Hey, Meg, my dear!
Dialogue only is an extremely difficult challenge (but a terrific writing exercise)! I think the biggest challenge is conveying emotion through speech as well as determining who's speaking without the use of dialogue tags and I really think you did an excellent job of nailing both of those things. I love how Albus can immediately tell something's wrong with Scorpius--they seem to have a pretty strong connection in this and I think that's fantastic! Scorpius' nervous and anxious rambling about his withheld confessions and Rose's advice is adorable--poor Scorpius seems like he's had to build himself up for this moment for a while, and it is probably one of the most terrifying things that he's ever done! He even tries to divert the conversation a little with a bit of weather small talk. That's probably something I would do, like, I have something serious I need to tell you but would you look at that rain! I loved how Scorpius immediately regretted his decision to tell Albus that he loved him without giving Albus time to process it. He's so panicky, and I can't say that I blame him at all! Intertwining a kiss was a really neat effect, especially given that you did it using only dialogue. This was sweet and fluffy and I loved it!
Ahem. Sorry. Just had to get that out there.
This story cropped up under the "Random Story" section on the archive and I couldn't resist checking it out. Dialogue stories are so hard to get right, but I think you've absolutely nailed it with this one! It's so perfect and adorable, and, though I'm more of a ScoRose shipper than a Scorbus one, this hilarious bit of conversation between the two hits all the feels and suddenly I don't have a care in the world about Rose! I can just picture awkward Scorpius lurking uncomfortably in the doorway of the dormitory, and Albus probably lounging on his four-poster, wondering what on earth is the matter with his friend.
I'm so glad I dropped by; this was SUCH a cute read! :)
So this was adorable, and you made it super easy to follow. The anxiety and the "oh DAMNIT why did I say anything FFS" was just so on point. I have felt that way So Often, and like Scorpius, I always leap to that assumption immediately. (I think I actually once told a friend I was into them and then inadvertently ignored multiple attempts on their part to indicate that it was reciprocal. I am such a fail as a human being.)
I <3 you and your writing, you are the best.
So I'm transferring reviews (as you know) and I was so sure I'd read this one, and when I checked I'd reviewed it as Squirtle, so that's all the review said, hahaha! I'd better leave a proper one.
Anyway, brilliant story. Sweet damn I love Scorbus. I did the dialogue challenge too so I know what a struggle it was, but I think you've done an amazing job. So much emotion came through even without dialogue tags, and that's not easy to do!
Sorrynotsorry for stalking! Love Bianca <3