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Name: FredWeasleyIsMyKing (Signed) · Date: 28 Jun 2017 08:52 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Keeping Vigil Chapter: Keeping Vigil

Hey Kayla!

 

Transferring from HPFF!

You start off so innocently. I know I know they're dead and that's really sad but it could be worse. They're in their cottage, they have family.

Then. You ruin it *lip trembles* The nursery is also their and so the poor couple are reminded constantly of what happened and what they've lost. Kayla! Yes, it's good Harry survived but poor James and Lily :(

It's so painful to read Lily sitting in the nursery every day. I just want to reach into the screen and give her a hug.

The pond. That's a clever idea so they can see what's going on in life. But oh, the pain James goes through because of Sirius! Arh, this story is too much to take.

Okay, the argument is heartbreaking but very realistic. With what they're going through it's not surprising in the slightest that this is what it's going to boil down to. I think it was almost needed to get the two of them talking and understanding. To clear the tension. It was well written and you kept them in character - James defending Peter to the end. Poor Harry. Stuck with the Dursleys. James has a point and Lily knows it.

The ending. Eugh. Yes they will be alright. They have to be alright? I have to believe that. They have each other and Harry will be alright in the end.

You really shouldn't feel insecure about this - it's brilliant! I loved it!

Lauren



Author's Response:

(i think your review posted twice ;) )



Name: FredWeasleyIsMyKing (Signed) · Date: 28 Jun 2017 08:52 PM · starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Keeping Vigil Chapter: Keeping Vigil

Hey Kayla!

 

Transferring from HPFF!

You start off so innocently. I know I know they're dead and that's really sad but it could be worse. They're in their cottage, they have family.

Then. You ruin it *lip trembles* The nursery is also their and so the poor couple are reminded constantly of what happened and what they've lost. Kayla! Yes, it's good Harry survived but poor James and Lily :(

It's so painful to read Lily sitting in the nursery every day. I just want to reach into the screen and give her a hug.

The pond. That's a clever idea so they can see what's going on in life. But oh, the pain James goes through because of Sirius! Arh, this story is too much to take.

Okay, the argument is heartbreaking but very realistic. With what they're going through it's not surprising in the slightest that this is what it's going to boil down to. I think it was almost needed to get the two of them talking and understanding. To clear the tension. It was well written and you kept them in character - James defending Peter to the end. Poor Harry. Stuck with the Dursleys. James has a point and Lily knows it.

The ending. Eugh. Yes they will be alright. They have to be alright? I have to believe that. They have each other and Harry will be alright in the end.

You really shouldn't feel insecure about this - it's brilliant! I loved it!

Lauren



Author's Response:

(transferred from hpff)

 

"Hey Lauren! Thank you so much for the lovely review - even though you caught the flag ;) I'm glad you liked this!"

 

hahah that's kind of a sad review response, so here's more!

 

muahaha i love to start of innocent and then ruin things. >:D

 

i'm honestly still not quite sure how i managed to come up with the pond, but i'm glad i did - this story wouldn't be the same at all without it, and besides, the whole story came about through the idea of james witnessing sirius's arrest.

 

i'm really glad you thought james and lily were in character. i hadn't written them in years and years when i wrote this story.

 

really glad you enjoyed this story, lauren <3

 

-kayla



Name: StarFeather (Signed) · Date: 04 Jun 2017 02:21 AM · starstarstarstar [Report This]
Story:Keeping Vigil Chapter: Keeping Vigil

Hi, Kayla! Transferring my old review, I reread and made sure again that your description is great!

 

" Hi, I'm from forums to see your finishing banner for this story.

 

When I read the fist part of your story, which reminded me of reading the other author's work that was about the world after Severus Snape died, Lily lead him to pass the test to purify his soul. Of course your story is different, and your way to describe about Potter's heaven after the death of Lily and James is unique.

From the pond, they could see the world they left, which is very sad and nobody wrote about it, I think. What I felt sad most, the part where James screamed choked by the beginning of the tears. I felt sad when I read Lily's grief. But I felt stirred with sorrow most by his grief.

 

Totally, it's a good one-shot. If it's longer, it'll be better, I think. (19th March 2015) "

 

I now changed my mind. ^ The length of this story is good. :P I like the first scene, the description of their cottage after their life. And I'm very impressed by the way how you expressed about Lily's mind movement by writing in each short sentence, which gave me a strong impression from the start. Rereading James Potter's regret is so sad. I noticed the whole one-shot is a beautiful piece of your work full of sorrow.

 

Kenny



Author's Response:

transferred from hpff

 

"Hi Kenny! Thank you very much for the lovely review :)

Actually, the part with James screaming for Sirius was what inspired this entire story, so it was perhaps the most developed idea in here. Maybe that's why it was more effective!

I'm swamped at the minute, but I'm considering writing another fic in this universe when I have the time.

Thanks again for the review!"

 

Ahaha, I'm glad you changed your mind after rereading. I could probably make a few changes, but it's not really my priority right now. So it's good to hear that it's enjoyable the way it is. :) Thanks for giving me an update!

 

-Kayla



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