I loved this take (however sad it is) on how Sirius was disowned from the Black family (not that that was necessarily a bad thing for Sirius)(also, I need to read Breathe). I also appreciated that it was a little dive into Regulus mind. Terrified of his parents--even fearful of his mother knowing that he was lying to her--Regulus was truly hoping for the best for Sirius (though his upbringing had incorrectly taught him that a boy loving another boy was unnatural) when he did, eventually, tell his mother about seeing Sirius kiss another boy. I have a terrible soft spot for Regulus and this paints him close to how I imagine him in relation to Sirius: missing his brother, regretful, afraid, and misinformed. The ending, of course, was so heartbreaking, as Regulus' last thoughts went to a memory of Sirius, when they loved each other...when they were still happily brothers...family.
This was fantastic (and very sad)!
I'm really glad you enjoyed my take on this. It's a headcanon I hold really strongly, so I'm always happy when people find that I made it believable. :) Thanks for reading, and for the lovely review!
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Oh, my Kayla, is the last scene the end of Reg? It's so dramatic. I've never expected this after chapter 5 of Breathe. You portrayed brother's love so beautifully. I have a kind of soft spot around Regulus who worked for Voldemort once and changed his mind later. If the story you set were real, I'd like to read the process how Reg joined the inner circle of Voldemort and how he managed to betray him. (I request you to write the episode about the investigation of Reg's mysterious death led by Sirius who might join Auror training with Remus and James...okay I don't pester you. :p)
The description about his mother made me chill. Could she do legilimens upon Reg? She made him feel a rock dropped into the pit of his stomach and he just wanted everyone to stop fighting. How awful mother Walburga was.
I wish they had a chance to tell their true feeling, to show love as a sibling each other before they died.
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Hi Kenny! My apologies for the late response!
Yes! You're right about the last scene. I too have a huge soft spot for Regulus, and I think his story is one of the most interesting ones in Harry Potter!
Haha, I don't know if I'll ever write that Auror story specifically, but I do have 2 stories planned which will touch on similar themes!
Walburga is really terrible. She's one of my least favourite characters.
I wish that too :( It really breaks my heart that Sirius never knew the truth about Regulus' death, and never found out how brave his brother actually was.
Thanks so much for the lovely review, Kenny!
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Oooof course I get the fic that’s “as dark as it’s going to be”
Solid use of second person narrative here - it really makes the story feel like it’s an internal running monologue, which seems to be what you were going for.
I did get confused with the line “You just what?” It wasn’t clear to me if the “you” was directed towards Sirius like most of the story, or if it was directed towards Regulus.
Oh wait this story is From Regulus’ perspective. Oh! The world makes sense again. I had assumed that Sirius was the main character.
It’s kind of funny seeing Walburga’s voice referred to as “reasonably calm” after all the maniacal screeching we are used to hearing from the portrait at grimmauld place XD
I find Regulus’ loyalty to Sirius touching, both in the past and the present. It’s a very quiet kind of loyalty that’s common to siblings - where you care about your sibling, but in a way that they are totally unaware of. I think you’ve captured that well here, showing the distant bond between the brothers in their different worlds.
“You know I hate it when you make me use spells on you.” ugh ugh no no awful woman!
“your brave, stubborn, prideful, stupid big brother” Yup, that; Sirius Black in a nutshell.
This really breaks my heart. I can’t blame Sirius for being angry with Regulus, but I also can’t blame Regulus for trying to survive in an abusive household. It’s an awful situation all around. Just be friend brothers and nobody dies! I don’t see why that’s too much to ask.
I honestly wasn’t sure whether or not you were going to tie this in with Regulus’ death, but you did because you are a very rude person who wants to hurt my feelings.
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Hey Sam! Sorry for the late response, haha :P
A running internal monologue is definitely what I was going for, and I'm super happy that you think I pulled it off! This was my first attempt at second person and I was really nervous about it. I've done it more since then, but I'm always way more worried about it than third person!
Ahahaha it cracked me up that you assumed the story was from Sirius's POV. That definitely wouldn't be at all out of character, would it?
Urgh I really wish Sirius and Regulus could have reconciled before Regulus died. But at the same time, Regulus died doing the thing that would've made Sirius believe he was worth reconciling with. At the very least, I wish Sirius had learned what had really happened to Regulus. Because I really agree with the stuff you said about their relationship, and it's so upsetting to me that Sirius never knew his brother changed.
Sorry for being so rude ;) but thank you very much for the review!