Ok. I'm glad Simon doesn't think there's been any poisoning. This is very good news. But where is Jayne? Why haven't you mentioned him? Did he not come back yet? TAPE RECORDER BAD GUY HAS JAYNE. MAYDAY.
I love the way you described Zoe and Wash's relationship here - your explanation of why she was drawn to him and how he balances her out and fills in the cracks, is just so perfect. They are kind of an odd couple, in a way, how they're so opposite and Wash is such a clown whose "work desk" is covered in toys whereas Zoe is so serious and handles all these difficult, dangerous situations all the time, but like, that's kind of why they work - they need that balance, and I like the way you pointed that out. Also I love the line about how Zoe knows Wash can handle all these difficult things she has to face in her work, but she doesnt want him to have to. <3 I love those two. Sidenote, because I know the #1 thing you need is more plunnies (:P) have you ever thought about writing a post-Serenity fic where you bring Wash back to life? And Book? Because that'd really be the best thing ever and I know you'd be the person to do it. But I digress.
Speaking of Book, though, I really loved that scene at the end witht Zoe and Book. I know I've said this before but the way you are able to write every single character so well is absolutely impressive. You give each of them a voice that's distinct from one another and translates so perfectly into what we see from the characters on the show. All of their speech patterns, habits, everything, you've picked up on all of it and it's all in here and it just makes the story come to life like a real episode of the show. And what fanfiction adds to that is the abilty to see what the characters are thinking - reading Zoe's thoughts and how she kind of holds in all this emotion until she's by herself and in Wash's pilot chair really fits with her character, and being inside her head adds another dimension to a character who's already well defined.
It's late and I think I might just e rambling instead of making sense :P, but this was a great chapter. Thanks for reminding me to get back to the story :) I' really enjoyed this chapter!
Jayne is there - I just...um...forgot to mention him. Really. He's fine. That's an author's error that I didn't say anything earlier. I never thought people would assume something had happened to him.
Like I said - it took me a while to figure that out. At first I didn't get it. But now I really love it - this relationship between two people that shouldn't work, but does because THEY WANT IT TO.
Writing a Post fic? I've thought about it, but honestly, probably won't ever do it. I have a friend who wrote what I consider the ultimate fix-it fic, and I'm not sure I could ever think of it any other way. My solution at this point is usually to just pretend it didn't happen rather than try to fix it.
Again with the blushing - you gotta stop this. I'm gonna have a big head!
Thanks so much! I love your reviews! Maybe they will help me figure out and finish this story.
Turns out I had a lot more chapters to catch up on :P Also I just remembered that I promised you a banner for this like, three months ago. I will get on that soonish. :P
I know that you told me some details of this fic when I met you, but fortunately for you my memory is a sieve and I have forgotten, which means I get to be shocked about all of these plot twists all over again. XD So, let's just say that I have no idea who this man is who left the tape. But one of the first things he said on the tape ( I suppose I should give a little apology to Zoë for the manner in which I returned her spouse, but then again, my mama always taught me it ain't polite to say things ya don't mean.) honestly sounds a lot like something Mal would say, and it got me to thinking that Mal and this unseen tape-recording bad guy are reasonably well matched in terms of outsmarting each other. I have to give Unseen Bad Guy some credit, even though he's a despicable human being and he hurt Wash (which I will not forigve him for), but he is a brilliant strategist and knows exactly how to get to Mal. I mean, he's even telling Mal his strategy, as he knows it will just irritate Mal even more. I have to appreciate a Bad Guy who will tell his whole strategy to their enemy because they're just so confident that it will work. And so far... it is.
But... he poisoned Wash! Not okay! They wasted a lot of time listening to that tape... all part of Unseen Bad Guy's strategy to delay them as long as possible, I assume.
Okay, but I have a nervous feeling about the end. I know it's important to get back to Wash as soon as possible, and yes Jayne can take care of himself, but.... . . . . . THERE IS LITERALLY A GUY TRYING TO ATTACK YOUR CREW AND YOU JUST WNET INTO HIS LAIR AND RAN OUT AND YOU NEED TO MAKE SURE YOU ARE ALL THERE. And because I know you'd not let them get away easy. I bet you can feel my distrustful side eye all the way from here. Be nice to these characters please :P
Hey no worries! I know what life is like! The fact that you are reading this story makes me so happy. :)
Someday, if you want this story to be finished, however, you're gonna have to help me plot...LOL.
I do like what you are thinking - that they sound kind of the same, and are rather well matched. I do remember that being important, back when I was writing this. I shall have to sit down and re-examin what this means...
And it does mean a lot that you like my Bad Guy - even though it's been so long he doesn't really feel like MY bad guy anymore. If you know what I mean.
Don't worry, Jayne is fine. He's a big boy - can take care of himself. hehehe. But I'm touched you worried about him.
