked hard and that was perfect for her, which is the best way to live, true to yourself!

Lovely job!


Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 05 Dec 2017 02:48 AM · [Report This]
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Hey Hayden,


Just dropping by to throw a snowball. I don' know how I never reviewed this before, but here I am.


I like the vague sort of timeline of your story. I can't exactly tell when it's set up, just that it was sometime shortly after the war. I think that adds a nice touch. It keeps the story from being pigeonholed into a specific Era.


I also liked that you discussed asexuality and aromanticism in this. It's honestly not a topic I see getting discussed often, but it's definitely important. It's important for everyone to have representation in literature. 


I was happy that the main character found happiness in the end. Relationships definitely aren't everything. It sounds like she went on to accomplish quite a bit. I'm glad she had friends to help her along her way.


Good work on this.




Name: MegGonagall (Signed) · Date: 06 Oct 2017 11:47 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
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Hey Hayden! Here for the Hot Seat! 


I’ve seen this story mentioned so many times on the forums, that as soon as I saw you were in the Hot Seat, I knew I had to find this and read it. And I’m so happy I did! I can see why so many people have spoken so highly about this piece, it’s fantastic. :) 


I can’t imagine how uncomfortable it must had been for Luna, to be asked about boyfriends all during her time at school, while didn’t feel that way at all. I hate when people ask, “do you have a boyfriend/girlfriend?” or, “when are you getting married?” or, “when are you having kids?” They’re such personal questions, and you don’t know how those questions will affect someone. You can tell here that it got to Luna for a long time. 


It made me sad sad to see her take off to New York, because of that discomfort and fear of being asked that question after leaving Hogwarts. I was happy to see that she enjoyed her studies and found good friends, however. 


It was wonderful to see her finally become comfortable in her own skin, and know that there was nothing wrong with her, and she was perfect just how she is. Relationships don’t define a person, and it’s great that she finally realized “you are who you are.” 


This was truly a great piece. And honestly, I could see this being more realistically cannon than her ending up with Rolf Scamander. This just seems to align more with her character, I think. 


Wonderful job on this, love! I’m so happy I finally read it! 


Tons of love and hugs, 


Name: ShazaLupin (Signed) · Date: 30 Apr 2017 12:35 AM · [Report This]
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Hey there, here for CTF!

So this is an interesting piece, but I like it. I like how you’ve portrayed Luna and how you’ve shown us her transformation and how she’s went from being confused about love and feeling like everyone is pushing them towards it, to realising that they don’t need that type of love to be happy and she’s certainly proved that.

The part about it being graduation day and having final exams on that day confused me a little as they wouldn’t be able to graduate without having passed their exam already?

I think in the 5 years between leaving Hogwarts and going back for the reunion must have be really exciting or Luna, especially the travelling part. Her time at university doesn’t sound so fun lol. I’d love to hear more about what exactly she and her friends got up to, or even where they went while they were at University. I think it was an interesting choice to have her go to an American university, I wonder what she studied, but I suppose it makes sense with her wanting to leave Britain.

This was an interesting piece, I haven’t read many fics like it but I did enjoy it!


- Shaza :)

Name: Dojh167 (Signed) · Date: 30 Apr 2017 12:16 AM · [Report This]
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Hufflepuff CtF


I’ve always headcanoned Luna as ace, so it’s not to see a story by someone else from that perspective.


I found the phrase “off in the library doing the same thing as the former,” to be kind of clunky an interrupting the flow of the sentence. You listed three things here, with the first two being the same thing in different locations. I think it would have been just as well just to list the two most different. If you wanted to keep it this way, I’d cut out “as the former,” since you hadn’t yet listed a second activity.


Luna was at school for eight years? Did she have to repeat her whole sixth year? =(


That’s really interesting, how Luna thinks that love is what caused the war. I’d be interested in hearing more about that.


I like the structure of this, how in the first section you briefly address Luna’s feelings about sexuality, and then romance in the second section, and in the final section bring it all together.


Wow, that really stinks that Luna didn’t keep in touch with a single one of her classmates. Not even Ginny?


I kind of felt like you get a little off topic and rambly with the details about Luna’s college and roommates. While that does seem in character for Luna’s topic to meander like that, the fact that it only does so in that section and not the rest of the story makes it feel a bit out of place.


I admit, I read the very last line first (not really cheating though, as it’s the story summary too), and I expected it to end in a very sad or disconnected way. On the contrary, the paragraph before that shows that Luna does not feel sad or alone about that realization after all, and I’m happy for her for that.


There are a couple points where you stray away from present tense, such as “week away was beyond you” “they had no worries”


This was a nice little Piece. You obviously have some different headcanons for Luna than I do (I see her as a panromantic asexual), but I totally saw and believed this version of her as I read along.


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