First off, this was a fascinating fic to read :) I haven't actually read that many fics about Parvati alone; I've read tons with Parvati/Lavender, but not many about solely Parvati, so this was rather refreshing, honestly :)
That description of Parvati's secrets like seeds... wow. I have to take a moment to appreciate that beautiful analogy, and how it connects deeply to Parvati's character as someone who loves and appreciates and connects best with nature.
The serene atmosphere was created perfectly, right from the line "The forest was still." That established a sense of time slowing down, of time being stuck on this beautiful moment for a few moments before it sped up again, going way too fast. And then the descriptions of the unicorns... reading about this, I could imagine myself in Parvati's place, feeling the unicorns' warmth.
I loved how you sort of created a parallel between the secrets at the beginning of the chapter and Parvati's new secret--those secrets were dark, insiduous--they were like poison ivy in her chest. This is perahps more like a rose or, befittingly, a golden apple, something to think about fondly. I loved this idea of light v.s. dark and how that theme was built into this story.
I really enjoyed this! Thank you for sharing it with us :)
Hi :) thank you for entering my Fantastic Beast Challenge! The Forums still seem to be down with the new site, so I thought I'd come here directly with the results. I had a total of seven very good entries, and the choice was hard.
1st prize: Fantastic good-night stories by Vilja
2nd prize: Serenity in Chaos by nott theodore
3rd prize: Harry Potter and Druidic Magic (Chapter 3 The Phoenix's Song) by StarFeather
Footesteps in the Forest by Dojh167
Seemed like a good idea at the time by melian
Forest by Rhaenyra
Tengu and a Daughter of Ninja (chapter 12) by StarFeather
Here is the graphic prize I made for you: http://imgur.com/DdYpd1e
Reviews will be coming.
I have to admit, my first reaction was “But not Parvati/Lavender???” And while Femslash is always inherently superior to Not Femslash, that also made me realize that we never really get to see Parvati on her own, not attached to others. I’ve seen fics on Lavender without ships, but not Parvati. So I’ve come around to being glad that you wrote it this way.
This is highlighted well with the first line, because at that point the reader genuinely has no idea what her secrets may be, but we never knew her well enough to argue for or against that.
(okay, Good Lavender reference)
Awww, what a beautiful concept!
Hagrid is the best enabler. We never really know him to have close relationships with anyone but the trio, but I like to think there are others with whom he has a compassionate understanding. He would definitely sympathize with Parvati wanting to escape to be with the unicorns.
Hehe, I like that Parvati was surprised that Hagrid likes gentle creatures too.
I love the phrase “breathed peace into her.”
This was just so sweet and lovely all over! It was of course set in a dark context, but that was what made it so meaningful. I’m glad Parvati has something beautiful that’s all her own.
I’m not quite sure how to start this review. Like, if I could use the smiley faces like on the forums, the one with heart for eyes would definitely be a good starting point. Because this entire piece was beautiful. Like, breathtakingly beautiful.
You have such a delicate tone, one that makes this story light, despite all the bad things happening in the castle at the current point in time. You bring readers into Pavarti’s world, into the peace that comes in the forest, into the peace that accompanies the Unicorns in their home, and it was just…it was soothing, to read Pavarti going into this place she loves, and that makes her whole again. That and your word choice and imagery and just…everything seemed so well thought out, so carefully placed. It really was lovely.
I really loved Pavarti’s character as well. How she’s so honest about things, how she knows herself well enough to take a moment to take care of herself, knows that someone will be able to explain her disappearance, to understand it. She was such a great choice of character, one I never have really thought twice about, and you gave her such depth and made her real.
Really, I can’t get over any part of this. It’s so beautifully written and I’m almost sad that there isn’t more to it…
So. Before I go, I’m going to share two of my favourite lines (although there are numerous others that I loved as well!)
“[S]he sought it out and knew that it would renew her, like a phoenix rising from the ashes.”
“(except for Flobberworms. Parvati wasn't sure anyone - least of all Hagrid - had any idea what they did)”
SIAN. WHAT ARE YOU DOING, MAKING ME CRY IN 1001 WORDS?? NOT. FAIR.
This was, like everything you write, exceptionally beautiful. I wasn’t sure what to expect when I opened up the story, but I was so pleased with what I found. I don’t normally pay attention to Parvati as a character, but you’ve given her such depth here, it’s hard not to care. Just the brief mentions of her sister’s depression and her feelings for Lavender made her so human. That’s a pretty exceptional feat in a thousand and one words. I giggled a little at the mention of pixies pulling at her hair; I suppose that would be rather irritating, especially when you’re on the way to your safe place. This whole idea of Parvati wandering out into the woods to seek out the unicorns is so sweet, and again, just so human. Giving her this little tradition makes her so well rounded.
Your description was beautiful too! Not that I expected anything less. I love the way you wrote about the unicorns, I could definitely see them, in all their splendor, inside my head. I’m also impressed by your ability to make the reader empathize with Parvati, not only in her stress and angst, but in the peace she finds when visiting the unicorns. It gave me the same sort of feeling. I think this story is especially appropriate right now, considering all the awfulness that has gone on around the world recently. I think everyone could use a visit with the unicorns. Unfortunately they don’t exist, so it’s very lucky there are fics like yours to do the job for them. <3