Ah, this is so, so interesting! I'm so glad that I've stumbled upon it. Founder stories can sometimes come off as stiff, but this was just beautiful. And I like that you've made each of the founders complex, even in such a short story. Apparently, Godric Gryffindor himself wasn't honest and chivlarous through and through. Which only makes sense because, really, no one fits into a single box. And I like that this story also indirectly suggests that just because you get sorted into Gryffindor doesn't mean you're good, but more importantly, vice versa as well.
Helga Hufflepuff won my heart though. So diplomatic and is going to sleep so she can feed the mandrakes. I do love Hufflepuffs though.
This is such an interesting takeon the story behind the sword of Gryffindor and I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Hey there, Bianca! :) So I was scrolling down your page something like, read that, read that, read that... and then I got to this and realised I hadn't read it, so I thought I'd stop by :P
Honestly, this is such a great little one-shot and you've packed a lot into it. I loved the Founders together at the beginning - minus Rowena - and how their personalities came through so clearly in the first mentions of them: Helga being so polite to say 'it's shiny' when she doesn't really seem very impressed :P, Godric waving the sword around like an idiot (I mean, honestly, it's really dangerous, and kinda stupid to wave a sword around randomly to show off :P), and Salazar scoffing at Godric, disdainful and creepy with his pale face and dark hair and robes. I loved the allusion to Godric and Salazar's disagreement, though, and how Salazar eventually leaves the castle - poor Helga, she's such a peacemaker, but the boys just aren't listening to her, are they? Men :P
The whole altercation with the goblins was so good - I like how it spoke to a kind of different side of Godric, one which perhaps is less chivalrous and more sneaky, which has a certain amount of cunning and greed, and which is willing and happy to use dark magic to achieve his aims. It's an interesting characterisation of him, and one I really, really like. It makes him a really fascinating counterpoint to Salazar, even though Salazar isn't really in it.
As always your writing is so lovely. The style you use in this really manages to evoke the time period of that late medieval age, without abandoning your usual beautiful flow and style of writing - it's cleverly done and so well done.
This was a lovely, fascinating one-shot! :)
B ♥ I'm here for round 2 of the CR review swap... but I've already reviewed every chapter of THTF so I found something else on your page I hadn't read. I hope that's okay. (If it's not, then you'll have to write more Hero-verse stories so I have something to review :P )
So wow, this was a cool story. You write Founders very well! I love how well you captured their personalities despite none of them having much time in the story. And I also like how you set the time period in the relationship between the Founders - this is towards the end, perhaps, with tensions high between Salazar and Godric, and Helga hoping (in vain) that the disagreement will abate soon. Aw.
What an interesting twist on the origin of the sword as well and how the goblins think that he stole it. I imagine this was the source of a lot of the disagreements between humans and goblins throughout time - their different notions of property and ownership. I was surprised to see Godric use an unforgivable curse to ward off the goblins from stealing his sword (back?), but perhaps it wasn't always an unforgivable curse. He did seem to use it as a last resort but, wow! The honor of Gryffindor :P
The last line kind of cracked me up. Like, I have this hilarious mental image of Godric Gryffindor saying "You are mine... precioussss" in a Gollum voice and I can't unthink that.
Anyway, I really liked this - solid characterization of the Founders and what an interesting way to frame the acquisition of the famous sword. Great writing!
Hello! I'm here for MAGIC!
I absolutely love that the personalities of Helga, Gordric, and Salazar jump right at the reader in the first few paragraphs. Helga pays the sword a tentative compliment, Godric goes on to explain the detailed history of the sword, and Salazar scoffs. It's just as my headcanon says the conversation should go.
And Helga's so kind, wishing Godric a quick resolution to his difference with Salazar (which, little do they know, won't ever meet resolution).
That's so cool -- I love that there's a horde of goblins making claim to the sword, insisting that Godric actually stole the sword from Ragnuk. Wow, I wouldn't expect Godric to use an Unforgivable Curse, but I suppose they might not have been deemed Unforgivable at the time.
I also really love the idea that Godric's sword is goblin-made, and that Godric actually stole it from them for his own purposes. At first something about it seemed so...Slytherin. That is, until I realized that Godric was in it for the glory, and not the power.
So that was certainly an interesting backstory for the claiming of the Sword of Gryffindor! Overall, I really liked it -- I thought it was clever and unique, and you did an excellent job writing it!
How nice to see a founder’s fic from you! You’ve certainly got a knack for these historical-type stories. I always enjoy reading anything of yours that’s set in the past.
This was a wonderful little glimpse into the time of the founders. I love how you created the rising tension between Gryffindor and Slytherin, even though this was a very short story. It felt palpable, and it really added the story. In that vein, I think you did an excellent job of characterizing everyone, even though nobody appeared for very long. That’s a pretty fancy trick.
I also really liked how devoted Gryffindor seemed to his sword. It would have been easy to delve into silliness with that, but I really liked that you kept up the serious tone. You could tell though, that he was like, beyond proud of that sword, although one could argue that he didn’t really have much to do with it. How Gryffindor of him to show it off like he was.
I think the addition of the goblins at the end was a great way to wrap things up and drive them home. It’s always interesting to explore how goblins feel about their creations versus how humans think of material objects. You’d think that they’d have come to an agreement by now, with some official ruling as to whether goblin made objects belong to the owner after death, or if ownership reverts back to the goblin who made it. Silly wizards and their lack of economic policy.
This was a really fun story to read, I enjoyed it a lot!