I was drinking my tea in peace and I snorted it all over my keyboard when i read this:"Absolutely nothing happens. Your flobberworm stays exactly where it is, munching on a grass blade, totally unaware that he should move and reach the finishing line."
You masterfully used the built up suspence to trick you audience but really, it was so funny I'm not even mad! that's what I get for never reading the titles!
Anyway, I loved how you used the second person (I'm terrible at it, so I'm rightfully floored by your piece) and the chorus of "shut up, rosie" felt so wonderfully Weasly clan that my heart melted.
Honestly, this was too cute! And, well, James Sirius being his usual prat is just what I need everyday.
Albus, don't give up! One day, you'll win!
also, small thing: What did you do to dirt you this way? i'm not sure that's how they say it, i would see it better as "how did you manage to get so dirty?" or something similar.
Other than that, this was hilarious! thank you for requesting <3
This is absolutely adorable! I love the idea of Albus trying to race flobberworms against James! It's such a silly thing to do and is absolutely perfect for the kids, as Al is taking it oh-so-seriously (though, I have heard that flobberworm racing can be some serious business)! I also thoroughly love how enthusiastic Lily is for Al to win! Go, Al, go! Victoire and Teddy arguing in the background is also quite funny.
What's even better is that neither of the flobberworms actually did anything at the start of match. Rose chiming in, of course, with the I-told-you-so seemed extremely fitting, given that she is Hermione's daughter, afterall.
Then, of course, the aftermath, when the kids come home filthy, is quite funny as well. I absolutely love how James jumps in with some fantastical story that he's concocted as to how he had become so dirty. And, of course, their sister wasn't there for the 'interesting part', after the 'boring' flobberworm race. And grounded. Ah, childhood.
This was perfectly cute and funny!
Hi again, dear!
Aww, I'm so glad you found this adorable... Ahahah! Yes, flobberworm races are very serious! :P Poor Albus just wanted to show that he was equal to his older brother (which I guess is sort of adorable). So glad you also liked Lily cheering for Al and Victoire and Ted arguing in the background. :)
Ahahah! Yes, as serious as the children might find the race, I doubt the flobberworms would... :P And yes, Rose is just like her mother. :P
I'm so glad you enjoyed the aftermath as well, and James telling his adventurous cover up story. :P
Thank you so much for the review, glad you enjoyed this!
This story is hilarious and precious!
What funny kids, all so excited about a flobberworm race! I mean, did they think it would be any more exciting than normal flobberworms? XD I love that in the end James and Albus end up very amused with the day’s antics.
I’m used to seeing Rose as quite the adventurous or defiant one, but the Rose in this story clearly takes after her mother’s rule following ways, apparently to her siblings’ annoyance.
You did a great job of bringing all of the children and their vibrant personalities to life, however briefly. There was a lot of them, but you still captured them with little details, like Teddy and Victoire fighting.
Baha, I don’t know who’s more disappointed - Ginny over the fact that they made a mess and lied, or Harry that the excuse was so much more boring than a dragon. James super animatedly telling the story was very cute.
Hi again, Sam! :P
Ahahah! I'm so happy you ejoyed this little episode! :) It is quite silly to imagine that anything exciting could come from trying to race flobberworms, but this is what children do, isn't it?
I'm glad you liked Rose, I like to imagine her very alike her mother. Yes, she would be quite annoying for her cousins. :P I'm also glad you could see the different personalities, even if it's only brief introductions.
Ahahah! I daresay Ginny was more disappointed, I think Harry was actually quite amused by everything. :P Happy you found James telling the story cute! :)
Thank you so much!
I quite enjoyed this short story and it shows the differences between the boys quite clearly. It also shows how different Lily is from the boys, with their vivid imaginations and desire to avoid punishment for their crime of getting dirty.
I also quite like Harry just taking it in stride. He remembers what it was like to be a little boy and I think wishes that he could have had a more normal childhood like his kids are having.
The flobberworm race also rings true for anyone who's caught an animal and tried to make it race with another. Untrained animals do what animals do, usually, and you did a great job showing that.
I also enjoy Teddy and Victoire arguing in the background.
Hi, Pookha! I'm taking some time today to reply reviews. :D
I'm happy you decided to read this, it's a piece that I wrote very quickly for the House Cup on HPFF but it's nice to receive some feedback on it. :)
I don't write next-gen often, but I do think the Potter siblings are a funny bunch. I'm happy you enjoyed their characterization, even in this little piece alone! :) Ahahah! They do have quite a vivid imagination! :P
Okay... I'm not exactly sure what "taking it in stride" means... *couch* but I'm so happy you liked Harry, too.
I remember that my friends and I used to do this with snails when we were little, and it didn't quite work, eheheh! :P
Glad you also enjoyed Teddy and Victorie! :D
Thank you for the sweet review!
Chiii! I love this so much! The idea of James and Albus trying to race flobberworms is so funny. Even more boring than a snail race! I love how quickly everyone else got bored, and I love how James tried to create this huge story to cover up what they were really doing. So sweet <3
Thank you, B! I'm so glad you enjoyed reading this!
Yeah, definitely boring! :P James would never admit that they were doing something that boring, would he?
Thank you for stopping by, I'm so glad you enjoyed reading this! *hug* *wub*