Aw. I love the little sentimentality we see here when Zoe gets Wash's Hawaiian shirt to bring back for him because it's his favorite, even though it's really not important to their mission there. That's really sweet. :)
And the progression of 'let's sneak in quiet-like' to 'let's just explode that gorram door' is so very Firefly. It's so easy to visualize. Perfect. XD
Also, I'm very convinced they're walking into a trap, or at least something that was intended to be found. Don't put Vera away for a second, Jayne! I'm reallly wondering where everyone is... *bites nails*
Great chapter, as always!
When I first watched this show, I really didn't see what made Zoe and Wash work. It puzzled me. But after watching this thing a half-dozen times, I see it now. And I love to throw these little things in to show Zoe as a wife and a woman and not just a soldier. It makes me love them even more.
That progression was fun! It's fun to write characters who don't always care about the rules. They blow things up and don't feel bad. hehehe
Don't bite your nails! You need those! I promise it will be okay...mostly.
I'M BACK I'M BACK! Don't worry, I haven't forgotten about this story. Just didn't have internet for a while - you know how it is.
(first things first: I think chapters 4 and 5 are the same chapter (3)? or maybe my internet connection is acting up. Anyway, I don't think that was intentional so just letting you know.)
But now onto the actual review! Once again, this is really great. You get into the minds of these characters so well - it's like I'm reading the screenplay for a lost episode. In particular, Mal - everything from the way he talks to the way he thinks about his crew, you've really gotten into his head and can write him so perfectly, even the really subtle nuances of things like how he asked Wash to tell him what happened and was friendly about it but it really wasn't a request. And how he knows and recognizes the abilities of each of his crew members and is very protective of them. AND, Wash trying to hide the fact that the person who hurt him did so to get to Mal because he knows how Mal will react. like, the interplay between the characters is just so well done. I know I gush about this on every review I leave for you, but that's just because it's so true.
And yet, they beat the tar outta ya -- Haha... I feel like he could have had better word choice. Tar? :P
Okay. I'm so ready for Zoe and Mal and Jayne to get their revenge. (well, for Jayne maybe it's not as much revenge as a chance to beat up a bad guy, but either way, the three of them have some hard work to do.) Also, I feel bad for Wash, who just after he's finished getting beat up and tar and feathered and then had to sit through having it all peeled off, now he has to sit and worry that something similarly awful is going to happen to his wife. Poor guy. :-/ He deserves a vacation after all this.
I worry about you when you don't have internet. It usually means you are off doing things that threaten your toes or arms and legs, or other things. You gotta stay safe out there in that world, please!
Hopefully I got the chapter glitch fixed, but if it's still there, let me know.
And I can't tell you enough how much it means that you like this story, and think I'm doing a good job with the characters! And Mal is the hardest one - so I'm totally blushing here! And I don't know what to say to this praise. I'm blushing.
Yeah, that was probably a poor word choice - tar... But, we know they aren't subtle, so I guess we'll forgive them.
I'm afraid the beating up of bad guys won't happen for a bit. It's part of that mess I need to work out. If you have any ideas, please tell me!
Thanks! Love your reviews!
Poor Wash. What happened to him is just awful and it's so sad to see him suffering like that, because Kaylee's right - he's literally the most easygoing person on the crew and it's hard to imagine him getting on anyone's bad side. But of course, it's not him that they're after... and that makes me worry if anyone else is going to get hurt because clearly the attackers don't care who they hurt on their way to Mal.
Your character portrayals are stellar throughout. I really love the depth you pointed out to the friendship between Kaylee and Wash, which I don't remember being mentioned significantly in the show, but your spin on it makes a lot of sense.
Btw, I hope you've got more of this story up your sleeve - I really want to know what happens and this is such a great start! So glad I found this. :)
I am rather mean to him here, aren't I. He is too nice to be suffering.
Yep. They are after Mal. And I used to know why. I still kinda do, but I didn't take very good notes. Gonna need to untangle this fic a bit to get it going again. As for if others will get hurt....*evil grin* I DO remember that part.
Again with the blushing! Seriously, you are gonna give me a big head!
I'm not sure the friendship between Wash and Kaylee is exactly canon, but I like to think it is. They are both pashionate about the same thing.
I DO have some more of this. I got up to 11 chapters before I got stopped. I didn't finish putting them up here because no one was reading it and I figured it could wait until some other stuff went up. BUT, if you're gonna read, I'd be happy to add them.
Thanks again! You made my whole day!
FIREFLY FIC??? I AM HERE
Oh no! Wash! Why is someone punching him? Stop! :(
She looked like an angel, if angels wore revolvers strapped to their thighs and terror-inducing scowls on their faces. -- this is perfection
This is a great prologue. I don't think it's weird that you made up your own planet -there's so many planets it makes perfect sense that the show didn't cover all of them. Also, you've got the dialogue and mannerisms of the characters down so perfectly - not that this is surprising, because I've learned by now that you're very talented at writing characters to a T - and so far this does feel like it could be a lost episode of the show. I can't wait to read on.
Oh wow! What an amazing surprise to get today! I hope you know these totally made my day!
:D You liked that description of Zoe? Thanks!
And such compliments. I'm blushing to my roots. You are way too kind to me. Thank you so much for reading! I'm extactic to have someone onboard for this! Maybe it will make me finish it!