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Name: Crimson Quill (Signed) · Date: 05 Dec 2017 10:30 PM · Chapter: The One Where James Knocks Me Down

Hello Tammi!

 

It's about time that I brought some love to this story. I can't wait until it's all uploaded so I can have a second binge through it! 

 

I really like this as a first chapter. I think that you do really well not to over crowd the chapter with too many introductions of characters but just go for the core characters. I loved your use of tropes in your stories because you always managed to twist them to make them your own. It's a skill, I found the whole meeting between James and Abigail to be really refreshing because James was aware of who she was for starts and Abigail didn't have some sassy af response to him. I thought it was nice way to drop him into the chapter and we already have an idea of the type of guy he is.

 

Obviously the comic books are a big thing into the story. I loved how you show how important they are to Abigail like Michelle knows to amuse herself. I like how they act as a escape for her. You do a great job at capturing her passion for them through your description of them. I think the idea of having cartoons that move and smell etc.. is so cool! I would love to read them! I do enjoy that Abigail is a dreamer that on more than one occasion other people have picked up on that!

 

I can't wait to read more of this and fall in love with Abigail and James again. 

 

<3

 

- Abbi xo 

 



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